[Report This]Date: Feb 02, 2015 11:50 pm Title: Chapter 27: The Other Side PT. 2
200th review! Woohoo! :)
oh so now michael's feelings decide to make themselves present? >.< He is such a confusing man but I am sure he was like that in real life. I just hope that with these new discoveries he doesn't end up making Julia's life complete hell..
Author's Response:
200th review!!!! bahahaha thanks so much ;) ;) :)
lol i'm trying to make him a) as human as can be and b) not give into the tendency to write him as perfect. from we know, he was a wonderful, caring man, but also selfish and prideful, just like anyone. all this takes times to develop! stick around!
thanks for reading!!!
Date: Feb 02, 2015 11:30 pm Title: Chapter 27: The Other Side PT. 2
Just finished reading up to this chapter. Excellent story so far. The characters are beyond believable and I can easily picture the setting in my head. Can't wait to read more! ♥
Author's Response:
thank you so so much!!
Date: Feb 02, 2015 01:25 pm Title: Chapter 26: The Other Side PT. 1
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I really don't know why this text is always there...just checked a few things but apparently not enough O.o
So – hi xD
Again it's been a while. Still exams.
But I decided to post now, no matter what comes in the way XD
As I can see, you were quite productive with the chapters lately ( which is awesome off course xD ) Lets see.... where do I start?
Ah right – Disneyland ^^
This chapter was very emotional. We (or at least I ) were expecting something nice and light in the funny way, but then the contrast of the twist at the end made it such a deep, wonderful chapter.
Even if it was obvious that Michael would get hurt and rejected by Diana...I still felt sorry for him and could feel the pain in each word. Just wonderful.
I also loved the way how you include the press in the relationship of Michael and Julia. We all knew that that time would come...soon or later.
But what I really appreciated was the fact – that you gave us something real.
In so many MJ Stories, the press (or even only one photographer ) will be mentioned in some short, tree sentences and then the story goes on...like their wouldn't be any consequences in that world of paradise...or something like that xD
But in your story...we are actually aware that Michael isn't just some random guy...and that he's in fact famous and that the life of someone ordinary would chance within the moment the press connects this person with the celebrity.
That's a very important fact in my opinion.
Too often, the fangirls just ignore those negative, but realistic parts ( too much work in the writing xD ) There wouldn't just be one or three photographers, a little drama and blablabla
There would be enormous consequences!
And you caught them – all of them. There is after all a reason, why so many celebrities can't keep up with that big pressure and loose the fight ( in the worst cases ) with their death.
And it's soo true that all the sudden interest in Julia is in reality the interest in Michael. I really feel sorry for Julia and that she must go through all of this...but then again, were would be the fun and suspense of the story? ^^
Another point...yea, right – the moment were Julia and Michael finally took the next, (so long anticipated)...step in their relationship ^^
I must confess...you really surprised me there.
It was just...one moment to another and when I read it and realized it – I thought for a moment “wtf – did I oversee some important phrases or something??”
I checked – but no xD
But what I want to say is – that's nothing negative, don't worry xD
It wasn't too fast or something. It was a surprising moment and I didn't expect it to be like this...but your made it even better, that I have expected ^^
It's a realistic moment with such emotion – a hundred times better then this fitted, non – authentic setups, where the birds are singing and where the sunset is in the background...blablabla xD
The fact that it came so sudden and with such a rawness...made it on of the best scenes I ever read in MJ Stories.
It's not romantic – but then again, that's exactly what life is :P
That's the reason why I love your writing style soo much.
You don't want to give us something what's too far away from our reality that i seems impossible for us to identify ourselves with :)
I also liked the fact, that you left us hanging for a bit after that. It was obvious that the kiss and stuff wouldn't change his feelings for Diana from one moment to another – situations like that are never easy and in most cases a swirl of many, desired and undesired emotions.
And the awkwardness after it. Perfect :) Both of them needed distance and in the same time they were left with unsaid things witch bothered both of them.
I was so happy when Michael finally realized that he has to stop this “game” which Diana was playing with him all the time.
It made me so proud of him, I swear ^^ Like – boy, finally you have realized that Julias advises were actually worth something xD
Now, I'm really curious whats gonna happen next and if they come closer, or if there are still some barriers in the way ^^
Whatever the result is, I will follow it, like always off course :)
So keep up writing and sharing your talent with us ^^
Have a nice day :D
Author's Response:
I love seeing that wonky text because I know that I've got a review from you, the best kind of reviews, haha!
I'm sorry if their "second kiss" (i know it seems like the first, but don't forget NY!) came out of right field, but I'm also not sorry because that was the point! Thank you so much for getting what I was going for with the raw, human aspect of that and the ensuing awkwardness.
I know people want Diana just to have the door hit her on the way out, but there needs to be some sort of transition, ya know? He's literally pined after her for years, asked her to marry him! He's not gonna be like oh well chao! But hahahaha I feel your proudness!!
Some interesting stuff is coming up. I was going through a mini-crisis last night trying to figure out how to bridge the gap between Thriller and Bad, but I finally figured it out lol. I was starting to really kick myself for starting the story so early in 1985, but it just fit best with what I was trying to do with part 1! i don't know how many more chapters are left, but part 2 is going to happen, so hurray!
thank you for your wonderful reviews as always! good luck with exams!!
[Report This]Date: Feb 02, 2015 02:06 am Title: Chapter 26: The Other Side PT. 1
Hi! I just want to let you know that I'm here and reading your story every single time! You write very realistic and that makes it so interesting to read! Everytime I finished a chapter I'm so frustrated I can't read any further, haha! I'm practically checking every morning for a new update :)
So keep up the good work!
xoxox
Author's Response:
thanks friend! i'm workin on it!
Date: Jan 31, 2015 06:16 pm Title: Chapter 26: The Other Side PT. 1
i really like michaels point of view! get inside his head and see why he does half the dumb stuff he does lol
Date: Jan 31, 2015 12:19 am Title: Chapter 26: The Other Side PT. 1
I love it as usual. I'm glad that Michael's finally shut Diana out, I hope it's for good. Update soon, dear. This story is one in a handful that are keeping me reeled into mjff!!! :)
Author's Response:
Thank you thank you!!! <3 <3 <#
[Report This]Date: Jan 30, 2015 09:09 pm Title: Chapter 26: The Other Side PT. 1
Can't wait for the next chapter. They need to be back in teh same area again!
What part of writing Michael is hard? Writing as him? If so, why not chill and write as Julia for a while. You could always do bonus chapters later on that show a chapter you've already published, from Michael's perspective
Author's Response:
I think the hardest part is trying to differentiate between him and Julia in terms of writing styles. I can't write Jula so naturally that without thinking I'll end up doing the same thing but just with the pronouns changed to match Mike, if that makes sense. A lot of people have been asking me here and on tumblr to get some Mike perspective and even though I didn't want to at first, I've warmed up to the idea and I think it's good practice, haha. It'll only be a chapter more, I think, but I'm ready! It's gonna be fun!
And they'll be back in the same area soon ;) ;) patience patience patience
Date: Jan 30, 2015 03:47 pm Title: Chapter 26: The Other Side PT. 1
I would say don't look at writing for Mike as writing from a guy's point of view. Just imagine what it's like to be a person who usually has to keep thier feelings guarded, and has just recently had the perfect future that they dreamed about shattered. He hasn't really given Julia much thought as a love interest cause he's been wrapped up in Motha Ross, and he appreciates her friendship. It's important to him, and he doesn't want to loose it. So it's possible that he will fight against feelings for her when the Diana haze clears.
Motha Ross triiiiieeeed it! How are you going to come ask Mike to work on a song after you just broke his heart like that, but I hope that opens his eyes up more to her true nature and helps him move on. It would be fun if Mike wore a disguise, and sat in on Julia's class with her.
Author's Response:
I think the hardest part for me is making his inner-dialogue and just characterization in the Mike chapters just be distinctly different from Julia. I can write J so easily that it's just natural, ya know? And then I try to do the same thing from Mike which doesn't really work. I think it's good practice for me, though. :)
Lolololololol Motha Ross. Crying.
[Report This]Date: Jan 27, 2015 12:03 am Title: Chapter 25: Static
i love their relationship because it has so much drama!! and i thought this was a good line "I must've cried all my tears out the month before, the sky had to take it from there." just related to that part. and apart of me wants julia to get over michael but then again i want to see them together lol good chapter! and poor harry :(
[Report This]Date: Jan 26, 2015 11:44 pm Title: Chapter 25: Static
Yaaay! This chapter was awesome. I like how Julia doesn't care about fame and that she's rather annoyed by it.If I had to tell you which are my favorite parts of your story I would say when you mix reality with fiction, not everyone can successfully do that. Here they always make a fictional Michael living a life that the real Michael wouldn't have lived, sometimes forgetting how famous he was or that he actually worked constantly and they randomly put an important event out there to remind us that they are writing about Michael hahahah. But you really connect with the real Michael's life.
It's fun to see what Michael would say or do if he'd had a girl on the other line waiting for answers (about drugs, vitiligo, the surgical mask). You make it realistic when he doesn't really tell her the whole truth and when Julia try to ignore how mess up he is because love is making her blind, so sweet and tragic!
I would love to know when this story will end I mean in eras, will it end in the thriller era? or will it reach bad era? Well, keep being awesome! (If something sounds weird here it's probably because English is not my first language oops hahah)
Author's Response:
It's hard to say. I think it'll end mid-Bad era, to be honest. But then sometimes I see shit in the Dangerous and HIStory eras that I want to touch on, but I have to stop myself because the story doesn't go that far. It just can't, haha.
Thank you SO SO much for your lovely review! I love knowing that there are people out there that recognize and appreciate what I'm trying to do with this story <3 <3
Keep on reading and reviewing!!
Author's Response:
It's hard to say. I think it'll end mid-Bad era, to be honest. But then sometimes I see shit in the Dangerous and HIStory eras that I want to touch on, but I have to stop myself because the story doesn't go that far. It just can't, haha.
Thank you SO SO much for your lovely review! I love knowing that there are people out there that recognize and appreciate what I'm trying to do with this story <3 <3
Keep on reading and reviewing!!
[Report This]Date: Jan 26, 2015 11:21 pm Title: Chapter 25: Static
I love the progression in this story between Michael and Julia, the pace is still definitely where it should be :) I'm actually kind of enjoying Julia's coldness towards Michael in the end because he's still talking trying to get a hold of Diana and worrying if she's seen the stuff about Julia. I also reckon it's unfair to Julia that Michael kissed her after she was his shoulder to cry on and just left it like that :( I hope he didn't use her as a rebound but I guess it was just in the heat of the moment!
Great chapter as always, I hope you update soon d84;d84;😊
[Report This]Date: Jan 26, 2015 07:45 pm Title: Chapter 25: Static
Why oh why did he have to mention Diana?! I love how you are creating such thick tension without having anyone actually do anything. It's intense and engaging. I mainly just want Julia and Michael to talk more. These silences and pauses are great...and they are making me impatient.
I'm also happy that Harry is gone! Now Diana just needs to leave the picture.
Author's Response:
"I love how you are creating such thick tension without having anyone actually do anything"
BAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHA. I actually just woke my cat up laughing. Thank you. I love that so much lololol. And it's SO TRUE! I'm in a constant tug of war of omfg ann just move forward and NO THEY CAN'T IT'S TOO SOON, so I'm trying to reach a good balance. I promise everything is leading up to the next big fun part and the only reason Diana still has to be around (other than, you know, for Michael's character development) is for one last historical thing.
Date: Jan 26, 2015 07:14 pm Title: Chapter 25: Static
I just got caught up. I hadn't been able to read in a while. I thouht that Diana was gone, but here she goes trying to worm back in I guess. It's kind of sad how Harry found out, but I kind of figured that Julia and Michael would get caught out in public sooner rather than later. Like I said she didn't really care about him like that anyway. I don't know what you have planned for the next chapters, but I would like a chapte or part of a chapter from Michael's perspective on what he is thinking about the situation. We got a little of it when you wrote about what happened when he proposed to Diana. I'm glad Janelle said what everyone wanted to be said to the two of them, even though she was drunk. A drunk tongue speaks a sober mind as some people say. At least she got to spoon with Mike. LOL. I don't know if I want them to just get together. I think at this point I would be satisfied if they just admitted how they really feel about one another to each other. The pace of how their relationship grows is up to you. I just want the cards laid out on the table.
Author's Response:
Thank you! Mike chapters are so haaaaaaard. But I think you're right. It needs to be done. We have a shot from after the proposal and then the day that Julia went home, but I think a full on chapter from his PoV is needed at this point. They can't just get together so I'm glad you're on board with that! However, I am very very happy to say that I can count on much less than one hand the number of chapters untiil there's some sort of big revelation. I've never been good at spoilers. Sorry hahaha. "Part 2" of the story is coming up fairly soon!!
thank you for sticking with me, reading and reviewing! it means a lot! i know you're not a huge diana fan (lolol) but i promise i just need her around for one last thing and honestly that's not even cause i want her around, it's just for "historical" lame reasons.
[Report This]Date: Jan 26, 2015 01:06 am Title: Chapter 24: The Eye of the Storm
I read this chapter when it was updated but i'm a silent reader hahah, i just had to come back and tell you to please updateeeeee!! I cant wait for more, your story is the one i love the most. I wish you could just set a date or something so i dont have to suffer hahahh
Xoxoxo!
Author's Response:
Aiiiii I know!!! I'm trying! My thing is I have 2 issues: whenever I say that I'll probably be updating on X day, I jinx myself and don't. And it's just like, if I'm not in the mood or for whatever reason the writing isn't coming..I just can't push out the chapter! I have like 1/2 the nxt chapter done right now, I promise! I just don't want to put halfassed work out there. I spend so so so much time on this chapters, I really want them to come out well!
I CAN DO IT!!! ONE LAST FINAL PUSHH!!!
thanks for the motivation ;)
[Report This]Date: Jan 22, 2015 08:04 am Title: Chapter 24: The Eye of the Storm
OH MY GOD NOOOO!! No more chapters to read!! What am I going to do?!
Author's Response:
muahahahahahaha. hopefully there'll be an update soon! you came at the first time. i went on a binge last weekend and updated 3 times in like 5 days. it was great.
honestly though, thank you SO MUCH for your reviews. love love love love!!!!