Reviewer: ladyT Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 28, 2014 11:48 am Title: Prologue

*Deep sigh* These two....I just can't with them. I know that you said you were going with  somewhat historically accurate events so I'm guessing that Michael will still be hungup on Diana for at least another year. I just really want these two togther, but by that point who knows where Julia and Harry will be in their relationship. I just want to to shake them.

Author's Response:

lololololol wait and we shall see ;)

(I promise the Diana arc won't be as painful as it seems!)

Thanks for the review!!

Reviewer: jazii Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 28, 2014 02:37 am Title: Chapter 17: The Gymnast

Sounds like heavy Prince with a little Kool and the Gang and another early 80s band I can't name right now.

But I love this story so much! Wow! I peeped it before they made up the first time around, but I love the way you've built it up.

Keep with the steady updates, Love! I will be back.

Author's Response:

thank you so much!! keep reading!

Reviewer: 2DreamFire Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 26, 2014 03:46 pm Title: Chapter 16: Changes

Hmm, for some reason, I didn't receive a notification that you updated yesterday night. I just felt the random urge to check on the story today, and what do I know, there's a new chapter! Yay!

Oof, Michael told her some more about the extent of his injuries and his skin condition. He wasn't properly diagnosed with vitiligo until 1986, so he must have been pretty confused and freaked out with what was happening to his skin.

I'm actually on Michael's side a bit here with the whole "stuff you probably should've told me a while ago" line Julia said. I think Michael has the right to tell her these very private, personal, and painful secrets about him on his own time. I'm an extremely private person, too, so I understand. I mean, he did already agree that he was going to tell her about his skin last chapter, and he just must have been embarrassed that all that stuff came out without him actually consenting to it and in the manner that it. I would've reacted slightly passive aggressive too because I'd feel slightly mortified and pretty vulnerable.  It would have been ideal for him if he had been able to control the way that he revealed those things to her and explained them.

Now, ditching Julia at the party wasn't good. I would have been rightfully annoyed if I was Julia. I think it'd be an overreaction, though, for her to get extremely pissed off and leave. I'd just make him aware that good friends can't just ditch each other without explanation. I just knew Diana was going to appear at the party! The flashbacks confirmed the suspicion I had that it was Diana that told him insensitive line about his skin. And, ohh, Michael. Diana got married around this time, didn't she? She's really playing him.

i like the perspective you added with the line about Julia seeming like a plain Jane in comparison to Michael's spotlight, but very impulsive in Janelle's eyes -- makes one think. Wow, her birthday's in four days! Michael is going to freak out if her birthday comes around, and he had no idea. 

I enjoyed reading about Julia meeting Janet. It makes sense to me that Michael would introduce her under a different name and as his makeup artist because it protects her privacy and it's easier to explain than "Oh, she was a fan, I bought her a new camera 'cause hers broke, and now we're friends, and I decided to invite her." The makeup artist guise is plausible. In another setting, such as him feeling comfortable enough to invite her to meet his family, I know that he'll introduce her properly.

i don't think the chapter was jumbled at all. It flowed quite well, actually. And, as usual, I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter! ^.^

Reviewer: JooyHauust Anonymous [Report This]
Date: Nov 26, 2014 01:53 pm Title: Chapter 16: Changes

This is one of my favorite stories here, I love the way you portray Michael and how you do your research. What happened to me when I was reading your story is that it reminds me a lot to the Glenda tapes! Not only because they talk on the phone all the time hahah but also what he said about Diana and his insecurities, about wanting to find love, he said he would have to be with a girl who's fame is in the same level (or something really similar) or with a girl who doesn't know who he is. The way Michael acts and thinks in this story is pretty accurate to his real self! (Though it's so upsetting that those tapes showed a vulnerable side of Michael he probably didn't want to show) and I love that in the story he makes mistakes and acts wrongly and he doesn't get away with it, Julia is a lovely character, she's herself, stubborn but very sweet. I hope she helps him and I hope he stop being stupid and see what's in front of his eyes!

i can't wait for the next chapter 💖

Author's Response:

Thank you so much!! and YES! thank you for recognizing the amount of research I put into getting the facts right...example...the concert in chicago julia went to? actually happened those dates and at that venue..I know it doesn't atually matter in the grande scheme of the story, but it's just fun putting in little things like that :) :)

I totally get what you're saying about the Glenda tapes! (although I've never been able to make it very far through them without feeling extraordinarily guilty...)

I'm definitely trying to make Julia and Michael as human as possible...they're both the bad and good guys of this story, I guess, ha!

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! The next chapter'll be up soon hopefully!!

Reviewer: MjjPYT Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 25, 2014 09:17 pm Title: Prologue

Agh! I hate how late I've been with reviewing! But I have to get these in. 

This story is great, as Ive already said. I'm truthfully enjoying it and I even find myself checking here multiple times an hour in hopes of a new update ;(

So! We see that Jules had a sort of transition period. She was healing from what happened with Michael, working hard, saving money and it seems through it all, her hard work was paid off with a really nice guy! I personally like Harry and his friend. I loved how you wrote the interaction with the three of them, that was hilarious to me!! And its obvious that Harry and Jules are great for each other (even though of course we want to see Jules and Mike hit it off–soon, I know lol). Anyway! Janelle is a great friend in that shes telling it like it is. Jules is going back to california to meet one guy when she has a "kind of, I dont know-boyfriend" that she did the freaky deaky with! Mhm.

Meanwhile, I'm glad her trip this time is going smoothly. I really love how you depicted Karaoke night! He was having fun in plain sight! And ooo, Jules finally spilled about Harry. I definitely think Mike was affected, but of course he hid it and Jules was taken aback by his lack of reaction. I see feelings a-brewin'!

Its really funny to me though, Jules blurts out things to Michael, just rips off the bandaide, lol. "So how long have you been in love with her?" "What are those spots?" I love that though. Its much different.

I also enjoyed how you tackled the drug issue. Great explanantion from his point of view, seriously. And THAT EXPALINS THE PHONE CALL!! Great great job here.

DUN DUN DUN Diana e_e 

Even though I ship them, I could see Jules getting a bit short as Michael told his tale. It makes me really excited to see what will happen next though. (BTW the italic part was ace)

Keep up the greaaaaat work!! ^_^

Author's Response:

Ha!! What a lovely review! Thank you!! I'm glad you like/recognize the character development I'm going for! It's so fun writing 3d characters...their flaws make the story practically write itself!

I'm writing as we speak so hopefully there'll be an update tonight or tomorrow c: c:

 

Reviewer: ladyT Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 25, 2014 09:17 am Title: Prologue

Just when I thought I had a escaped a story with no Diana....Bam!!! Oh well. I'm happy that he shared with her about the burns and the vitiligo. I hate that he's so wrapped up in Diana. I guess that's why the news about Harry didn't really phase him OR maybe it did. Maybe he's trying to make her jealous or something. That would be cute. I'm not going to lie, I pretty much skipped over that whole part about him telling her about Diana. Clearly she was annoyed. I guess I was too. I'll go back and read it. Still loving the story!

*Will Julia be meeting anymore of the family on this trip?

*Also, when he said "it's a black thing" isn't Julia black or am I wrong?

Author's Response:

Bahahahahahahahahahaha I'M SORRY! TBH I just didn't know how to not include her since I'm going for a fairly historical(ish) timeline. Don't worry though---I wouldn't exactly call Diana in and of herself a major character in the story..she's just 'necessary' if that makes sense?

*Yes!

*No, Julia isn't black. Or maybe she is? That doesn't make sense, I know. I've just never really thought about it. Julia's pretty much just an extension of myself, by default more or less (Typical, I know.) I'm a white girl originally from Chicago. So I guess that's what Julia is. 

 

I'd recommend going back and re-reading the Diana parts, if only for Michael's reactions :P Sorry for the let down!!

 

But thank you for this wonderful review!!

Reviewer: Ille Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 22, 2014 05:45 am Title: Chapter 15: Sing-A-Long Songs

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Hi, it's me again :)

Wow, 2 new chapters, it's great that you're uploading that fast :D

 

To answer your question...I speak German ^^

But most the time I read things in English because...well, there is a lot more stuff out there in each category I like, than in my own language xD

 

Jup, you say it. It's very hard to find good MJ fanfics those days, which are worth your time. A few years ago when the whole MJ-Mania begun, I really found many but also very good fanfics about him. But most of them don't exist anymore.

So yea, I have to look pretty hard to find the few stories out there with the potential to be called a really good story :)

It's funny, but when I think about it...the image of the cover is also a very important thing to animate someone to read a story. In your case, the image seems to promise a story in the serious way – which means a story of quality.
So often I see something with a half naked, photoshoped and typical meant-to-be-sexy woman on it...that I just have to klick away right at the beginning. Sometimes this can be wrong, I know. But just the image gives your subconscious an idea of the story and ...well, that's the reason I think a good cover is far more important, than it seems.

Ah, so you wrote the story you were looking for, but didn't exist ^^ Well, then you made the right decision and again thank you to share it here with us :)

You have mentioned that you aren't planning to turn this in something too sappy. Well, I'm really glad to hear that :) I like, no – I looooove dramma and everything that involves a lot of emotional roller coasters and things like that.

And honestly...even if in your story are many funny parts...i don't think that a too conventional romance would fit in that case.

Michael is just such a complex personality with a so very complicated and unusual life...it wouldn't be real to turn him in someone who can just forget about his past and become the perfect friend/boyfriend/husband...whatever xD

But it's up to you and I'm very curious how you're gonna write it :))

Another question, are you planing to make this story a really long one? I loove long, complicated stories. But as long as the story works ( and yours definitely does^^) I don't care how long the story is.

So far, the plot is still very interesting. Which brings me ( finally ) to the two new chapters:

I don't know how I should feel about Harry honestly. Sure, he seems like a nice guy, even if their „relationship“ happens really fast. And that's the reason I don't know if I should feel sorry for him, because i think that soon or later Julia is gonna hurt him (unless there is a unexpected twist of Harrys part or from someone else...you never know xD).

That's the next point, I don't know how I should feel about Julia neither. Like Janelle said – she recently doesn't behave like herself anymore. Julia is acting strange right know and obviously doesn't know what's the right thing to do or what she really wants.

But you caught her confusion so perfectly...so real. It's not pang – everything good and pang – everything bad. Some important emotions and the atmosphere of the story are so unobtrusive ( hope that's the right word ) in a very good kind of way.

For example, even if Michael said that he had no problem with Julia and her „boyfriend“ I think that the whole thing goes really deeper and he just wants to hide everything away. For me, it makes perfect sense because he seems the introvert type...so yelling at her and being angry wouldn't be that belivable.

The same is in the last scene where he acts so strange because of his medicines. Even if it were only a few sentences...there is something dark about it...something that tells you this could be the subtle beginning of a so much bigger drama that continues for a longer time.

Just my thoughts and assumptions...you're the writer here XD

Like I said before, I'm very hooked with the story. I can't decide if the things I assume are gonna happen, or if everything turns out completely different like the most people think it does ^^ Either way - I wanna read so badly the next chapter :D

You said that this story is the first serious thing you have ever written? O.o Wow...that's just, you're a very talented writer so it's something you absolutely have to keep up doing ^^ I mean it. And if it's a lot of fun for you, then awesome :)

I think writing is a very special hobby. Something that can give you so much joy and happiness and emotion...it's really something unique, what other things can't give you and you can't compare with anything else.^^

 

So, have a nice day and keep writing :))

 

 

Author's Response:

Right now i have no idea how long the story's going to end up being. I have a pretty firm end point in mind and I know how everything's going to lead up to the end, I just don't know how long it'll take to get there ;) This isn't going to be one of those stories that goes on for years, though. I  know that much. 

You hit the nail on the head with Michael--ain't no way he's just gonna come out and say everything or explain everything. He's used to being himself----fairly alone and spoiled! He's got a hell of a learning curve on what it means to be friends. And, to be fair, I don't think he should HAVE to explain anything at all. He has a right to be as private or secretive as he he needs (to an extent, of course!)

Poor Harry. This is an MJ fanfiction after all. Sooner or later he'll have to hit the road. I feel bad for him, bahahah :)

Thank you so, so much for your indepth reviews!! They're wonderful! I love that there're a few people out there at least a little invested in the story I'm trying to tell and that are picking up on tracks I'm trying to lay!