Hey I noticed you're kind of a new writer on this site.

I think that the story has potential to be super awesome but like the previous reviewer stated: it's pretty difficult to follow along with the way that the wording is formatted. I understand that you don't have much time to fix it but I mean there's a few discrepancies, but you know just some space things. I noticed that your sentences beginning with I tend to be latched to previous words... it's really difficult to follow along with, but I think you could be good if you just took a little bit of time to fix that.

Have you read a story called teachers pet? the story has a whole lot of the same elements as yours. Its pretty good look it up. 

you probably resent being corrected and stuff I don't mean to sound like a douche I'm just saying as a reader I would like to see it in a much easier flow so I can enjoy reading it more anyway that's about it.

It's a good plot, but you need to work on your format. It's not easy to read a chapter that's just one big paragraph. I have a few stories up and suggest you look at them for proper format.