Date: May 23, 2014 12:48 am Title: Chapter 5: Game of Spades
Awww they talked it over. It's about time lol. I'm glad that Raine took her mother's advice because it takes two to tango and the both of them were wrong so it's good that Raine opened her eyes to see things from Michael's point of view. The interation with Raine and Michael playing cards against her family was adorable. I could imagine Michael asking questions while trying to learn the concept of the game. Anyway this was a cute update.
P. S. Longer chapters/shorter chapters it doesn't matter to me. Either way they will get read lol.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review lady!!!!😫🙌
Yeah, having both of them continuously blame each other wouldn't have gotten them anywhere.Sometimes you just have to let the last be in the past so you can move forward. Hopefully, they have it together now.
Date: May 19, 2014 10:38 pm Title: Chapter 1: Life In Iran
The sequel!!??? Whoop whoop!
Ok soooo ughhhshjdjjeje Michael why you had to do Raine like that? I know he's a man and everything but still, we woman are emotional creatures and a promise like that means so much to us. She is hurt. I know it's going to take some time to forgive him, but I don't doubt her love for him or his love for her. I think she may say she needs time though..the wound is still kinda fresh.
Oh and when he said, "I want you there when I look to my left. I need you to be there...", did you get that from The Jackson's: an American dream when Michael was talking to Jermaine about leaving the group? And he was all like, "But how can I look to my left and not see you there?" lol sorry if I'm way left field but my mind jumped to that part when Michael said that to Raine lol.
ANYWAY, great job so far! I LOOOVE IT!
Author's Response:
Hola!!!!!
Im im glad you're enjoying the story so far! That when I look to my left line was just something I thought up. I noticed during most of MJ's solo tours he would exit stage left so I figured that's where his girl would be waiting if she were to accompany him. Haha. Maybe I should have said I got it from the movie. That would have been much cooler lol!
Date: May 19, 2014 05:27 am Title: Chapter 4: What Do You Say?
PLZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ COTINUE this was so emotional for me plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz be his raine plzzzzzzzzz
Date: May 19, 2014 05:27 am Title: Chapter 4: What Do You Say?
PLZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ COTINUE this was so emotional for me plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz be his raine plzzzzzzzzz
Date: May 18, 2014 09:26 pm Title: Chapter 4: What Do You Say?
Michael can't expect her to make a commitment like that yet. At this point I think they need to take it one day at a time. Glad he's still persisting though, she'll give in eventually. She knows damn well that she loves that man to death. And vice versa. They need each other.
And he's a wreck without her isn't he? It sounds like he went through some shit while she was away. Maybe if he tells her more about it she'll understand. She's inferring things about what happened that aren't true due to lack of information. I got the sense from the chapter that he only slept with the skanky chick once and it was during the time where they lost contact, and he regretted it immediately. Who the fuck knows if he was even sober when he did it. Either way it doesn't sound like it's a pleasant memory for him. And she has to give him some credit for being honest with her.
Will you explain why Raine stopped writing to him? I'm wondering what caused her to drop out of contact.
Date: May 17, 2014 10:38 am Title: Chapter 3: 3T
I knew she was still mad but dang lol she swerved the mess out of him. They have so much tension and I love it. Of course you can't expect for everything to just fall back into play when they've been apart from each other for years. But I wonder how long it's gonna take before they really have this serious talk about how they feel and just let everything go (specifically for Raine). Anyway, loved it! It's like a forbidden love lol
Author's Response:
Girl, if she gave in just like that, I would look at her differently because it'd make her seem like she doesn't have a backbone. We all know she does, like seriously, look at what she's gone through. It's gonna take a lot for her to just give in just like that, ya know. She may love him but Michael has to work for her love. He better get ready for it girl. I'm tellin' ya.
Forbidden Love? Ooooh I like that! Lol
love ya twin!
Date: May 16, 2014 03:39 pm Title: Chapter 3: 3T
I forgot to add, I agree with the last reviewer. I'm really depressed now.
Date: May 16, 2014 03:38 pm Title: Chapter 3: 3T
Michael had better not give up. I don't like that he handed back the necklace so easily. You are the one who screwed up buddy, now the ball is in your court to win her back. I think Raine just needs time and for Michael to show her how much he loves her, and she'll forgive him. I mean, she didn't even communicate with him at all for at least 2 years right? That wasn't his choice, and it wasn't his choice that she enlisted in the first place. Sometimes circumstances that suck do just happen. He's still more to blame though because he didn't keep his word. She did.
Date: May 16, 2014 03:15 pm Title: Chapter 3: 3T
i was so motional when i read this and the fact that michael lost his virginity to someonelse .it makes me so mad!!! i wanna punch him in his face ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh i wanna punch him in the face so badddd but i love to much to ever do that to him he's my boo:) this chapter is so sad:(:(:(::((:(:(:(:(:(:(:(:( she's mad about the virginity thing i feel so depressed.plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz continue!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!):):):):):):):)):):)::)):):):)::)):):)):):)::)):)::))):):)
Date: May 16, 2014 02:58 pm Title: Chapter 3: 3T
Great chapter girl, can't wait for more (:
Date: May 16, 2014 02:52 pm Title: Chapter 3: 3T
yes!! dont let him off easy. he fouled up and he dont deserve her..at least not at the moment.
Date: May 14, 2014 11:52 pm Title: Chapter 2: Missed
Awww they're reunited again. That's cute. Of course Janet had to ruin the moment by barging in lol but it was all for little Auggie so she's excused this time. Sad that Michael didn't keep his promise but that was a lot to be asking of him anyway knowing who he is. Not really an excuse but those Billie Jeans can be tempting at times. But yea, I'm glad they got the chance to reconnect for this one little moment before she has to leave again.
Date: May 14, 2014 11:36 pm Title: Chapter 1: Life In Iran
This is an interesting start. I see Raine is adjusting to the military life although it's coming with it's trials and tribulations. I can't even imagine how she felt after getting shot by a child and then also having to murder a child.
I like how she and Michael are still staying in touch although the words that they send back and forth to one another aren't many.
I feel like Bill knows that Michael still has a soft spot for Raine even if he's trying not to show it.
Anyway, can wait to see how the story plays out a86;a039;
Date: May 12, 2014 02:18 pm Title: Chapter 1: Life In Iran
I can't wait to see what the future holds for these two
Date: May 12, 2014 07:03 am Title: Chapter 1: Life In Iran
I'm glad you decided to continue this story, it's really good! The way it is written is so realitic and the plot feels like real life. The ending of Army Brat was brilliant but so sad, so I'm glad that we will be able to see these two together again.
Gotta say I'm disappointed in Michael for breaking his promise. I know it isn't very realistic but when the last story ended I was hoping he would keep it. He did say he would wait for her after all, even though she didn't expect him to :( I know she was gone a long time but a promise is a promise.
Raine is a better woman than me. Not saying she shouldn't forgive him, but she didn't even seem to flinch. I don't think I could get over it as fast as she did, especially seeing as she seems to have kept up her end of the deal. When they were talking and he was all like "I'm not sure I loved them because I couldn't stop thinking of you the entire time you were gone." I would have been like "well you obviously weren't thinking of me while fucking them." If he wasn't sure he loved them he really shouldn't have slept with them. Raine even said that in her last letter, if someone replaces her in his heart he had her blessing. It's the fact that it seems like nobody really did, and he still broke the promise that upsets me.
That's life, I guess. At least he was honest with her upfront. But the hopeless romantic in me wants to kick him.
Author's Response:
Hi! I'm glad to hear that you enjoyed Army Brat! It was a pleasure writing it.
I get what you're saying about the promise between the two but remember it's been a while since she's even spoken to her family due to her duties. The last time the even communicated was in 1985. Her mother was the only person she kept steady contact with. So who knows what Michael actually thought about her not remaining in contact with him.
Honestly, I couldn't be in Raine's position myself. I get upset and a grey rather easily, but if you haven't noticed, Raine is a little more subtle...she tolerates a lot but she'll distance herself. She may just do that with Michael. Especially, since the promise was something that meant a lot. A lot more than Michael's realizedz