Date: Mar 10, 2015 02:04 pm Title: Chapter 3
I'm glad he got to spend time with his niece and that he was shown he was still trusted. I think he needed that uplifting to survive the bomb that just dropped. His reaction to finding out it was Casey was HEARTWRENCHING!!
I'm at work and I don't even care that my boss just walked by twice. I can't stop reading!
LOL I wish I could get away with reading fan fic at work. I'm impressed. I like to check this on my phone at work, but have to be sly about it lol.
Poor Michael, that would have been a very strong reaction in reality, I'm sure.
Date: Feb 01, 2015 09:53 pm Title: Chapter 3
I can't. I'm obsessed.
This is wonderful! Michael's inner dialogue is so on point, it's crazy. God!
I love "different" stories--the ones that don't just focus in on sex and leave it at that. This is so, so great, thank you so much!
I always like creating a story, not just a soft core porn novella ;)
Date: Jan 31, 2015 02:16 pm Title: Chapter 3
I still can't get over the fact that there have already been at least 2 characters in which you've stated that that was the last time Michael "ever saw" them. It's just so...ominous...and intriguing. That no one notified Michael of his flight just filled me with a sense of loneliness. How quickly the cracks grow when the pressure gets turned up.
Having him contact his father was an unusual twist. I like how you stayed true to the awkwardness in that relationship, while still gently humanizing Joseph.
Okay, this Diane and Casey. I've had a sickening feeling since you first brought up their names, but now? It's being replaced by a sickening, -y, feeling.
This just all feels so isolating, and I don't really know who to look to for the reason. On the one hand, he's doing it to himself by not allowing visitors (apart from Mercedes) and on the other, I wonder what kinds of friends would not be trying to call him or provide support.... and frankly? You are being a tease There's so much that I want to know that you aren't allowing us to know at this point. I'm sitting here trying to guess a bunch of stuff. I'm assuming it is the Dangerous tour, but I didn't think he was ever arrested. So, I assume you are taking creative liberty (take 'em). I'm also wondering who is trying to get a hold of him and why he doesn't see Rosa or Larry again. Then, of course, the female lead comes into question. Malania? Lisa? (I beg of you not to make the lead be LMP! My love for her is....severely limited).
Ugh. On the one hand, I love your writing as half the time I feel like each chapter leaves me with more questions than the previous chapter ending....and on the other? I want answers, now!
Can't wait until you update