[Report This]Date: Mar 12, 2015 12:12 pm Title: Chapter 12
Married parents... you can never expect to tell one something and it not get to the other. Of course they are going to be slightly concerned at the least with all that's going on. Malania still dodges his questions like about the fight with her dad... if she wants to be a true friend she should open up just a little lol
Author's Response:
This is true... married parents basically share the same brain... unless they are unhappy and then they dont lol.
Malania wants to be emotionally independant but she doesn't understand that that's what alienates people from her.
Date: Feb 01, 2015 11:50 pm Title: Chapter 12
I think it probably has to be with the fact that it's 2 AM and I'm absolutely exhausted, but the timeline on this is starting to blur for me. I don't know if that's intentional on your part, but it's a little confusing on the readers end (the suicide being in the past, the two casey's etc...)
I've got to say, this is such a great story. Thank you so much for writing! You're a better person than I am--you uploaded 12 chapters all at once haha! I'm a once-per-weeker on my own. I know how much time and effort you must put into your writing, so I hope you know it's appreciated.
I absolutely cannot wait for the next chapter! Keep them coming! Please!!!
-ann
Author's Response:
Just to clarify the suicide attempt is from when she was in her teens. I tried to make that obvious with references to things like the Thriller album, and references to things like how her "teen life" should have been. Maybe I will have to change it to saying "past" or "flash back" or something!
I have another 20 or so chapters to post and will do so when I get a spare second :)
Date: Jan 31, 2015 08:53 pm Title: Chapter 12
I just read the whole story. You convey Michael and Malania's emotions so well. I even got teary-eyed several points. Overall, this story is a gem; please keep going!
Author's Response:
Thanks lovely! I have a bunch more chapters to post! Just getting the time to do that!
[Report This]Date: Jan 31, 2015 02:25 pm Title: Chapter 12
Have I mentioned lately how much I love this story? I think my main gripe about a lot of stories is how superficial things remain; how somehow deep feelings arise and a strong connection occurs, but the dialogue never (or rarely) seems to dip below the surface. I say that not to criticize other stories, but to emphasize one of the ways in which this story stands out. Here you have a plot which is set below the surface. The topic matter is dark and the lead characters are dealing with heavier emotions, but they both contain a lightness that keeps the story from getting depressing. Michael, with his generosity and thoughtfulness, and Malania, with her honesty and loyalty.
Her dad's guilting her after her joke was....perfect.
Funny how he was worried about someone doing that to me at this stage of my life.
A hint!
I can't wait to see how she approaches her gift and how he responds!