Date: Dec 30, 2012 10:08 pm Title: Characters.
Like everyone else has stated, good plot. I don't like the "perfect Angel" character for Michael either. Keep up the good work and use the grammar tips given in the first review.
Date: Dec 30, 2012 03:43 pm Title: Characters.
no
Michael is an ass
trifling chesting ass muthafucka
[Report This]Date: Dec 30, 2012 12:17 pm Title: Chapter 1
That's so messed she is trying hard to make her marriage work and make it better, but Michael doesn't care >.<!!! Good story so far :)
[Report This]Date: Dec 30, 2012 07:40 am Title: Characters.
I love it so far! :) I think you have a really good plot amd I always like to read stories with Michael acting differently. Please update soon :)
Author's Response: Me too! I don't care for the never sinned perfect Michael.
I'll update soon though.:)
[Report This]Date: Dec 30, 2012 07:01 am Title: Chapter 1
I love it please update soon
Author's Response: I will:) and thank you for reading.
[Report This]Date: Dec 30, 2012 04:41 am Title: Chapter 1
Nice start but you need to put this symbol " between the dialogue. for example the girl asks when he will break the news.
"Once Princeton leaves" Michael said in a nonchalant tone.
I like th plot of the story but not Michael what he is doing is cruel
Author's Response: Thanks for the tip. I never wrote a fic before so that helped me alot :)