Reviews For Neverland
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Reviewer: Aranya Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 06, 2016 10:04 am Title: Prologue

Well, well, well! This looks like a promising story! Honestly, for a starting writer your descriptions are better than mine. You portray so much action with just a sentence! Whoa! <3
The fairy is Tinkerbell, isn't she? (Although I have unfortunately never read Peter Pan). I wonder where her friends go when she collided with the meteor? Certainly it had been a large explosion?

I love the Piratey accent! It's goodie-goodie-good.

The only problem I have with your story is that you give away the pictures of everything. Probably you saw that trend on other stories, but it's not really much good an idea. Let your readers imagine, let them be guided by your descriptions - they're good enough! Also, when starting your story, please, it turns away a lot of readers when you post an entire chapter only with your cast.

I'm fully aware you're a new writer! Don't worry - as I said, your writing capablities are far greater than mine. Just putting there my opinions as a reader. Haha! I wish you luck.

Reviewer: Nat5682 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: Oct 28, 2014 06:01 am Title: Characters.

Can't wait to see how this story goes!

Reviewer: MJ_s K1ss and Tell Anonymous [Report This]
Date: Oct 28, 2014 03:24 am Title: Characters.

It sounds/looks interesting!!!!

Reviewer: Tessaflora Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 28, 2014 02:03 am Title: Characters.

I LOVE IT!! please do continue :D I love the idea of michael being peter pan like it's just so cute & he's even mentioned it himself so..

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