Date: Oct 16, 2015 04:44 am Title: Chapter 18
Its starting to get suspenseful. Good job!
Date: Oct 15, 2015 08:20 pm Title: Chapter 17
Michael is a very good man.
Date: Oct 13, 2015 05:29 pm Title: Chapter 11
Good story.
Date: Oct 13, 2015 05:06 pm Title: Chapter 10
Good descriptive writing.
Date: Oct 13, 2015 03:30 pm Title: Chapter 8
Wow! Four years is a long time !But, I guess she should feel honored that he still wanted to find her, after all of that time. Especially , since they were not angry with each other when they parted four years ago. There should not be a problem with them talking as friends, or what ever they want to be to, or for each other. Good story. Good character friends. Keep writing.:-)
Date: Oct 13, 2015 02:47 am Title: Chapter 7
Be careful. It should read: Then he grabbed my waist and pulled me toward him to kiss my lips and said:-I'm very happy you chose to stay! I still enjoy reading your story.
Date: Oct 13, 2015 02:35 am Title: Chapter 6
She did win! She is more shy than he is.. You write very well. Be careful of sentence fragments, and run one... I can't wait to read more chapters to see how the story unfolds.K:-)
Date: Oct 13, 2015 02:22 am Title: Chapter 5
A very smooth move Michael..
Date: Oct 13, 2015 02:07 am Title: Chapter 4
Wow! Good job, Michael!
Date: Oct 13, 2015 01:48 am Title: Chapter 3
Good audition!