Date: Feb 16, 2016 09:26 pm Title: Chapter 7 - Part 7: Year 7
Wow!
Date: Feb 15, 2016 06:25 pm Title: Chapter 6 - Part 6: Year 6
Did she kill herself?
Date: Feb 15, 2016 04:38 pm Title: Chapter 5 - Part 5: Year 5
Good job!
Date: Feb 14, 2016 04:57 pm Title: Chapter 3- Part 3: Year 3
Wow! Maybe this storyline may have some aspects of truth to them. Anything is possible. You have some good ideas. They are very interesting. People would be interested in reading stories like this. Correct the spelling errors, and it becomes an interesting story to read. Keep writing!
Date: Feb 13, 2016 10:18 pm Title: Chapter 2:- Part 2: Year 2
This is shocking but not surprising.
Date: Feb 13, 2016 09:26 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Part 1: Year 1
I enjoyed reading your story. Please write more.
[Report This]Date: Nov 02, 2013 06:09 am Title: Chapter 4- Part 4: Year 4
The Halloween and Valentine's Day parts were my favorites! XDXD I gotta admit, during the Halloween part she was acting a bit more thoughtful, which I liked. And Michael was being super sweet on Valentine's Day. I love it! :-))))))
[Report This]Date: Nov 01, 2013 01:53 am Title: Chapter 2:- Part 2: Year 2
I don't like the MG. It seems like Michael,s the one giving all the love while she's just recieving it. Even on Christmas after MJ going to the trouble of decorating her room beautifully, she still complained about not having a present. -_- Not to mention she seems so unloving to Prince and Paris. She acts like more of a babysitter than someone who's supposed to be a loving mother figure. I mean I know she isn't their actual mother but she seems to rarely show any real sorts of affection to them, and can't say I favor that. Anyways I don't like thfis MG but great chapter.:-)))
Author's Response:
Wow That is the first time anyone told me that I don't think so but you see there is WaY ore to the story she changes
Oh on CHristmas... That she for one is moody and hormonal because she was Pregnant... she wasn't complaing sh loved it and thought it was amazing.
and his gift to her was her Family coming
Babysiter? How do you gather she was actting like ababy sister...
This is what I'm going to say to that, she and Michael have a history. One yet to be explained and won't be eplained in this one but will be explained in Moment 2 she has a lot of insecurities that he will call her out on... but as far as the kids she is is going to do something in the coming chapers that is going to prove how much she loves and cares for the kids
But I mean look at how she took care of Michael and the kids when they all got the flu
and how she was aware enough to do the party and make Paris Wendy in the renacment of Peter Pan
No I know you don't see her on on one with the kids but you haven't gotten into the meat of the story alot more antics happen and more interaction with the kids on her part be patent more to come you'll gain more understaing of the main character as the story progressses
[Report This]Date: Oct 29, 2013 08:10 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Part 1: Year 1
This story is excellent!!! I would really really enjoy it more if the words were spaced out a lot more, its extremeley difficult to read it like this. Other than that, I like it!:-)))
Author's Response:
yeah there is a eplintion for that
this is a story from WAY back 2010 back I orinally posted it on Mchael jackson offical site a lot of fiction was on there but they figured out how sexually graphic we were bing so they started roving all the good parts of the story or making us remove them or removing our chapters
so I ened up moving all my fiction from there to a blog when i did that they removed ALL my spacing
but that explan the spacing and the length of the chapters
chapters were long 1 because I wanted eac year to be it's own chapter and the orfinal format of th MJsite coul mostly writ on the same topic as slong as i wanted till I reached word limit so in turn all chapters were REALLY long
I might tey to se what i can do about the spaing tomarrow but hack for reading
[Report This]Date: Oct 29, 2013 05:38 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Part 1: Year 1
First of (I haven't read this yet but I plan on in a bit lol) You are....WOW! Over 3,000 words in each chapter? That's really amazing! Go you! :-))) Anyways, off to the first chapter!
Date: Oct 31, 2012 06:02 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Part 1: Year 1
I REALLY LOVED THIS STORY IT WAS INTERESTING, INTRIGUING & CAPTIVATINGLY AMAZING !!!!
[Report This]Date: Aug 29, 2011 02:25 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Part 1: Year 1
very interesting would love to see how the story and their relationship progresses :)
Author's Response:
next chapter is up