[Report This]Date: Nov 08, 2014 04:27 pm Title: Chapter 11: Vignettes of a life lived in twenty years
I applaud you for taking the risk of writing from Michael's point of view, and not only his current thoughts and feelings, but his past ones too. You did a great job of presenting him as a person with multiple layers, which is especially important given the fact that, as you already stated, he was a real person.
The events that went on in his life were so sad and messed up, and it makes me ache for him. I like your interpretation of his reaction to those events, and I feel you presented them as accurately, realistically, and with as much sympathy as is possible. Michael had some very real insecurities, and you brought up that aspect of his personality well.
Once again, I'm looking forward to the next installment! :)
Date: Nov 08, 2014 05:01 am Title: Chapter 10: Lean On Me
aaawww poor Michael
gosh i love this story please continue
Author's Response:
thanks for the review!! i'm glad you like it so far :) :) keep on reading! I got MORE THAN (wee!!!) the 10 reviews I was hoping for, so next up is the Michael POV chapter!
[Report This]Date: Nov 07, 2014 06:46 pm Title: Chapter 10: Lean On Me
Gahhh, this story is so good! It's my favorite story on this site. I love Julia's character -- and Janelle's, too! And, I really like how you've portrayed Michael. The way you handled the revelation about the abuse he suffered was very well-done. I'm really looking forward to more! :)
Author's Response:
thank you! i really want to make julia and janelle have a strong friendship...i hate those stories where "girl meets MJ and just gives up her entire life to be with him." LOL as if....
thank you for your review--- ppplllleeasseee keep reading!!
Date: Nov 07, 2014 04:07 pm Title: Chapter 10: Lean On Me
Yeah, no, that wasn't just a result of PTSD. Not with the calling Frank; that's too rational. Not with the lag time of calling Frank, then hiding, etc. Not with the delay after contacting her. I could understand if that reaction was out of shame regarding his skin, but PTSD? His excuse doesn't match up with his actions. I hope she doesn't buy that b.s.
[Report This]Date: Nov 07, 2014 03:56 pm Title: Chapter 9: Coffee
Random tip on getting feedback: Ask questions (e.g. Should she talk to him on the phone? What do you think he will do next? Should I keep Harry in here? etc)
I'm glad he's calling her....but doing so while drunk? That makes me worry about his well-being. I'm super disappointed in him for his delay in calling her or at least wiring her money as it's because of HIM that she was stranded in LA. There is no excuse for that.
[Report This]Date: Nov 07, 2014 03:47 pm Title: Chapter 8: Stranded
I'm glad she told Janelle. At least now she looks like less of an ass. Plus, who can fault anyone for listening to Michael's request?
And this Michael? What a douche. What.a.douche.
(Side note: If I'm this pissed and over-involved in the characters, it is because you are doing a damn good job at writing this story. Bravo!)
Author's Response:
hahaha!! thank you! thank you for all your reviews!!! they mean a lot :) i'm glad you like the story so far!
[Report This]Date: Nov 07, 2014 03:42 pm Title: Chapter 7: Happy New Year?
"You know what they say about big hands?" asked Michael slyly. I looked at him mid drink, eyebrows raised.
Big feet. 
And WTF WTF WTF. What a twist!
Date: Nov 07, 2014 03:21 pm Title: Chapter 6: People are people
I take it that you don't like Brooke Shields? ;)
Author's Response:
she's just an easy target ;)
[Report This]Date: Nov 07, 2014 03:08 pm Title: Chapter 5: Chinese Food
He knew how to drink in that era. I'm surprised by his display of innocence lol. SMH. So right after making those promises to Janelle, Julia bails like crazy. Ugh. This is not going to go well.
[Report This]Date: Nov 07, 2014 01:30 pm Title: Chapter 4: An Epiphany
I stopped listening to Thriller. I swore to Janelle that if I heard "P.Y.T." one more time I was going to puke. I hid my copy of the album under the bed and bought Madonna instead instead.
LMAO
I'm very curious about where you are going to take this story. The 2 months surprised me. Especially given how defiant of Frank he'd been when they met.
[Report This]Date: Nov 07, 2014 12:51 pm Title: Chapter 3: The Drowsy Chaperone
She gave him food poisoning?! Some fan >.<. LOL
I really like how you balance describing what happens with the actual dialogue.
Date: Nov 06, 2014 02:14 am Title: Prologue
Aww. He seems so sad, and lost. I guess she can forgive him, but if they become friends how much longer do they think they can keep it platonic. Especially on Mike's behalf when he finds out about Harry. He might have another breakdown if he feels he's losing Julia in any way.
I didn't care about the Jonas Bros at all back in the day, but I feel like I'm slick starting to like Nick. LOL. One of my friends has been teasing me cause I was telling them about his new music, and new sound.
[Report This]Date: Nov 05, 2014 11:16 pm Title: Chapter 10: Lean On Me
Amazing Story
[Report This]Date: Nov 05, 2014 08:59 pm Title: Chapter 10: Lean On Me
I loved the way Juila straight told him off! But I guess, he had a good reason... sharing this secret will hopefully help Julia to understand him better and they can stay friends!! I can't wait to see how their relationship developes!
[Report This]Date: Nov 05, 2014 08:21 pm Title: Chapter 1: The Camera
I'm not going to lie - this is corny. It's also very cute and I really like your writing style. It's like a dream.
Author's Response:
LOL the early chapters are 100% corn! Thank you for such a kind review! Keep reading!!