Date: Nov 21, 2024 07:33 pm Title: Chapter 2 - Scarred
This is hilarious. Very ‘whatever the fuck’, if that makes sense. Lmao.
Date: Oct 13, 2023 09:07 am Title: Chapter 5 - Lost
Bro I watched the exact same YT video .The moment I saw your username ,I was like ,this person deffo saw the shit that man was spewing
[Report This]Date: May 05, 2016 04:58 pm Title: Chapter 2 - Scarred
This is really good! I feel as if I can relate to her. I cannot waot to read more. So excited!
Author's Response:
I'm so happy to read that! Thank you :)
Date: Apr 28, 2016 04:16 am Title: Chapter 1 - Obsessed
this is good!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much <3
Date: Mar 26, 2016 10:01 pm Title: Chapter 38 - The Real Secret
Dark... I must say, this story of yours is very dark. Darkness, pain, confusion, mistakes, sadness, hopelessness...all shaped in "And secrets so untold". But then, at the end of the road, somehow I always found the light of hope for Michael and Starr.
In short, you've done an amazing job!
Both of them have trouble, weakness and depression. But they don't give up on each other. They are not perfect. But I believe, a perfect relationship is made by two imperfect people.
Thank you for this great story of yours. I was confused, I was sad, I was angry, I cried, I laughed... I really felt for the characters.
Author's Response:
Wow! Thank you so much! I'm just beyond flattered! I think that to be able to elicit strong emotions is what every writer strives for, so I'm so happy to see this <3
[Report This]Date: Feb 10, 2016 10:50 am Title: Chapter 16 - Hopeless
Firstly it was wonderful tha her friend kind of came to her side. In wondering by the description of him is he someone that will be a character in up coming chapters as a source of a distraction for her.. He seems very mellow, level headed and sweet
oh my god at the message she sent Michael, she finally opened up!! Why am I nervous to see if he responded god I pray he felt the same!!
Author's Response:
Thanks :) Her old friend is just kind of neutral. That message - omg, yes very nerve wracking!
[Report This]Date: Feb 10, 2016 10:31 am Title: Chapter 15 - Insane
Ahh! Wonderful wonderful update! This had me clenched and ready to fight Jackie myself! You can tell Kackie still has many deeply rooted issues when it comes to her abuse as a child. She needs to stop projecting and assuming that because she abused that it meant Michael was an abuser.
Your dialogue with this chapter is impeccable! I was not expecting large to actually jump to her side. But I suppose when someone is being irrational and incredibly unreasonable you'll side for what's right. I really felt like Marge stuck it to her for being the one to raise her discrediting Jackie entirely.
onntonthe next chapter I winced when you decribed the outfit the press caught him in, you know they'd have a field day with that!
Author's Response:
Thanks! Lol! I needed to take Michael down a few notches, and embarass him a little, his character was too perfect. Later on he becomes even more difficult to deal with, and not so perfect. But that crazy event does seem like something that would happen to Michael, lol!
Jackie is horrible, but Marge takes the opportunity to shred her. The enemy of my enemy . . .and all that.
Thank you for saying the dialog was "impeccable" <3
That makes me happy :)
[Report This]Date: Feb 10, 2016 10:20 am Title: Chapter 14 - Smoldering
Goodness gracious! Her family are so incredibly overbearing! While it's understood she's had a very troublesome past, she's struggled like hell to get to where she is, her family well, a few of them could at least be congratulatory toward her new found life path!
they are what I would classify as dysfunctional. Even there is immense shade thrown toward her weight loss and being thin.
i hate she relapsed but o honestly cannot blame here there has to be a middle ground and from what it looks like there isn't much stress she can handle right now.
Michael provides normalcy in her life, have her a sense of hope and sanity I know she's missing it. Nothing like a revelation that your family has never changed who they are , no growth, nothing. Still just as negative as they've always been
i love this story I am already sad for the day I reach the last chapter
Author's Response:
Thank you :) Yep you can definitely call them dysfunctional and negative. Even abusive. That's part of her twisted bond with Michael. I'm glad that you picked up on the fact that they haven't changed or grown. Their characters, although cringe worthy, are very defined. Lol
Date: Feb 08, 2016 01:03 pm Title: Chapter 13 - Dizzy
Wow wonderful this chapter was! I am so glad that she was shale to overlook her flaws, and was able to really enjoy herself. I love how Liz just says whatever she pleases,I would imagine her behaving this very way haha!
i am so glad that her and Michael seems to be really divulging in the sexual energy I suppose what he wanted to "talk about" was spoken in more than just words lol
I love it!!
Author's Response:
I know right! I always imagined Liz as a boisterous old lady with no filter! Lol
They did address what he wanted to "talk about", but I kind of buried that. I could have been more clear, lol sorry. Anyway here it is:
I wasn’t even brave enough to tell him I loved him, even though I was sure that it was arrantly obvious by now. Only when he was asleep could I say it to his face, and as it turned out - he had never even heard me. He didn't know that I kissed him and I didn’t tell him about it either. All he wanted to know about last night was if I had seen anyone take a picture of us when we were outside. That was what he was worried about. Although now he said it didn't matter anymore because the media was just going to be obsessing about the lovely outfit of mine that he ended up being seen in last night. "Wacko Jacko sex change," he told me was what next week's tabloids would bring, flooding me with guilt again.
Anyhow I'm glad you enjoyed it, and thank you :)
Date: Feb 07, 2016 02:42 am Title: Chapter 12 - Hysterical
Yessssss!!!!! I loved this!! Hans I too agree with the admiration, love, affection he carried for Miss Elizabeth! She was so striking and immensely beautiful! I'm so glad to see the closeness even this little bit they are both flirting on the edge of finally crossing that line! I am anxiously awaiting what's coming up! Now we get to the conversation of the previous night.. I enjoy the way you execute cliffhangers!
Author's Response:
Yes, Liz is stunning! And yes they WANT to cross that line! <3
Date: Feb 07, 2016 02:29 am Title: Chapter 11 - Manic
Oh my God I definitely felt the manic expression and all of this. Misty wonder what is going to happen in the next chapter I'm still hooked just as much as I've ever been. I love seeing her pay it forward and giving back in a way that has helped her! Kevin seemed like such an established man, reading it was sad knowing he in his own way was kind of orphaned. The fall from grace if you will was also sad such a beautiful mind, honeless. At least now he has a second chance!! Hopefully being the humanitarian Michael is,he'll understand!
Wow I have to say she was bold giving him a kiss as she did! I'm slightly worried for her because there was an implication he was awake during some of her revelation but also excited because we get to see the first few bits and pieces of their physical interaction on a sexual level.
i love this! Praying she won't get fired!!
Author's Response:
Yes, she does get manic, she over thinks and has a strong sense of guilt. She saw the track marks on the man's arms and saw herself. <3
Oh, fyi, Kevin will be back :)
That kiss was like a fun, relatable thing - like, would you do it if you had the chance? I totally would! Can you imagine! Lol
Date: Feb 02, 2016 11:37 am Title: Chapter 10 - Suffering
Ahh! Loved this as always, yet heres some things I loved, I love the fact of ho you preented pills being thrown into the lake, the symbolic meaning of it. Both of them throwing away pills for thing they love, things and people they dont desire to hurt, their future and honestly survival. I've never seen anything wirtten like this in mny other stories not only incredibly unique but very pivotal for the characters!
Very sweet how even though thei time in the 'normal' world if you will was inturrupted it was still a wonderful moment for them I love how you captued yet again the humanitarian side of things that even in the face of a drug addicted strung ouut man he didnt desire to inflict or add to that mans suffering only waned to help.
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I was close enough to him to feel his pulse when it accelerated. His breaths got shorter. I felt pleasantly feverish. Both of our body temperatures rose and there was actual heat between us. Actual palpable evidence that we both wanted something to happen. He had to be interested, at least physically. I was way past interested and had long since moved on to voracious. I was suffering for him, like I always knew I would be.
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and so it begins! the closeness, the attraction, that doesn seem to be only on her end of thing anymore. Buiding tension such as this is one of my favorite things abouut stoies such as yours. Sometime it can be just as enthralling if not more than the actual intimate scenes themselves. Something very intimate about being within that friendship boundry, and feeling that intensity, but knowing the attraction is strong all driven in the name of pulse and body heat.
Author's Response:
Yeah, Michael had a different way of doing things, but his problem was a lack of self preservation, I think.
And I wanted to show how adorably skittish he is about love after being f'd over so many times. It was like he protected his feelings but not his safety. Kind of contradictory I guess.
[Report This]Date: Feb 02, 2016 10:52 am Title: Chapter 9 - Damaged
Something else I left out! I was so excited to see house as one of the characters in this story!!! I am a huge long time fan of the series so had me grinning his sarcastic, harsh, unimaginable wit was portrayed wonderfully!!!
Author's Response:
Thanks! I was worried about doing justice to House's dialog because he's so damn witty, lol
Date: Feb 02, 2016 10:47 am Title: Chapter 9 - Damaged
Thks chapter was gripping! My goodness there is such a unique but likely parallel between them with running away and drowning their emotions in such an awful capacity. thank goodness in a twisted way for Hrave being there in order to save his life. Allow me to mention, it reminded me of when Miss Paris told the stories of Grace doing exactly what you described. Forcing her way to where he's been so much so he shipped her to Africa for a while *chuckles*. She rings me as hopelessly smitten.
as far as their argument, I wouldn't even consider that an argument at all but more of an awakening with him trying to identify himself to her as someone she could communicate on such a level beyond anyone's. I can see why she felt that way, she's still so incredibly sensitive toward him!
i absolutely love this story to pieces. It is seriously my favorite.
Author's Response:
Thank you :) And yes, I got that story from Paris. I thought it was really interesting. Gosh, I just felt bad for Grace. I don't know what I would have done if it was me. It would be so painful being with him all the time and raising his kids if he didn't like me that way, lol
[Report This]Date: Jan 31, 2016 02:55 am Title: Chapter 8 - Needed
Another amazing chapter! You know, I can absolutely understand and find the realism astounding when it comes to the body dismorphia (sp?) That he carried with himself. It's beautiful to see not only is she trying to rebuild his confidence and truly show him there is indeed nothing horrid to his appearemce, but to try and break down everyone's negative conclusion of him.
He was already feeling miserable about us appearemce and Trudy was astoundingly offensive and dare I say unprofessional. Nothing like being called degrading names, not only picking you apart but creating a plastic molding.of your features due to them not looking "good enough".
This story has me indulging in my feelingshere haha this cliff hanger is something seriois. Kindred souls Amber and Michael! And again with the passionate and tantalizing description when it cane to the intimacy. .. my goodness!
(BTW to answer your previous question I had been MIA quite a while due to my own ailments but I am back 100% and very happy that days I'm ailing abit recently I'm able to forget my reality and delve into works of art like yours! Bless you for even recognizing my short depature! That's sweet :) :) truly!) (Mjfiction should have where we can respond to authors redponses)!
Author's Response:
His BDD was pretty well known. I guess being under the public microscope would drive anyone crazy. I still can't understand how people called him ugly, though. It makes no sense to me. Sometimes I can't stop looking at his pictures (from his older years). I think he was always beautiful. I don't get people sometimes, lol!
I'm hoping you get better really soon! *hugs*