[Report This]Date: May 22, 2016 05:33 pm Title: Episode 5: The CodeMaker Case
CHIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIILE OMG HIS FATHER????????????
Author's Response:
Yes girl. His father is alive. Stay tuned because there's more to this craziness!!!<333
[Report This]Date: May 22, 2016 05:03 pm Title: Episode 4: The Russia With Love Case
the busts in this chapter were damn good!! You go, Twinkle Toes!! He is trying it with Olivet lol He really is trying it but then again I think she knows him well enough to know he wouldnt push too hard and too far without her consent. I think she trusts him like that. Her man on the other hand. I don't like. lol at all honestly. He has such a hate for TT and for no reason! Tank and his special gas smh shame lmao I'm glad the rest of the girls were saved but it does suck that they have to go back to their own lives :/
Author's Response:
Twinkle toes and Olivet know each other's dynamic. However he's really into her and has been since the academy. She's not sure how she feels about him in that department. At least that's what she's telling herself for now. <333
[Report This]Date: May 22, 2016 04:12 pm Title: Episode 3: The van Goghne Case
LMFAO "He glared at me again, his face imitating a tomato" HOW LMAO
I had heartburn myself this morning from that borscht. " this NEGRO lmao
"Ever notice how hyper erotic the words to the juicy fruit commercials are…Take a stick…pull it out…the taste is gonna move ya when you pop it in your mouth…Dick… they want you to suck dick subliminally and you happily pop that 'stick' right in your mouth. Congrats.___" these are killing me oh my God gnreiognr
Brian needs to take a seat. Honestly, what did TT do that has his panties in such a bunched up ball up his ball???? Goodness!
Author's Response:
Did I tell any lies about the juicy fruit tho?!?!!?! Lmaooooooooo. <333
[Report This]Date: May 22, 2016 03:16 pm Title: Episode 2: The Getting On The Team's Case
okay, there were many good good parts in this but i can't let go of this negro screaming at getting the probabtion cuff put on all because he wanted to be dramatic??? lmao I can't with this fool!!! I adore him. lmaooooo So Olivet was the curly laughing friend when he gave the teacher his input huh? Am I right?? :D I wanna know how The Tank (I'ma call him that for now) AKA Hack and Twinkle Toes (Gonna call him that too hope you don't mind) AKA Black Panther is gonna behave. I could see them becomming friends but I could also see them fighting over power, olivet and who's stronger....So that can go either way. I caNT however see TT(twinkle toes) getting friendly with the rest of the crew lol I just can't. especially Elvis, dude (from TT's description) is waaaaay too into himself. lol Onto the next chapter!
Author's Response:
He is so damn dramatic. Lmaooooooo. Yeah that was Olivet in the front taking up at his shenanigans. They go way back!!! Hack and "twinkle toes will develope that crazy love hate palship!! They're all going to be close as time goes by. You'll see the dynamic come together with more cases <333
[Report This]Date: May 22, 2016 10:15 am Title: Episode 1: The Catch & Release Case
FIRST AND FOREMOST. TUT. GIRL I COMPLETELY, FULLY, RESPECTIVELY UNDERSTAND IF YOU NEVER WANT TO TALK TO ME AGAIN BECAUSE I CANNOT BELIVE IM JUST GETTING TO THIS STORY WTF. IM SO LATE. OMG. I have tso much to catch up on you just dont know. GIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIrl!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I am practically speechless because this is so damn good omgoodness!!! Im really mad im just getting to this lmfao ugh! Lemme go read the rest of this!
Author's Response:
Girl you're good trust me!!!! I'm glad you finally caught up with the story.<333
[Report This]Date: Mar 30, 2016 02:48 pm Title: Episode 5: The CodeMaker Case
HOLY SHIT!! So Joseph's alive huh.... See poor Michael with no family and friends does have some family - even if it's Joseph. I think we'd see Mr tough guy get into his feels if he found out his mom was alive.
But on to Michael LOL he is so funny in this chapter I can't with him sometimes lol I'm on that love hate again. Ugh but not as much as I hate Olivet's tool of a boyfriend...
More more more and more!!
Author's Response:
Yes girl Joe is alive and well. There's two ways this could go he could hate them passionately for abandoning him of finally feel while since he knows they are alive. Your love/hate always blossoms into full n Love/Love. Lmao. At least he's not a toss about in his story. LOL!!!! <333
Date: Mar 29, 2016 03:04 am Title: Episode 1: The Catch & Release Case
Waiting to read until it gets a little longer <3
Author's Response:
Hey hey. Ok cool. More chapters coming soon so hang in there!!<333
Date: Mar 22, 2016 12:42 am Title: Episode 4: The Russia With Love Case
It's really good, I fell behind on a few chapters but I'm so glad I caught up!! LOVE this story, very creative and different. :)
Author's Response:
Awe yay Thank you!!! I'm glad you caught up. It's been a while since he last chapter so I hope you like it as it goes on. Things are starting to heat up now so let's see!! <333
[Report This]Date: Mar 06, 2016 06:35 pm Title: Episode 4: The Russia With Love Case
LMAO the Viagra commercial though...
Girl, SERIOUSILY the dynamic between Michael and Liv is so addictive already! I'm so into this. I really hope you find it in your soul to keep it going (who am I to talk though right I've got plenty of stories flying in the wind). BUT SERIOUSLY THOUGH!
LMAO dead dead DEAD. The code word 'look at her titties' why did I immediately see Mchael in that limo in that video from Gary, Indiana saying the same thing! I heard his voice and everything LOL.
Daaaamn he really took it to the next level with the boyfriend/girlfriend act. That kiss was no act on his part smh! Liv's reaction though... lol
And boom another shut down... Poor Michael.
I NEEED MORE!!!
CREEPY INTERNET TEETH GRINDING GREEDY GRINS!!
Author's Response:
Lmaooooo. That's exactly what I was thinking of when I wrote that part. The "Look at her titties" just so you guys could actually figure what it works sound like. Michael will get shut down a bit before he gets into Liv's head or bed lmaoooo. Maybe maybe noooooot. We'll see.
Mom goibg to continue the story it might just be time between chapters because I'm over loaded with work and that's a good thing!!
Hope you enjoy the new chapter!!
Creepy Internet Live always!! <333
[Report This]Date: Feb 16, 2016 02:53 pm Title: Episode 3: The van Goghne Case
Liv and Michael would probably be a good couple... But I have to see more. I don't like how she asked why he left and didn't really let him explain, I guess?
And I was waiting for Michael to shove something up Brians ass. Don't get me wrong, I have nothing against the guy (other than his unneccesary rudeness) but he called Michael sport and as I recall Michael was supposed to go in on whomever called him sport, kid, or anything of the sort lol. No but really...
I think their first case went well, I can't wait until there's some sort of fighting or shooting going on, that's my forte!
Still enjoying this Tut, can't wait for the next update!
Author's Response:
I think she's more hurt by how he left. They were two peas in a pod then one day he just disappeared without a word so she's trying not to let things fall right back into place. She's a bit on the defensive. Michael is handing out all kinds off foot in ass passes. Brain will be an habitual line stepper so don't be surprised when Michael revokes his pass. Lol.
Shooting is on its way. Guns!!!! Lol. <333
[Report This]Date: Feb 16, 2016 02:34 pm Title: Episode 2: The Getting On The Team's Case
It's growing on me. The commercial breaks are a nice touch, an easy laugh. Although had this been an actualy TV, I probably would've turned the TV to a different station and kept switching back and forth until the show came on. I mean I couldve switched to another story to read but that would be dumb... and useless... I'm rambling.
Anyway, like I said I will not get behind so I'm here *all smiles*
Also age has never stopped anyone Olivet... Wendy *winks*.
Did Michael hand out these codenames himself or were they pre-given? Either way he just had to be called Black Panther.
I'm enjoying it so far!
Author's Response:
I'm glad it's growing on you. Before you know it the commercials will blend all the way in. I'm going to keep them for now but if I see they are getting in the mix I will have commercial free episodes. We'll see. Lmaooo those codenames were pre-given. And yesssss Black Panther was the best name for him. Thanknyou for keeping up your end of the bargain and keeping up with the story. Now it's my turn to add chapters lol. That's coming ASAP!! <333
[Report This]Date: Feb 14, 2016 09:22 pm Title: Episode 3: The van Goghne Case
OH I love the undercover 'couple' idea those situations NEVER get old I mean it, I got so excited as soon as I read the first couple lines.
Michael getting shot down for dinner though... aww... and LMAO!!! His favorite suit... GOODBYE Michael!!! lol
and omg meeting Brian. Why was I already dead as soon as Michael cleared his throat?! LOL!!!
Brian is a jerk through and through, but I can see why he would be. He's obviously jealous of Michael being Olivet's partner. I mean older men usually are more jealous especially of younger, sexy men like Michael here.
I love the dynamic between Michael and Liv, I can't wait to read more so you BETTER CONTINUE THIS STORY!!!
CREEP INTERNET THREATS!!!
Author's Response:
Finally catching up to my reply!! Yesssss the undercover couple. Michael and Liv have a few of those roles in the future just you wait. Lol.
He is such a bum. Lmaooooooooo. I bet that suit has zero wrinkles in it. ;;;;))))))
Brain is an asshole. He's not secure in his relationship at all because he knows Michael is not knew to Liv. Even though they weren't a couple before they were as close as two people could get.
Mom yeildibg to the threats!! Creepy internet fingers to the keyboard!!! Lmaooooo <333
[Report This]Date: Feb 04, 2016 02:34 pm Title: Episode 2: The Getting On The Team's Case
The "director" with air quotes lmao why did I imagine Michael doing this and literally lmao.
Michael's sarcasm is killing me slowly on the inside LMAO!! I love him (with just a dash of side hate).
You described the moment of her tripping and spilling her smoothie so perfectly in detail I felt like I was really watching it happen! You are an amazing writer!
and then Michael laughing out loud at the scene lol!!! So Olivet's her name, I like it. She's Michael's Wendy awwww.
Girl I'm buckling my seat belt now because I know this is going to be a wild one! Stick with it!!
Yours truly,
with all the creepy internet love!
Author's Response:
Lmaoooooo. Why the side hate tho. He's a bit of an ass as always. Ugh. Awe thank you bew. I'm trying to make the writing of this more visual since I'm trying to mimic a tv show. So I hope it will keep coming across the same way. Yes. Olivet is his Wendy being her last name is Darling. I'm trying to keep elements of the real Michael in this I some way. I'm trying different ways to bring hat out.
I'll try and stick with it. More to come soon hopefully.
Creepy Internet love always on the rise!! <333
Date: Feb 04, 2016 06:50 am Title: Episode 2: The Getting On The Team's Case
Great update and luv the commercial breaks!
Author's Response:
Awe thank you so much!!! I'm glad they came across well!!! <333
Date: Jan 27, 2016 05:38 pm Title: Episode 1: The Catch & Release Case
You done it again, Menen! Another great story! I can definitely see the artist in you. Another artist can always spot another artist!
Author's Response:
Awe thank you sweetheart. I'm hoping it will live up to the expectations I have of it. The format is kind of unusual but hopefully entertaining enough to keep you guys riveted. thanks so much for reading love!! <333