Reviewer: Crazyme62 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: Jan 19, 2015 07:01 pm Title: Chapter 23: Tip #3- Take her on a surprise trip PT.3

Julia's got some explaining to do. I wonder if it will help or not.

 

Author's Response:

lol, is julia ever good at explaining? bahaha

thanks for reading!!

Reviewer: nalwenda Signed [Report This]
Date: Jan 19, 2015 01:06 pm Title: Chapter 23: Tip #3- Take her on a surprise trip PT.3

They kissed!?!?!? Definitely didn't see that coming! But Godddd what a great chapter again! Seriously, I can't wait for the next part! I mean, I never can, but this time I really can't! Please please don't wait too long :D

Author's Response:

lololol plot twiiiiiiist

thanks for the reviews! i appreciate them a loooot!

Reviewer: Redone Signed [Report This]
Date: Jan 18, 2015 09:32 pm Title: Chapter 23: Tip #3- Take her on a surprise trip PT.3

That gif <3

WTF. Michael needs to get some words. Crying right after making out with her? Not saying anything? Oh, and Julia not trying to talk to him about it?

On the upside, they finally made out while sober. I definitely want to hear what happens next! Thank you for updating again

Author's Response:

Both of them are idiots. Honestly, I tried to write it with a different outcome, but this is how the story went! It's just how their personalities are, I guess, ha.

Thanks for reading as always!

Reviewer: VanityTrixxx Signed [Report This]
Date: Jan 18, 2015 06:55 pm Title: Chapter 23: Tip #3- Take her on a surprise trip PT.3

Aww lawd. ..this was a sad chapter kinda sorta...I can tell there will be more drama in the future. ..Pls continue mam!

Author's Response:

Will do! Thank you for reading and I really appreciate the review! :)

Reviewer: Redone Signed [Report This]
Date: Jan 17, 2015 10:10 pm Title: Chapter 22: Tip #3: Take her on a surprise trip PT.2

>_> for making me so sad with this ending. Talk about a downer of a chapter :( I'm hoping this just means you are setting up for something happy to occur....please?

Author's Response:

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lolololool

Reviewer: Ille Signed [Report This]
Date: Jan 11, 2015 11:33 am Title: Chapter 21: Tip #3: Take her on a surprise trip PT.1

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Hi, I'm back :)

Its been a while, it really is - I know.

 

Sorry for my very, very belated review. I haven't forgotten your story or was tired of it, don't worry xD

 

Its just, I've been really busy with everything.

Studying for exams, Christmas holidays...time seems to fly by.

And then suddenly over a month has passed o.O

 

But I'm really trying to answer earlier the next time ^^

I just think it's better to leave a proper comment that explains what I think and not a written in five seconds review like “WOOOW, great chapter -update soon, plz!!!” xDDD

 

 

That being said, I go on with the actual topic – your story :)

 

Like I also said in earlier reviews – I LOVE the pace of your story.

Even with these few new chapters, the direction which the story takes is fantastic. And the chapters without a lot of Julia and Michael were also great and not the slightest bit boring ^^

 

I really like your kind of humor. And the sarcastic way you write the plot or some remarks of the characters. Its so natural and funny. Maybe especially for me because I like that kind of style in general. Humor, tension, emotions...and something of reality in it – a nice alternation to the predominantly cheesy stuff out there xDD

 

I love the detail you gave to each situation and the conversations.

There is no step in there that I as a reader would miss and I can imagine each scene happen in that way. The “uneventful” parts were also important, I think. To deepen the whole credibility of the story. And it was also interesting and something that many authors leave out for the reason that they want to write the “hot stuff” as quickly as possible :P

 

I liked the scene of Michael and Julias passion for literature – I highly doubt that Michael would hang out with someone who hasn't a certain intelligence, for to long – so thank you for that ^^

I also liked the scene of Janelle and her hair dying – OMG so funny. You have a nice way to write a natural ( sometimes crazy in a good way ) conversation of her and Julia. Just like best friends behave in their good and bad times.

 

Oh, poor Harry. It was obvious that he isn't blind. I'm wondering how long it takes for him to find out about Julia and Michaels “friendship” or if she is confessing it before...questions over questions ^^

 

And then, the most hilarious part – Michael …or should I say Jerry Jacov...xD

I really laughed so much about that chapter and how they tried to handle the strange situation in the best way... Just awesome :))

I really want to know whats happening next :)

 

Hope you update soon :)

 

And don't worry, I know EXACTLY what it feels like to be in a writers block. Especially when things are getting interesting.

For that, it would be better ( for each fan fiction author by the way ) to write the whole story until it's complete and then post it online.

But then again – I think almost no one has the patience for doing it that way ( myself included xD )

 

I hope the following fact motivates you a bit:

 

It would be awesome if you keep writing (and complete :D ) this story, because you really belong to the few, but REALLY gifted writers out there that are able to write something of high quality.

Believe me, I have read over the past 10 years so many fan fiction - so I'm a very critical person when it comes to things like that ^^

 

So have a nice day / evening - ( don't know which time is it, when your gonna read this xD ) and I hope we hear from you soon :)

 

 

Author's Response:

thank you so much! i always look forward to your fantastic and helpful reviews!

i know what you mean about not updating a story til it's finished..i've been thinking about doing that for a while now, but i don't think i could do it. i need the motiviation of reviews and readers, plus every one and a while i'll latch on to an idea or suggestion from a reader that helps me along. HOWEVER, i am currently working on another shorter story that i don't think i'll publish until finished, so i guess that'll be my experiment to see how it really works for me!

you are just so so kind! you've given me some drive to push through and crank out at least part of the next chapter today...hopefully it'll be up sometime within the next few days or so!

Reviewer: 2DreamFire Signed [Report This]
Date: Jan 07, 2015 05:45 pm Title: Chapter 21: Tip #3: Take her on a surprise trip PT.1

I love how the tips Julia is giving to Michael to do to Diana he's to doing to her. Like, he called her just to say he was thinking about her and now he's taking her on a surprise trip to Disneyland!

And huge lol to the Jerry Jackoff thing! Haha

Annnnd, Janelle and Michael have finally met!! Not exactly the most conventional way to meet, but what is with Michael? I loved the way you wrote about their interactions and everything. The awkwardness between them will go away eventually. Drunk Janelle was great! Half-assed relationship with Harry is right. That was so funny. Janelle is supportive of Julia in her own Janelle way.

Michael's reactions towards Harry and Julia's interactions were exactly like I imagined it would go down. And, maan, was it awkward between Harry and Julia. I could feeeel that awkwardness!

Also, I love how (and this is in reference to the past two chapters, too) Julia feels protective of Michael whenever she hears someone speaking ill of him. That's how good friends are!

So many good, fun, humorous, and awkward moments in this chapter! Adored it! As always, looking forward to the next one! ^.^

Author's Response:

thank you so much for the feedback!! and you nailed it with the tips thing ;) not that it was particularly hidden, but im glad people are getting what i'm going for.