[Report This]Date: Sep 16, 2013 08:48 pm Title: The Afterlife
this was really good!
Date: Oct 07, 2012 04:44 am Title: The Afterlife
wow! gruesome much!(but good) I would actually like you to continue this, maybe michael could find a girlfriend?even if he is a creep? can Alison come back to life?
[Report This]Date: Aug 23, 2012 05:04 pm Title: The Afterlife
Michael......*gulps* *troll faces*
[Report This]Date: Aug 22, 2012 11:45 pm Title: The Afterlife
Whoa that's some crazy ass Sh**t right there.
Reminds me of one of those horror flicks with the bad endings to them. That was brutal man! Haha *claps hands*
[Report This]Date: Aug 20, 2012 05:09 pm Title: The Attack
I read this whole story and it was sick man just sick! He needs a heart transplant real fast that's just mean of him.
Date: Aug 20, 2012 01:13 am Title: Double Death
I think there should be more realistic reaction from the characters. The joking around that Allison and Sasha (now HAD.) was kinda unbelieveabke. Allison just watched her friend get murdered, brutally, and showed NO emotion nor affection... What would you do if you saw a knife go through a persons head? Or even from the START be GENUIENLY freaked out that you're about to DIE? You just REALLY need to stress that emotion in the story, or it makes the story stale and corny. Work on that a lil bit, then that'll make the story MUCH better.
Author's Response:
I was actually planning on putting the emotion that Allison felt after what had just happened in the next chapter :P
But you make a good point. Now that you say that, I think I'm focusing too much on the story, and not enough on the emotion, so I'll definitely take your advice and try to work on it! :D
Thank you for the constructive critiquing! I REALLY appreciate it!
[Report This]Date: Aug 19, 2012 11:53 pm Title: Double Death
Aawwww nooooooooooooo! I want to see what happened next, I hope you can update as soon as possible :)
[Report This]Date: Aug 19, 2012 11:18 pm Title: Double Death
My gosh what will he do to her? I hope he doesn't do what I think he's gonna do??
Date: Aug 19, 2012 05:32 am Title: Screwed?
I think....michael more kind to allison than sasha (obviously with her attitude, like really?)
wait. Does he even have a heart tho? Lol. Love this already. *Adds to faves*
Author's Response:
Haha oh yeah, definitely.
Theoretically, no. In reality? :) ,,, All secrets concerning Michael will be revealed in due time.
Date: Aug 16, 2012 04:18 am Title: Drowning In Hunger
Was that even a real food, I wonder lol. Good update tho :)
[Report This]Date: Aug 15, 2012 12:33 am Title: Blood Bath
i've been reading this and wow this story is wild. loolz i feel sorry for them poor girls. gees mike is a beast in this.
Author's Response: XD Oh trust me, it'll get worse for the two girls
[Report This]Date: Aug 15, 2012 12:27 am Title: Blood Bath
You know, I wonderin that what if allison and sasha had made a big mistake to michael in the past, like bullying him when they were a child or whatsoever (drama I know, but it's just what I'm thinkin abt)
[Report This]Date: Aug 15, 2012 12:18 am Title: Portraits
Okay so this story involved zombies. ZOMBIES OMG THANK YOU SO MUCH I LOVE ZOMBIES! dis story is greeeeiigghhtt !
(and let's just pray together DEAR LORDT PLEASE HELP ALLISON AND SHASHA IN THE NAME OF JESUS AH-MEYYYN.)
Author's Response: Haha! If you like zombies then you're gunna love this story ;) Thanks for all of the reviews!
[Report This]Date: Aug 15, 2012 12:03 am Title: Getting To Know Each Other
Dang, my rough-sexy-inhuman mj
[Report This]Date: Aug 14, 2012 11:53 pm Title: The Attack
I'm intrigued I'm intrigued! *clicks to the next chapter*
Author's Response: Yeeeaah! *dances around the room happily*