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Reviewer: Megs Signed [Report This]
Date: Sep 09, 2012 10:57 am Title: Chapter 16: Don't Walk Away

CALL THE DOCTOOOOOOORRRRR! XD

I have an half idea of who this doctor might be... huhuh!

 

Beautiful chapter as always my dear! It hurts to see Michael and Evelyn so in pain... :( I don't want them to argue. Now I'm wondering if Evelyn will continue doing the Burlesque performances... because if she continues I'm sure Dr. Jackson will ask again for Carmella! >.<

I send you a big kiss, waiting for the next chapter. <3



Author's Response: Ha ha ha ha. Thank you once again for another review. I really appreciate your constant support for me and my writing and that you actually take time to extend a gesture of acknowledgment. It means a lot to me. You've got no idea how great it feels to read all these reviews. As far as Evelyn and Michael are concerned, who ever said is love is going to be easy? Stay tuned for more action and more drama. Much L.O.V.E. from my heart to yours.

Reviewer: Pocketsizedlion Signed [Report This]
Date: Sep 08, 2012 04:09 am Title: Chapter 1: Greatest Show On Earth

wow! It's just getting more and more intense, please update soon! This story just keeps getting better and better, your doing a good job with it hun *hugs*



Author's Response: Well hello there my Pocketsizedlion! <3 I'm so totally in love with your username!!! Thank you so much for another encouraging review. I really appreciate all that you've done to boost up my confidence and make this story popular. Writers are nothing without their readers. Much L.O.V.E. from my heart to yours!

Reviewer: AishaLuv Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Sep 07, 2012 11:30 am Title: Chapter 16: Don't Walk Away

Yay, update!!


 That was very intense in the beginning when Michael ran into her..


There’s so much chemistry between them,, Evelyn is so strong for being able to resist him!! I know I would’nt manage XD The way he’s always touching her, he’s like a moth drawn to the light or something and I know she feels it too she’s just trying to do the ‘right’ thing


And he’s not making it easy on her at ALL XD


It’s not good for her to keep running to Lucius tho and I’m glad Evelyn realizes this.. So far he’s come off as an okay-fellow and my first impressions of him have been wrong,, but I can only hope it stays that way…Esp if she keeps leading him on everytime Dr Jackson gets too near


Luckily her father is still around to save the day. She may not be able to confide in him about her secrets but it is something. He’s like her refuge in this whole ‘love’-triangle XD


I wonder if she’s gunna keep up with the Burlesque thing even after what it led to in Dr Jackson’s suite….


I don’t think that Evelyn running away from Michael is gunna help her as far as ‘Carmella’s concerned cuz he might keep taking it out on her since she reminds him so much of Evelyn  Which of course makes perfect sense,, but it does say something about his feelings for Evelyn as well


I think they both really might be falling in love But I’m afraid the circumstances will never permit it  .So tragic :( They really belong together! They could have something so beautiful together!!


Please update again soon? I’m really anxious to read more darling You know how much I love this brilliant story!!!


 


Thnx, Ash ;^)


 



Author's Response: And hello to you too Ash! Gee, all your reviews and I think you've actually spoilt me into expecting them everytime I update. I never get tired of reading your reviews and I can never get enough of them! Like I said, writers are nothing without their readers, especially those kind who leave such amazing reviews on their work. So thank you thank you thank you so much for your constant show of love and support for me and my story. And as far as Lucius is concerned, I'll give a hint, a person, anyone for that matter can stay saintly for only so long. And before I go for an update, I think I'm going to call a poll. I need to decide who to kill and who not to kill when the ship sinks. So cast your vote. And stay tuned for more action and more drama. I might be uploading another story soon and I really hope you'd like that one too. Thank you for your never ending support. Much L.O.V.E. from my heart to yours.

Reviewer: armcjackson Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Sep 05, 2012 01:57 pm Title: Chapter 16: Don't Walk Away

I love this story.



Author's Response: Thanks girlie. I really appreciate your regular flow of reviews. I'm so thankful for what you do. Much L.O.V.E. from my heart to yours.

Reviewer: NatashaRosee Signed [Report This]
Date: Sep 05, 2012 05:50 am Title: Chapter 14: She's Out Of My Life

You're a great writer! I'm jealous



Author's Response: Aww thanks darling. Much L.O.V.E.

Reviewer: AishaLuv Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 30, 2012 01:50 am Title: Chapter 1: Greatest Show On Earth

Ohh and before I forget: I meant to tell you before that I'd be honored to write a story with you!! It's just that I'm really cramped for time, esp with this darned job of mine XD But if I ever find a spot in my schedule you'll be the first to know!! <3

Thnx, Ash ;^)



Author's Response: Great! Mail me whenever you can to cerinekyrahsands@yahoo.com
I'm also on Twitter. DM me @CerinKyrahSands I've got a rough idea for the plot but I need you to add scenes, help me with dialogues and make the story interesting. I appreciate your effort. Much L.O.V.E. from my heart to yours.

Kyrah

Reviewer: AishaLuv Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 30, 2012 01:30 am Title: Chapter 15: Leave Me Alone

Well, I think that, all blackmail aside, that was a fairly good talk Evelyn had with her aunt. Was about time she reminded Beatrice of her position as her aunt–no more, no less


Unfortunately Beatrice is just as stubborn as her little niece and refuses to really listen and provide her with what she needs. Hopefully she’ll never find out about that night Michael had with ‘Carmella’. All hell would break loose, that’s for sure!


On the other hand, wouldn’t it perhaps be good for Evelyn if she could talk to someone she trusts about the whole thing, like Rose maybe? Not her aunt of course XD Cuz it can’t be healthy for a 16 year old girl to have to keep such things pent up to herself….


Oh well,, At least now she doesn’t need to worry about anyone telling on them, cuz Rose’s condition isn’t all it needs to be  either, is it? They both have difficult lives with much that is expected from them, TOO much, and they both are desperate to break free


I do hope Lucius will start taking hints after Beatrice talks to him. On the other hand tho what if she only tells him to keep an even closer eye on Evelyn and Dr Jackson? What if all she does is arouse suspicion so even if she’s no longer interfering with Evelyn’s life,, other people will simply take over her part?


Darn!! And just one more thing…….WHO THE HELL SAW THEM ALMOST KISSING ON THE DECK??!!?!?! Who told on them?!


 


Honey, you are very very very much welcome!! Every review I write comes from my heart to yours, simply becuz you deserve ‘em all; and then some!! I rlly admire you for your brilliant chapters ànd for always takin the time to respond to my silly gibberish over here XD You really kick ass!


Thnx, Ash ;^)



Author's Response: Hee hee hee... as sadistic as this sounds I read your review and think to myself, gee, this girl doesn't have a clue what's going to happen next, she's sure going to die on the spot when she reads my next update and... buahahahaha... this evil genius laugh encroaches my mind!!! Lol I can't help myself. I do enjoy reading your reviews so very much. And as far as the kiss goes... hmm... there are things that are better left unexplained. And just a hint, I'm sure you remember Ruth Dewitt Bukater making an appearance in chapter 14. I dont know if I want to add a clarification on that part. I mean come on! This girl just got busted by her aunt. You honestly thinl she's gonna snoop around like a Private Investigator? I dont think so. Oh well lets see what comes to pass in the next update shall we? Mwahahahaha. Lol sorry. Much L.O.V.E. from my heart to yours.

Kyrah

PS I'd really appreciate it if you can have a look at my poetry. Thanks.

Reviewer: Pocketsizedlion Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 25, 2012 02:52 pm Title: Chapter 15: Leave Me Alone

aww wow, that was an intense chapter! I loved the talk Evelyn had with Beatrice, i can see from both their point of views.

Please update soon! Really want to know what happens next! :)



Author's Response: Hello my Pocketsizedlion! Sorry I took so long to respond. I had special plans for Michael's birthday!!! Anyways thank you thank you thank you for another one of your much appreciated reviews. Where would I ever be without my loyal reviwers to boost me up. Next update would be uploaded in thw weekend. Be patient till then. Much L.O.V.E. from my heart to yours.

Kyrah.

Reviewer: Megs Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 22, 2012 04:27 pm Title: Chapter 15: Leave Me Alone

Go Evelyn, go!

Her aunt's words reminds me of my parents... they almost think the same way as she does :/

It was a relief to see that Evelyn finally said out loud her feelings to Beatrice, but she can't understand..!

She's confused, we can't blame her... she's only sixteen and has to face all this crazy stuff and emotions at once.

The only thing that kinda disappoints me everytime I read a new chapter is... they're too short! T-T sigh!

 

 

Love you as always, <3



Author's Response: Yeah, I can understand. Many parents fit in to this mould. Emotional blackmailing is the best and only effective weapon up their sleeve and sometimes they exploit its use. Which just isn't fair. And sometimes it scares me if I'll end up the same way. So I swore to myself that I'll never give myself the chance for it to happen. And the reason why chapters are short is because when I first started uploading stories to this site somebody told me long chapters scare people off. I'll try to make my next update as long as.it can go. Gosh I dont want to end this story! I'm addicted to writing it! LOL Much L.O.V.E.

Reviewer: MichaelsBillieJean1981 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 19, 2012 06:22 am Title: Chapter 14: She's Out Of My Life

This is such a beautiful, mesmerizing story! I eat up each and every chapter! His heart is broken and to protect her, Michael had to break hers! As much as he loves and misses Lisa tho and punishes himself for her decision, carrying the responsibility for this tragic and incredibly painful development of their relationship all alone on his shoulders, his heart still beats for Evelyn, and it beats loudly!

On the one hand she should maybe have given in and let him kiss her and kiss him back, but on the othere hand there would've been a HUGE risk that this would just have been a momentary sensation in the heat of the moment. Be there for him, but as a friend and dont get your heart ripped out of your chest, until his heart won't be able to beat without yours...and that day will come. True love can't be suppressed forever!

Author's Response: Aww... thank you for such a warm and heartfelt review. I see you've connected so well with my story and it brings me great joy to see so many people enjoying it. Yeah I know it would have felt better for the reader if I had ended it with her kissing him back. But analysing it from Dr Jackson's perspective it would have just been in the heat of the moment like you said. And Evelyn's character is not someone who would put someone else's need before her own dignity. Thank you for this very detailed and critcal review on emtions of both sides. I really appreciate it. Much L.O.V.E. from my heart to yours.

Reviewer: AishaLuv Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 19, 2012 05:31 am Title: Chapter 13: What Goes Around Comes Around

(*sorry, I accidently deleted this comment XD)

Mannn, again with the mixed feelings...I dont know whether to pick Evelyn's side,, or actually feel a little sorry for Dr Jackson now

I think her acting strong and not allowing him to win her over as ‘Evelyn’ again is a good thing, but maybe she would've best allowed him to explain himself with an open mind instead of taking matters into her own hands and doing most of the talking herself in such a hostile way

Now I guess we'll never know what it was he wanted to say to her

Unless maybe he tells Carmella? I can imagine that he'll start clinging onto her more and more now, the further Evelyn pushes him away

But again the more he confides in Carmella, the worse things might get if he ever does find out that she is actually Evelyn behind the mask

And the angrier Evelyn makes him, the more hurtful the punches Carmella will have to take for it...right?! Sorry XD Just voicing my fears here….

God, this is getting so complicated already  I can totally see the drama unfolding and so far it’s lookin UGLY!!

BTW I just love how you’re also adding bits of the original Titanic story with Rose and Jack,,that rlly gives it a little extra somethin ;D

Damn. They’re not gunna…SINK in this story are they? ;^O

Darling, I’m scared! X’D Gotta go read more now!

 

Thnx, Ash ;^)



Author's Response:

Accidental deletions: happens all the time love. Like this one time I had a dream that I had deleted this whole story by accident and ever sinc that day I'm extra super carefulwhen I upload this story! And oh yes, the ugly drama consequent to all this. Pray that I'd be able to do that right becaise I'm not the best of writers when it comes to exploring emotions being mildly autistic in nature. I'm not kidding. That was one of reasons why I found it so hard to write the intimate scenes. And as far the end is concerned I'm still not exactly sure who to kill. Sometimes I feel like killing Dr. Jackson. Sometimes I feel like killing Evelyn. Sometimes I feel like killing both ot them. And other times I want to keep them both alive and kill someone else like Evelyn's father. Then my conscience overtakes me for killing a father and I get lost in the space of my imagination again! Its frustrating I'm telling ya! What do you want to happen? I'm gonna post the question at the end notes for the next chapter and call a vote. *le sigh...* Much L.O.V.E. from my heart to yours.

Reviewer: AishaLuv Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 19, 2012 05:20 am Title: Chapter 14: She's Out Of My Life

First, I just really want you to know, once again, that you are doing such a wonderful job with this story Darling! Every chapter just literally takes my breath away!!

This chapter pretty much blew every estimation I made before to pieces, didn’t it?

Waw! That was rlly emotional when he opened up to her about Lisa. What a story!! I totally understand why Dr Jackson is the way he is now…He’s a burdened man practically trapped between the borders of life and death…He’s a living, walking, talking man on the outside, but slowly dying away on the inside

And I kinda wished Evelyn wouldn’t have walked away from him there and then after his confession,, basically by doing this she passed up a great opportunity to be there for him and slowly win over every part of him, tho I do understand why she ran. It can’t be easy for a 16 year old girl to have such a huge responsibility & heavy burden places on her shoulders all becuz of her love for a broken man in his 30s

And I know Dr Jackson said he didn’t expect her to help him, but I do have a feeling that simply being there for him and not leaving him cold and all alone like always when she’d finally started gaining his trust as possibly the only existing person,, would be enough for him

Sure she can’t ‘replace’ Lisa, but that doesn’t mean that he could never love her. He could never love her the SAME, but that doesn’t mean LESS…It just means Different!!

They both have some serious thinking to do but I’m hoping everything will turn out fine

These 2 belong together!! The force and magnetic pull between them is not just something common that happens every day to every person by ‘accident’ and they should find a way to embrace it instead of pushing each other away and running from it once the other starts opening up,, even tho it is hard!

It’s really really REALLY hard! But not impossible…

Seriously, you are brilliant darling! You have no idea how anxious I am for the next chapter and I just finished reading like 4 chapters in a row…I’m HOOKED! XD Can’t get enough!

Also I think it’s only appropriate that I explain why I’ve been so absent lately. I NEED you to know that it has nothing to do with your story cuz I’ve really missed the bejeezus out of it…but it’s all becuz of this stupid new job of mine! It’s been taking up most of my time and mostly I’m too tired by the end of the day to rlly find the energy to read anymore

But I’ll do whatever it takes to never keep you waiting that long again, esp since I can’t wait for more more more of this brilliant story!! XD

I cant tell you enough how much I love it and how much it means to me…You’ve rlly made my day!

 

Thnx  SO SO SO VERY MUCH!!! Ash ;^)



Author's Response: And as always I'm simply humbled by all of your kind words. You have no idea how it makes me to read your reviews. Sometimes when I hit writer's block I keep on reading your reviews over and over again so that I'll feel at least little better about myself and in hope that your words would give me better ideas to perfect the plot. I really appreciate what you're doing for me. Jobs can be a drainer I can understand so don't strain yourself too hard. Knowing your reasons I can wait in peace until you review my next upload. Good luck with your new job sweetheart!!! b29; :-* b29; :-* b29; :-* b29; And I know this is a little too much to ask but can you at least briefly review my other story Three words, unspoken...? You dont have to review it chapter by chapter but just give an overall summary of what you think. You help me a great deal to plan my plots to perfection and I'd have been totally lost without you in writing Sweet deception. I love you so, so, so much for that. Thank you for everything. Much L.O.V.E. from my heart to yours!!!

Reviewer: AishaLuv Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 19, 2012 04:04 am Title: Chapter 12: Cinderella Stay Awhile

... I AM OFFICIALLY DEAD RIGHT NOW ...

Wow! Where do I begin? So many mixed emotions in one chapter..

At first I didn’t like the fact that he was hurting her while taking her virginity..I kinda wished he would've taken it easy, slowly and lovingly, but at the same time, thanks to his revelation of Evelyn's feelings near the end, I do understand his POV..

He rlly was consumed by passion and taking out his frustrations on 'Carmella', wishing it was Evelyn

At first when he said her name I think I nearly fell off my chair XD I was like WHHÀÀÀTTT?!?!?! ;O

But then he apologized and while I felt relieved, at the same time I was a little disappointed, if that makes sense XD I do think its for the best that he don't know it's her  but at the same time I kinda wanted him to know

I guess cuz it would make this whole thing a lot easier .I'm kinda fearful of Michael's reaction once he'll find out that Evelyn and Carmella rlly are 1 and the same person and it is Evelyn Aldridge's virginity he just took...and HOW!

I'm frickin terrified of that moment as well as when anyone else finds out about them!!

GOD! I have to go read more now X'D

 

Thnx, Ash ;^)



Author's Response: Haa ha haa ha haa haa haa!!! I knew it! I knew my readers would freak out when Dr.Jackson calls Evelyn by her name. As far as Evelyn's experience is concerned, you cant eat the cake and have the cake at the same time. For him she's just a toy for the night so he really doesn't care if he hurts her or not. He just wants to make the maximum use of availlable resourcs. And girl you explore the emotions of my characters better than I do. I' must admit I actuallly develop the plot based on your charactee analysis most of the time. That's why I keep telling you we should write a story together! But you never respond to my request! I feel so bad. Tell me what you think really soon. Can't wait. Much L.O.V.E. from my heart to yours!!!

Reviewer: AishaLuv Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 19, 2012 03:29 am Title: Chapter 11: I Just Can't Stop Loving You

OH HOT BLOODY DAMN!!! That was SO HOTTT I don’t even know what to say right now X’D

But I’m afraid that you ending it there means something bad is going to happen..

GOSH I hope my instincts are slackening on me and I’m wrong XD

I do get the feelin that he’s drunk so that might be the cause…WOW! But he actually tried taking off her mask and he told her his real name! that’s saying a LOT if you ask me

He really must be crazy bout this ‘Carmella’ and it might lead to HER breaking HIS heart for a change

I’m just guessing over here but it’s impossible to tell what’s gunna happen next,,that’s how great of a writer you are Darling!

I’m just guna go ahead and read the next one now since I cant WAIT to find out what happen next XD

Pls forgive my impatience,, Lol

 

Thnx, Ash ;^)



Author's Response: Hey Ash. First of all I must apologize for taking so long to respond to your reviews. I actually didn't know how to and do justice to the time you take to do it so yeah I can say I was scared how to give you a worthy response. Girl I really admire that you took time to review each chapter before you went on to read the next chapter. You actually hold yourself waiting to be surprised and I dont I can ever do that!!! I'm so happy that you like this chapter because it was one of the hardest for me to write. I've never written intimate scenes before. Thank you once again. Much L.O.V.E. from my heart to yours.

Reviewer: AishaLuv Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 18, 2012 10:48 am Title: Chapter 1: Greatest Show On Earth

OMG Darling...Wait for me!! XD

I can't believe I missed like 3 whole chapters when I was so anxious to find out what would go down!!

Just lettin' ya know I'll try catching up on everything later today, kay?

Thnx, Ash ;^)

 



Author's Response: Sure thing girl. And I was wondering if you had tuned out for good! LOL ;-) Just kidding. You just catch up and tell me how it was!!! Mwaah.... Much L.O.V.E.

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