Date: Jun 23, 2014 01:26 am Title: Deceit.
"That's right...while you were in prison, being a criminal, being a convict...I'm here with her legs around my neck, screwing her brains out," LMAOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOROFLLLLLLL!!!!!
JESUS I LAUGHED SO HARD!!! OMG I can't right now, really. Lord have mercy. Smh
OK let me calm down so I can write this review Lol,oooh Jesus.
Firstly i want to say that's what Jimmy's crazy behind get from talking all that smack,smh Michael nearly killed him.
Jane is irrelevant, Lol really I had forgotten she and Michael were even together, that's why
in my last review i was like ok why is she acting all funny because michael's
getting out?
Anyway, that note was sweet that he left for Monique.
Author's Response:
LMAO!!!!
Jimmy's crazy, man. He wasn't afraid to get beat up for Jane so I have to give that to him, I suppose.
Lol, I was waiting on you to read the next chapter so you could answer the question. At this point, yes, she is just irrelevant. It's about Michael and Monique now! :D <3
Yes, Michael is such a sweetie bop. <3 :DD
Thanks for reviewing!~
Date: Jun 23, 2014 01:06 am Title: Beauty & The Beast.
Girl you had me looking crazy with all the hard smiling I was doing while reading
this chapter! I still don't care for Rita's ass because she continues to let "big daddy" push
Monique around, touch all over her and call her "mute", smh so disrespectful.
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I wonder what's the deal with Rita and that clown anyway, why are they wanting to
see michael so bad? And Jane? Why was she acting so funny?
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Anywayyy, Monique and Michael are beautiful, i mean the connection that they have is
uncomparable, it really is. After all of those years away from each other it was as if
Michael hadn't even left. It was funny though, how he didn't know who Monique was at
first, and he tried to flirt with her lol. But it was beautiful after he realized it was indeed Monique.
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I can't wait to see these two blossom, together...but for some reason I have a feeling that a lot of
trouble is ahead also.
[Report This]Date: Jun 23, 2014 12:35 am Title: Caught.
I love this story! But I have to admit I forgot to read the last few chapters, so now I'm reading them backwards. Continue please! <3
Date: Jun 23, 2014 12:30 am Title: Caught.
Omgggg. You updated, im so excited, you know how much I've said I
love this story from the last reviews I put up, Lol. Anyway on to the story...
Rita is just ugh, terrible, I really had high hopes and thought she was really gonna
take care of Monique smh, and here she is having sex in front of the poor girl
Let alone letting this low life of a man "big daddy" mistreat this child. *pukes*
Just thinking of the man (and I use the term very loosely ) "big daddy" is makes
me want to throw up, I was happy when Michael was beating his ass, he deserved it.
Rita should have gotten a couple licks herself but...too bad michael is a man....
Anyway, this is only getting worse and worse for poor Monique hopefully everything
comes together for her.
[Report This]Date: Jun 22, 2014 07:02 pm Title: Deceit.
I just read all six chapters of this story and I need more lol. I love this story so much and its so different from the others, Continue Please!!
Author's Response:
Hi!
Oh awesome! I'm glad you liked it! Thank you so so much! I always try to come up with unique ideas even thought they are based off his short films. I try to put in a unique storyline beside that without trailing away from the short films' story.
Just a twist, I suppose. I like to be different LMAO.
I will continue. I will update as soon as possible because I'm really excited about where it's going! ;)
Thanks for reviewing! I appreciate it so much.
Date: Jun 22, 2014 06:53 pm Title: Deceit.
Daaaaaaaaamn!!!!
Wow....just....wow!!! I can't blame Jane for not waiting for Michael, I mean he was gone for like eight years, what was she supposed to do?
What did Michael expect to find? Did he think that Jane was just going to wait for him?
That really wasn't called for what he did to Jane's boyfriend Jimmy.
Anyways, can you please check out my two stories, I don't have a lot of reviews and I'm looking for another co authar because the one I had, she hasn't replied and so I need someone who's going to really help me on one of my stories that I'm working on. The story I really need a co authar for is one I'm writing called From The Fires Of Hell. You don't have to be the one who helps me but maybe you could just be another reviewer? Like I said, both of my stories don't have that many reviews. If I got more reviews, it would really help me to update more. One of my stories has I think only seven reviews and my other one only has like two or three.
Author's Response:
LOL. I'm glad you liked it! :D
Yeah, he should've known that Jane would move on but I think it was more about the racial slur that set Michael off into attacking Jimmy.
But everything will work out like it should? :3
I would LOVE to review your stories!~ I'll get right on it! If your co-author doesn't come back, try doing it yourself. If you have an idea of how you want it to go, then go form that. I'm really sure that you'll do an amazing job! :D
Thanks for reviewing!~
[Report This]Date: Jun 22, 2014 05:23 pm Title: Deceit.
Maaaan. That fight was something else. I can't say I blame Michael for beating Jimmy after the N word was used. I'd probably do the same. So that's what Jane has been up to huh? In a way I feel bad for her because Michael was gone for a long time. But then again with a man like Michael..I would've tried to stay loyal to him
Author's Response:
Yeah, that's what I wanted to do. I wanted my readers to be able to see both sides and understand why they did the things that they decided to do. I would have tried to stay loyal to Michael too. :) If you love someone, that's how it should be. Then again, if you get lonely then things are bound to happen.
It's just a difficult situation that people actually have to deal with. And it must suck, man... :(
Anyway, I'm glad you liked it! Thank you so much for reviewing! <3
I'll update soon, I pwomise! :3
[Report This]Date: Jun 22, 2014 03:47 pm Title: Deceit.
During that whole fighting scene I was like Damn Michael beat the poor guy unconsious uh? But hey he had it coming calling him out like that. Great chapter sweetie can't wait for more.
Author's Response:
He sure did have it coming. Michael went crazy on that guy. LOL
I didn't want to make it too grpahic to the point to where it was unreadable but I wanted it to be graphic enough. <3
But thank you, thank you so so much! I'll update as soon as possible. I am so happy that I'm getting such great reviews from everyone.
Thanks for reviewing, hon! <3
[Report This]Date: Jun 22, 2014 03:31 pm Title: Caught.
I love this story! But I have to admit I forgot to read the last few chapters, so now I'm reading them backwards. Continue please! <3
Author's Response:
Oh that's okay!~
XOXO
I hope you liked them! Thank you so much for reviewing!! <3
[Report This]Date: Jun 21, 2014 11:59 am Title: Beauty & The Beast.
Great chapter love! Turned out really good with their friendship staying in tact throughout 8 years of no communication!
[Report This]Date: Jun 21, 2014 11:16 am Title: Caught.
I really loved this chapter. It was realistic with honest scenarios. I like the way you write this. Things like this, having an underage main character with an adult main character, is hard to write about without getting offensive or perverted but you write it so well it is very real. I can't tell you the times that I was in my teens crushing on grown men old enough to be my dad. It happens in the real world and you capture it very well without it being taboo, forbidden, or just plain wrong/perverted.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much!! :D
Yes, it is very hard to write with an underage character and an older character with a story. You have to tread lightly lol. But I just drew from experiences, like you said, about how I felt about older men when I was Monique's age.
I wanted to capture the first pulls of womanhood that she develops and since she liked Michael so much, of course those 'urges' of growing up would be displayed from being around him. :)
But thank you so much for reviewing!~ :D I am so happy that you think well of my writing, I really do. :) I'm typing up the next chapter! XOXO
[Report This]Date: Jun 20, 2014 08:39 pm Title: Beauty & The Beast.
Ugh I hate Big Daddy! And I don't understand why Rita keeps him around especially with the way he treats her... she needs to kick his ass to the curb. STAT. Sleazy ass creep.
And I just love how she's so cute with Michael! So endearing and adorable and Michael is eating it all up. And lmao at his reaction to her after so many years have passed. Heh heh I see homeboy is not immune to her charms. ;)
Update soon!
Author's Response:
Unfortunately, there will be more of that weirdo around...you haven't seen the worst of it yet. :(
Yes! :D I love how their relationship is developing so far. Michael knows that she's missed him so he is soaking in all of her doting lmao.
Moniqur is charming, isn't she? A silent sweetheart ;)
Ill update after work lol :3
Thank you so much for reviewing! :*
Date: Jun 19, 2014 08:31 am Title: Prologue.
I will be waiting for the next chapter!!!! You better make it soon, or else..... *does evil thriller laugh*
Author's Response:
Lmao! I got you, girl! I got you ; D
I'm updating after I get off work :3
<3
[Report This]Date: Jun 18, 2014 10:10 pm Title: Beauty & The Beast.
That was my face when Big Daddy grabbed her thigh.
But, THAT WAS SO FUCKING GOOD. I love how you made Michael and Monique so intimate in the bedroom part. UGH, let them have sex already! The prologue is scaring me right now though, I'm like putting pieces together. But for now, PLEASE DON'T LET HER DIE BRUH. I will die too if she does. I swear for Moses, you better update soon.
Author's Response:
I literally pissed my pants laughing at that GIF!!!! Yeah, Big Daddy is a fucking creep
There will be more intimacy as their relationship grows :) lol sex will come, I promise ;)
I'm glad you liked it! :3 but I can't tell you what's gonna happen to them in the end :(
Thanks for reviewing and reading!! :D xoxo
Date: Jun 18, 2014 06:55 pm Title: Beauty & The Beast.
Im so-so-so-so sorry I didn't review cause I'm in ecstasy with this story! I just didn't review cause I'm so lazy. I just wonder is there gonna be a sequel!
Author's Response:
Lol! It's okay, hon! xoxo
I am really happy that you like it so much! I am so flattered and inspired! Thank you so much!
The way that I'm plqnning the story to end, I don't think there will be one but then again, I might :)
I just have to see after I'm done writing this lmao. <3
Again, thank you so much for reviewing. I really do appreciate it :) Thank you so so so much :*