[Report This]Date: Jun 03, 2013 08:56 pm Title: Chapter 1
c: I Actually See No Grammar And Typo Mistakes. But Oh Well! It's An Amazing Story cx At First I'm Like: Ehh This Story Might Be Good. Then After Reading Chapters I'm Like: Holy Crap This Is Amazing! c:
Author's Response:
Thanks...hope your read the new chapter. continue to enjoy!
[Report This]Date: Jun 03, 2013 08:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
Omg gurl i honestly never on here no more :/ so much has been going on overhere at my end that i've been to distracted to update or read stories i wanna read & write so bad but lost some interests due to some stuff i been going through. But i will deffo update soon & i also wanna read the rest of this story so bad. I even see some new stories up here i read the summeries but still wasn't able to read yet... :/ ugh life 4 me as of now been crazy but it will get better overhere. I can't wait to do updates & catch up with ur stories & read others! :))) i miss being here. & hope your doing good to. Much Love <3
Author's Response:
much love too!
Date: Jun 03, 2013 06:38 pm Title: Chapter 1
c: I just started reading this story I'm on chapter 3 now :D I love this story so far but i'm sure i'll love it no matter what :D Good job!
Author's Response:
**blushes**...Thank you so much for the read and review!!! hope you continue to read all my typo, grammar error filled story, humorous-drama filled chapters...lmao!
[Report This]Date: Jun 03, 2013 04:34 pm Title: Chapter 28
This is just drama drama drama.... i need to take this all in
Author's Response:
hehehe...my apologies...it is indeed drama overload...lmao!
[Report This]Date: Jun 03, 2013 12:12 pm Title: Chapter 28
Ah! This is gonna be HELL of interesting! Just can't wait! BTW....can you get Jelly and Michael to have some meaningful convo? ;D
Author's Response:
Thanks for the read and review! lol!...cant wait for the next chapter. About the convo...harsh! that is the toughest to write- snitch! hopefully michael can be able to do that in the future chapters.
[Report This]Date: Jun 03, 2013 06:41 am Title: Chapter 28
Okay you healed the wound lol. Yay! I can't wait for the next chapter! :D
Author's Response:
hehehe...damn! havent even start to write the next chapter...lmao!...harsh...pretty soon!
[Report This]Date: May 31, 2013 10:01 pm Title: Chapter 27
Please don't let her lose it! AJ pleaasseee
Author's Response:
oh got! Lieza...my apologies girl. I wrote two versions of the next chapter but I need to write-off the baby part for a while. Don't feel sad about the baby. Promise a baby will come for them soon...thanks for the read and review!
Date: May 31, 2013 06:31 am Title: Chapter 27
Real talk now, Rachel needa back da *BEEP* up and sit da *BEEP* dwn. Why is she constantly coming where she ain't wanted, um sooo glad Mikey sliced her up a lil, he should hve fired her extinct species Sid the Sloth looking azz a long time ago (I love Sid tho). N Jelly shoulda hit her more!
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review. Rachel has been properly dealt with. Agree Michael should have fired her long time ago. She was incompetent and a B! lmao! continue reading...thanks!
[Report This]Date: May 31, 2013 01:22 am Title: Chapter 27
Damn Jelly slapped Rachel twice and it still didn't knock any sense into her crazy ass. Too bad she didn't take Michael's threat seriously and she had to learn the hard way that he is crazier than Prince. She better hope Jelly doesn't lose their baby because that's her death. I hope Jelly will be ok and the baby is fine but it seems she lost a lot of blood. Jelly should trust that Michael loves her and that nothing Rachel says has any truth to it. For Michael's sake Rachel should pray that Jelly listens to what he has to say her not that I think she will.
I agree with the other reviewer on here about Michael. Communication is not Michael's strong point and he really needs to work on that with Jelly. I also think it will add more depth to the story honestly. I'm glad that Michael changed his habit of sexually forcing himself on women but he needs to learn to be more honest, caring and willing to compromise with the people he loves. I don't mean to say change his character in the story from a man of strong power and will to a punk or a pussy but as a man knows the mistakes he made and is willing to learn from them and change. Because right now Jelly's going to need him more than ever and he can't help her if he don't got his shit together.
Author's Response:
Rachel is indeed crazy ass. Can't wait for your furture reviews. Totally agree COMMUNICATION is not Michaels strong point in the past and on this story. It is a bit hard to re-write his character it would take a while to hcange his ways but he will get there lets just be patient with him. He should know his mistakes and change for the better. I'll try to slowy but surely write him that way. Hopefully the future chapters will lead to that.
Thanks for the review and inputs. Helps a lot in writing this story. Appreciate it.
[Report This]Date: May 30, 2013 11:20 pm Title: Chapter 27
Michael needs to tell her EVERYTHING if he doesnt want a repeat Ani situation. He needs to tell her that Rachel snuck under the table and he thought it was Jelly. He needs to tell her that Rachel is conspiring with his enemies and that he fired Rachel. He needs to tell her about Prince and Ani. Jelly still may not believe him but she'll NEVER believe him if he doesn't communicate. This was the main problem with Ani there were so many misunderstandings between them because they never talked. I hope he learned from his past. That's the only way I see their relationship surviving.
And I think it's about time he put that torture chamber to good use.
Author's Response:
I agree with you when you said he really needs to tell her EVERYTHING. It's an ANI situation again for him. That is the hardest part to write. Michael communicating. Hope in the future chapters he somehow improves on it...thanks for the review and the inputs. It greatly helps me to create twist in the story and improve michaels character.
[Report This]Date: May 30, 2013 04:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
I gotta deffo catch up i miss u & reading ur fantastic work! I have to put this in my favorites so i can catch up on this is so cool! & hope u been well to <3
Author's Response:
holy craft! you're back!.....CANT WAIT FOR YOUR STORY UPDATES too! I'm cool and well...hope you are too! Thanks.
[Report This]Date: May 29, 2013 04:57 pm Title: Chapter 26
FUCKKKK!!!! This is why ratchet orangutan pterodactyl looking ass bitches need to stay in they motherfucking place...THE FUCKING FOREST!! She need to take her skinny toothpick looking hula hooping with a fucking cheerio ass needs to take a step back before we lock and load on that hoe....Jelly i know you pregnant but its about that time you start snatching some hair and body slamming hoes
LOCK AND LOAD GIRL!!!1
Author's Response:
lmao! you've got some pretty good animal adjectives rolling out for Rachel B!...i'm done...super done...you made me laugh...lock and load preggy Jelly can't agree more to that...lmao!
Thanks for the reads and review...really appreciate it!
[Report This]Date: May 29, 2013 11:53 am Title: Chapter 26
Jelly is about to cut a bitch XD ahahaha
Author's Response:
lmao!...i want Jelly to at least do a slap or two on the bitch face...my got...she deserves it!
Thanks as always Leiza....have a great day!
[Report This]Date: May 29, 2013 11:20 am Title: Chapter 26
No surprise that Prince and Rachel hooked up. I can actually say that I was just waiting for you to write that into the story. Prince is a very abusive love and he wonders why he can't find a girl who will take his shit. Rachel is officially crazy now in my book I can't wait for you to write her out of the story. I don't care how you do it just make it soon and get rid of both of the Princes while your at it. When I read the sex between those two I wanted to vomit and I was on a public city bus. It would not have been pretty, please don't write about their sex anymore, seriously.
I have one request for this story please make Rachel and Prince deaths very painful, slow and gruesome. I thinks that's the least Michael cane do them considering their fucking up his life.
First Michael better fire that bitch and then he needs to calm Jelly down so she doesn't hurt herself. After all that its up to Jelly if she still wants to be with him but at the time she needs protection from the Prince guys threatening her and child's life.
This story gets more drama filled with each chapter. I should have known my happy ending wouldn't be easily earned.
Author's Response:
Prince and Rachel deserve a scene together. Agree Rachel is crazy and Prince abusive love is way over the top. He should review his actions so he knows exactly why he cant find a girl to take his shit. When I read your review I read again the sex scene of Prince and Rachel and omg I never thought that it would come out that way. That was one crazy 'bdsm' scene. My apologies if I almost made you vomit in a bus. Not a pretty site.
With Rachel and Prince deaths - let me see if can write it as gruwsome as I could not pretty sure though about the death part. I'll take that into consideration...lol!...drama all the way...lol!...if Michael and Jelly wanted a happy ending I won't write it easy for them.
Thanks for the reads and reviews! Really...really...appreciate it so much.
[Report This]Date: May 29, 2013 08:38 am Title: Chapter 26
Oh, please let Jelly believe Michael, when he tells her that it's indeed not the way it looks! Of course, this witch Rachel will try to make it really difficult for Michael, will say that he's lying, how long Jelly thought she could keep that hottie with her figure and how she (Rachel) always wins! Please, oh God! Let Jelly listen! I'm dead scared she might overreact and do something stupid! They LOVE each other! Michael really didn't know! Let me guess: That was not part of the psycho Prince's plan, when he sexed and abused her! When Michael and Jelly aren't even together, how will this prick push thru his sick plan? I love, love, love the story! It's among my absolute favorites!
Author's Response:
He can try to convince her but it would really be hard. Witch - Rachel! (lmao can't agree more). I hope their Love survives all of this craziness. Hope Jelly listens as well yes Prince didn't plan to take Rachel like that but she was just a bit of a nut case when it comes to the real act. When I read how I wrote I was as well repulsed that was hard core bdsm right dare. Hope what Rachel did to Mike won't mess up with the two Prince's plans.
Thank you for the reads and reviews! Luv it.