Date: Jan 02, 2013 02:12 am Title: Trust
Oooooommmmmggggg, finish guises!! This is awesome :3
[Report This]Date: Nov 26, 2012 06:07 pm Title: Waiting(Pt2)
Not bad! (:
[Report This]Date: Nov 26, 2012 06:07 pm Title: Waiting(Pt2)
Not bad! (:
Date: Nov 16, 2012 08:47 pm Title: Prologue
Loved it! Please continue
[Report This]Date: Nov 16, 2012 05:23 pm Title: Watching
I really like this story. I hope your feeling better now. But if your not i hope you get well soon :) Im glad Denise finally talked to Michael i was hoping she would finally talk sometime lol. I think Michael & Denise would make a great couple. Whenever you get a chance can you please update,Thanks. Lots Of L.O.V.E.
Date: Nov 12, 2012 08:16 pm Title: Prologue
It was a nice start, but dont be too suttle (spell check) when it comes to discription of the story. Be more in detail with scenes, pit more ito it. Dont make the chapters so short, you're a good writer but your full potential of you writing doesnt show because I feel like you're being lazy with it, but you're good when you write. Dont just breeze over thoes little intamacy parts when Michael and Denise 'connect', because I almost didnt feel what you were trying to make us feel. But other than that, it was great, I enjoyed it overall. Keep it up, hinestly! :)