Date: Oct 28, 2012 12:14 pm Title: Expect, The Unexpected...Chapter 4
loved it. Hope you update soon
Date: Oct 14, 2012 08:48 am Title: Expect, The Unexpected...Chapter 3
Oh one more thing there are a tone of people on here that know how to photo shop get one of them to hook you up with a nice picture
something like a silloete of a man leaning over a woman kisin her on a desk and have a picture of Michael and your main character fade over top of it
I would change you intial image of Michael to one of the ones of him from the ame era in a sute jacket or site jacket and tie it comes off more professory and not celebrity
Date: Oct 14, 2012 08:43 am Title: Expect, The Unexpected...Chapter 3
it's a good story, I'm intriegues but I would suggest you make her close to 18 as posible and if he dos anything wither make it after shes legal because he could still et introuble for that but he could get into even more id shes not 18
I would sugest you change it to a college class but highschool senoirs is okay, you have a few minor spelling issues but I'm no one to talk I still find errors and my stuff is read back to me
greak software to catch writing mistakes is NaturalReader 10 I keep it on all my computers it makes rading stories easier and catching mistakes more apparent even though I still miss some
I would say this didn't have to be so broken up you could have made these fist three chapters into 1 but that's just me I like reading long chapters stories but asid from that it's really good
Oh MOST IMPOSTANT change the title it sounds like a ten year old wrote it there is a titale on the tip of my tongue but I can't get it to come forth that would be perfect.
I think this was it
Xtra Credit:Indecent Affairs that will grab more peoples attention
Author's Response: Dang. Um i'll just delete it. No use of constantly writing chapters I know im a bad writer so forget it.
[Report This]Date: Oct 13, 2012 06:18 am Title: Expect, The Unexpected...Chapter 1
Love ch 1 2 and 3 keep up the work girl!!!
Date: Oct 12, 2012 10:40 pm Title: Expect, The Unexpected...Chapter 1
I love it great update! I hope he gives into his feelings for Sanjee and spends more time with her. I hope you update again soon!
Date: Oct 12, 2012 03:47 pm Title: Expect, The Unexpected...Chapter 2
Awww he's so sweet in this and obviously still heartbroken! I hope him and Sanjee spend more time together and get to know each other. Please post more soon! I love this I'm already hooked!
Author's Response: Thanks! I will try to post the third chater today! b29;
Date: Oct 12, 2012 03:41 pm Title: Expect, The Unexpected...Chapter 1
I am happy to review this story. I've yet to read the 3rd chapter but I absolutely LOVE teacher/student fantasies/stories. You are a great writer hun. Just give it a few days to let your story gain some popularity. I am excited about reading chapter 2 and I hope you keep going with this. Thanks for taking the time to write the story. I know you put a lot of hard work into it.
Author's Response:
Thank u alot.
Date: Oct 11, 2012 08:31 pm Title: Expect, The Unexpected...Chapter 1
This is a good story start! I've found that if you upload a chapter every few days that people will see it and read it because your story then lands at the top of its catagory consistantly. That is, it is at the "top of the stack" so to speak. I write my stories and save them on my hard drive, then I upload a chapter at a time. Now go wild with it! Don't get discouraged.
Author's Response:
Thank u. But i'll probly just delete it :/ no reviews and i feel like ima bad writer. I must be cuz only u reviewed. Thanks for it tho. I really preciate it.