Reviewer: PYTDee Anonymous [Report This]
Date: Jan 07, 2015 08:35 am Title: Chapter 21: Tip #3: Take her on a surprise trip PT.1

I just have to say....I love your writing!! Thank you for sharing your talent with us! I can't wait till that moment these 2 realize how great they'll be together. I love the direction the story is going! 

Author's Response:

Thank you SO MUCH! I in an inordinate amount of time between planning+writing these chapters so I love hearing that people enjoy what I put out there :)

Reviewer: Gabby7 Signed [Report This]
Date: Jan 07, 2015 06:20 am Title: Prologue

Wow! This was an amazing prologue. I will definitely have to read more now. 

Author's Response:

thank you!! please keep on reading and tell me what you think!

Reviewer: 2DreamFire Signed [Report This]
Date: Jan 05, 2015 05:18 pm Title: Chapter 20: Tip #2: Call her just to say you're thinking of her

Yaaay! Update! I'm glad you're getting through your mid-story crisis.

I don't believe Julia's a bitch -- although she is being a bit hypocritical. The tips she's giving to Michael are the exact things Harry is doing to her! Honestly, though, I'd react the same way. She barely knows Harry, and he seems to be a bit clingy. I think a lot of women react that way when they don't feel like that about the other (Harry, in this case). It's different with Michael since he actually has known Diana for a significant amount of time and it really does seem like she's stringing him along.

Julia needs to beware, though. She's setting things up so that she's doing the same thing to Harry. She did have sex with him, and I know that makes many guys believe that there's something deeper in the relationship after that. I've known about some guys that get pretty clingy after having sex with a girl. She needs to be honest with Harry and tell him that she doesn't like him like that. Of course, she needs to be honest with herself first; she can't keep trying to make herself like him.

And, oh my gosh, Michael!! Ughh! A marriage proposal?! *shakes head* He's going to be in for a big heartbreak right after that.

One little thing in the chapter that confused me a bit is:

"Well, the 'rents say they'll pay for half of my physics Masters if I move back to Florida for grad school... So here I come UCF, Iguess..." - Julia

I didn't know Julia was planning on making a Masters in physics. It's funny, though, I live in Florida xD And, I just finished applying to UCF, FSU, etc.

Anyway, I really enjoyed the chapter! :) Thank you for updating!

Author's Response:

AHHHH! Too many j names!! That was definitely janelle. I'm a disgrace. Lolololol

 

julia snd michael both need to get their acts together. They're in for s

Reviewer: VickiJ Signed [Report This]
Date: Jan 04, 2015 08:54 pm Title: Chapter 20: Tip #2: Call her just to say you're thinking of her

Julia is a mess, lol! Both of the tips she gave to Michael, Harry did on his own without help and she didn't appreciate at all. She is totally leading Harry on just like Diana is leading Michael on and she calls Diana a bitch, smh. 

Author's Response:

Hahaha! She so is though! Next chapter'll have some reprecussions though...dundunduuuun

Reviewer: Redone Signed [Report This]
Date: Jan 04, 2015 01:19 pm Title: Prologue

http://blog.thephoenix.com/BLOGS/onthedownload/archive/2009/06/25/interview-stephen-davis-ghostwriter-of-michael-jackson-s-autobiography-remembers-the-king-of-pop-and-his-monkey.aspx

He got on the team in 1987...but I don't think stretching it a year or two would be obscene.

I meant that I thought she'd told Michael that he couldn't call her while drugged up anymore? Maybe I'm confabulating.

Author's Response:

I got all worried and reread parts where she might have said that, but I don't recall anything like that. I think you might be thinking of when she said that she was more pissed he tried to play it off as nothing when he called all wacked out and was like don't take me for an idiot just be honest. Maybe? Or maybe I don't even know what I'm forgetting my own writing (entirely possible hahahah!)

 

Reviewer: Redone Signed [Report This]
Date: Jan 04, 2015 10:23 am Title: Chapter 20: Tip #2: Call her just to say you're thinking of her

You are back!!

el comentario: my first thought in reading her message to Michael was that Michael needs to hire her. Or hook her up with someone in LA. I mean, he could hire her to write his press releases OR he could offer to do an interview with her. Oooh. Or ghost writing his autobiography.

Harry is on my last nerve. He is needy, he pushes too hard, and he says all the wrong things. It's obvious Julia doesn't really like him, so keeping seeing him is just messing with him. Toying with him. This is why I don't think she is very blunt. She skirts WAY too much with Harry to be blunt. With Michael? That's not bluntness, that's being a true friend.

Michael's call to her while drugged up. Wasn't he not supposed to do that?

Author's Response:

I have a really good plan for Julia, but tbh I just oohed and ahhed over the ghost writing idea...I hate you! 

I just googled Moonwalk and laughed out loud at this part of the wiki entry: "Jackson finally decided to write the book himself, with help from Shaye Areheart (although there were reports that Areheart later quit after Jackson threw a snake at her)" lolololololololololololololololol. It came out in early 1988, so the earliest in which it could be conceivably started would be like the very end 85/beginning of 86, I think. Something for me to think about I guess...it would definitely be interesting in addition to my original plan for Julia!

What do you mean that he wasn't supposed to do that? As in it was just a bad idea? I feel like now that it's out in the open, it's not as big of a deal (at least at the moment, haha.) 

I hope Julia isn't too much of the bad guy here. I mean, she is in a way...but I hope not too, too much!

 

Thank you for reviewinggggg!

Reviewer: ladyT Signed [Report This]
Date: Dec 16, 2014 01:58 am Title: Chapter 19: Tip #1: Tell her she's more than beautiful

Well first I'm glad you didn't decide to let the story die. Second, I I don't think that the chapter was weak. I'm glad that Juli and Janelle finally sat down to talk about Janelle's feelings about the situation. I knew that there was some jealousy on her part. I'm glad that they worked it out. It's good that this chapter was more focused on them getting back on track. In all honesty I don't know which gift I think is better. Michael's gift had more thought to it, but Harry's was a little token of affection. I think that I would appreciate both really. Harry lied about reaidng the book, but a lot of people lie in the early stages of relationships especially about sharing common interests. However, Julia clearly felt some type of way about that so it will be interesting to see if he lies about bigger things as well. It's clear that Julia isn't ready for their relationship to become serious. I don't know if that is because of her feelings for Mike that she is trying to hide or if she doesn't like him as much as he likes her. She did meet Harry after the messed up trip so maybe at the time he was just a good distraction from Mike initially.

At this point I don't know what else Mike could do to show Diana that he wants to be more serious. The advice Julia gives him will be good advice I'm sure, but it seems like advice that you would give someone trying to win someone over for the first time. They've been on and off for a while. So if Diana was interested in having a serious relationship they would have one by now. Poor Mike is going to get his heart broken. I don't want it to happen, but at the same time I do so that he can finally put it behind him and move on.

Look forward to the next update!