Date: Feb 08, 2021 11:20 am Title: Chapter 6 - Punky not Fearless
I love your story â¤
[Report This]Date: Jul 15, 2016 08:09 am Title: Chapter 14 - Love is the answer
This was a really good story and I was not expecting that plot twist. There were a few grammar mistakes, but besides that the story was great.
Date: Aug 27, 2015 04:33 pm Title: Chapter 14 - Love is the answer
That was a dramatic chapter! Was M.P. supposed to be M.J.? So was it a dream or not? I'm just a little confused. Other than that, great story!
Author's Response:
So yeah, Mj hides his name with a P for PeterPan or juste Pan, that's not that important and no it wasn't a dream !
Thank you for your review and you read ♥
Date: Aug 26, 2015 02:45 pm Title: Chapter 13 - A door to heaven
Yay, she finally gets to see Michael!! Can't wait for the last chapter!
Author's Response:
He is coming !
2 minutes lefts :)
Date: Aug 23, 2015 07:48 am Title: Chapter 11 - Puzzle pieces
that's nuts, Edne don't trust her! What the heck dude? please continue
Author's Response:
Next chapter is coming in two minutes, be ready :D
Date: Aug 23, 2015 03:23 am Title: Chapter 1 - Suffering
This chapter is crazy, I love how u did it btw. U just gotta write more! I love it!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much ! I really hope you'll like the others, I tried to write them as interesting as I could ! See you soon !
Date: Aug 22, 2015 07:20 pm Title: Chapter 11 - Puzzle pieces
I can't believe Edne doesn't trust her! That's horrible! Continue!
Author's Response:
Nexts chapters are on their way, thank you for your comment !
Date: Aug 21, 2015 12:35 am Title: Chapter 1 - Suffering
Well i did hear Prince and MJ actually got along contrary to popular belief, interesting that MJ chose to trust him. They need to ditch hayden asap. Prince could help them with this. Updattte pronto!
Date: Aug 18, 2015 05:39 pm Title: Chapter 9 - Earlier than I thought
THAT MAN IS CRAZY
Author's Response:
Oh yes he is, thanks for reading ! ;P
Date: Aug 18, 2015 05:26 pm Title: Chapter 10 - Prince
I wonder what he knows; let's hope he'll help them. Continue!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your support and yes, other chapters will come ;)
Date: Aug 06, 2015 10:02 pm Title: Chapter 1 - Suffering
Wow. Ok the CIA is involved now. It makes no sense why they would want to know where Michael is. They pretty much only care about threats to national security so that's my only criticism is that this could a little too conspiracy theory if you go that route. And wow he killed Kyla that is definitely illegal for him to kill a civilian he seems more like a crazed pyschotic possible fan such as the one who killed John Lennon. Another he can't kill Jo because she has the information to find him she has the leverage here. He could kill Eden though. They need to ditch Hayden at least get him arrested with breaking and entering, assault, and murder. Involving the CIA seems far fetched, Sony the company itself being involved that would make sense. Orherwise great job!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your great review !
I know it don't make all sense but it's just that I put some fantasy in it but I hope you'll enjoy next chapters :)
Date: Aug 06, 2015 07:34 pm Title: Chapter 9 - Earlier than I thought
Man getting scary now! I can't believe he shot kyra!!! Crazy man!
Author's Response:
Yeah he is crazy but why ?
To be continued :p
Date: Aug 02, 2015 04:16 pm Title: Chapter 8 - Scares and pain
Uh oh!! That isn't good!! One question, how did Eden get those scars?
Author's Response:
He made it to himslef because of his sadness ♥
Thank you for reading :D
Date: Jul 31, 2015 12:55 am Title: Chapter 7 - Upside down
I think its a legit threat. They need to be more careful. Michael is a target because of his wealth and those kids need to realize that getting deeper into this means more trouble for them. They should trace that phone number. A lot of people profitted off of michael's 'death'. Especially his estate, if he came back & stopped them they would lose a lot of money. Glad to see Eden manning up and owning his feelings for Jo. Just wondering where are they going to start looking for him.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your great review, I think you won't be disappointed by the nexts events ;)
L.O.V.E <3
Date: Jul 30, 2015 03:37 pm Title: Chapter 7 - Upside down
I can't he did that to her!! At least he loves her just as much as she does with him. ;) Continue!
Author's Response:
Thank you ! I will ;)