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Madison Webster is a seventeen-year-old girl, whose mother had received a great job offer to support their family. The downfall -- Madison has to leave the only life she's ever known and all those who are close to her as her and her mother move to a new town.
As she moves in and adjusts to her new life, she meets a mysterious boy who holds an even more mysterious secret. Nobody in her new school seems fond of him and horrific rumours swirl about him and his history.
What happens when the two encounter? What is this secret that keeps them from being close together?
Categories: Thriller: 1982-1983, Adult, Adventure, Mystery, Romance, Sci Fi, Suspense, Trigger Warning!
Characters: Michael, Original Girl
General Warnings: None
Trigger Warnings: Death, Domestic Abuse, Emotional Abuse
Series: None
Chapters: 15 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 101222 Read Count: 5955
Date: Mar 08, 2015 Title: Chapter 12: Dearest Monster
Yas! You updated again :) Any hopes of 2000 Watts getting update as well (yeah, my ass is greedy)?
Random round of applause: Your spelling and grammar are ON.
West needs to catch a hint. He's going at her hard.I think he can catch a hint, but he's one of those fools who thinks that if he tries hard enough and keeps pushing, she'll suddenly like him. That rarely works on a meaningful level.
jkdsal;fdj Why can he not connect the hallucination of his mother with the simultaneous beating by the alpha? He's not actively delusional or psychotic, so I don't get why he can't make that connection and become more defiant. Especially since he is now fed. C'mon dude!
Your description of when he became animal and went hunting? Vivid, rich, and alive. Bravo
Author's Response:
It really makes me feel great that you enjoy 2000 Watts (and don't worry, I don't mind you being greedy) but as of right now, I just don't see myself updating it any time soon. I know key points and how that story ends, it's just getting there that's putting me off. I don't feel the motivation there, though I would like it finished.
Thank you for the applause! I try hard to achieve at least decent grammar while I'm writing, and I'm glad you think so, lool. :)
West is trying WAY too hard. If he's going for the subtle approach, I don't see how he hasn't noticed that it's coming off completely opposite, haha. There are some things about Michael's hallucinations that I will delve into later in the story...;)
Thank you for your lovely compliments. I can't begin to tell you what they mean to me.
Thanks for the review! :D <3
Date: Jun 08, 2015 Title: Chapter 15: Burn
:( I'd thought you'd posted a new chapter
Date: Mar 05, 2015 Title: Chapter 9: Discomfort
The suspense! You have me totally impatiently waiting for a solid scene of Michael and the lead girl (sorry, her name hasn't been in the last 4 or 5 chapters). I want Ari out of his arms. Also, what is up with her saying that they are in love?! I take it that she is the one in love, because it sounds like she's just convenient for him.... I think Michael needs to grow up and notice that he's pretty damn narcissistic himself. I mean, his needs/wants are his priority, he doesn't care enough about his brother to change his behavior, and just judges everyone else. I hope some of that happens soon!
Author's Response:
I enjoy suspense. I like dragging things out so that when it finally happens, it's almost blissful, a breath of relief. It does seem like Ari has stronger feelings for Michael than he seems to possess for her. Which would explain her jealousy and animosity toward his consumption with Madison. Thanks for the review! :D <3
Date: Mar 05, 2015 Title: Chapter 10: Not Without Consequence
My stomach is in knots at this torture :(
Author's Response:
It is upsetting and quite excessive. Michael's rebellious nature doesn't sit well with "him", which results in more pain. Thanks for the review! :D <3
Date: Mar 06, 2015 Title: Chapter 11: No Rebelling
I'm really liking the story, but I'm also confused by the last two chapters. It feels like they are so so violent, and I'm not sure why it was necessary at this point. The degree to which that man just hurt him in that dungeon of sorts....the rage by Arianna towards Madeline.... Madeline's alienation and excessive fronting.... I'm assuming that I'll find that out in the future? Right now, I feel like I'm being teased....there is just constant pain on both sides and no sense of promise...11 chapters in. I hope it comes soon :/
Author's Response:
Arianna is angry toward Madison because of how brazen she is toward her and her family. She also feels jealous of her. The man torturing Michael...well, he's remaining a mystery for a reason. He will be explained in further detail -- along with some other things -- later on in the story. I can only hope you stick around to find out. I hope you enjoy the update. Thanks for the review! :D <3
Date: May 05, 2015 Title: Chapter 14: Nothing But Confusion Pt.2
I was very happy to see this story pop up! It's quickly entered my shortlist of favs on this site.
You totally got my hopes up when Michael laid it all out for Arianna. It's the truth and by having sex with her again, he's basically going back on what he said. He knows that she loves him and as much as she says that she doesn't own him or whatever, going after her and having sex with her suggests that she still has a chance to 'win' him. In another setting, I think I'd like her character, but she's basically clingy, eager to please, and submissive. She's lacking in personality and she's basically a toy for him. In other words, I can't wait for more Maddy/Michael and less Arianna lol.
I love how you described his thoughts as he looked out at the students during lunch. You do an excellent job of weaving in the bits of information from the past with the present. It's not too much but it's not so much that the reader knows every detail of what happened; in doing so you create a palpable tension.
I hear what you are saying about the other story. I hope you go back to it eventually. Reread, get inspired, and wrap it up.
Author's Response:
I really do love seeing when you've reviewed. Your reviews are so honest, kind and inspiring, so I just wanted to genuinely thank you for that. <3
As for the Ari and Michael situation:
I never get tired of reading people's reactions toward her, lool. No fans yet, huh? But, no, I agree with you. It was a mistake on Michael's behalf. I see how he might have thought that it could have help the situation -- but only temporarily. In the long run, this is going to end up messy for him, especially if/when he decides to go after Madison. Oh boy.
Also, thank you so much for your compliments. They really, truly mean more to me than you know.
Thanks for the review! :D <3
P.S. As for 2000 Watts, I've been thinking about it, lately. I know how it ends, it's just getting to the ending that's the problem. I need to fill out the burger. I'm thinking about the possibility of continuing it, I just need to find the time to sit down and make myself inspired and motivated for it. Perhaps soon, but you've definitely helped. I'll go back and read it, for sure. :)
Date: Mar 05, 2015 Title: Chapter 8: Partnerships
Okay, I've (rudely) read all of this today, and wasn't going to comment b/c fantasy isn't my thing....only, I love it. I'm so curious about Michael's parents. I'm curious as to who will bend first...
The only character I'm really not feeling is Arianna. She's essentially a sex toy....
Still, I'm in and eager for your next update!
Author's Response:
I'm so so happy that you are enjoying it. Trust me, you aren't the only one/the first one who dislikes Ari, haha! It seems everyone is against her. I hope you continue to enjoy what I have to offer and I appreciate your feedback so much. Thanks for the reveiw! :D <3
Date: Jun 04, 2015 Title: Chapter 15: Burn
Lines through your text? I see none, so maybe it's your computer?
2000 watts + your kind words? 
I'm excited to hear that you are pondering back over that story!
el comentario:
I like the little side bit/filler with Eddie. Those few lines gave comedic relief, captured the essence of the morning grind, and set the scene. Even without the face washing, etc, that alone was enough (for my imagination) to fill in the morning rituals.
Flash forward to Michael and Arianna. Such a typical dude, only thinking logically after he's gotten it in. His reason for snapping at Clayton was so obvious; besides a tense morning, he's never had those kinds of feelings for Arianna. Clayton's basically reminding him of what he hasn't had.
I like how this story is layered with drama, but it isn't the typical 'X knocked up Y, and Y's sister, but X is still married to Z' deal. The most palpable point of drama in my opinion arise in Michael's thoughts. His ruminations over his responsibilities, others' well being, points of guilt, etc. Then there is the tension that permeates every encounter between Madison and Michael.
jaf; you left off right when they are finally spending time together outside of the classroom setting. Such.a.tease. Well, I can't get too whiny about it because you gave so much meat in this chapter (and I'm not referring to that which was devoured by the siblings). As always I can't wait until the next!
Date: Mar 14, 2015 Title: Chapter 13: Nothing But Confusion
I nearly went into shock seeing another update so soon! You and HoneyToTheBee made my Saturday morning.
Then I saw that it was almost 9,000 words.
El comentario:
Sometimes it really surprises me how the smallest details can have such a significant effect. I say that because, although I was already loving the detail you gave to setting up the classroom scene and placing the teacher, Madison, and Michael, I had to stop and come down here to write a comment as soon as I saw:
I studied him as he scribbled his pen across his paper, writing the date and his name neatly on the top of the page.
That took me back. It's a minute detail but also a repetitive act that all students/former students know. With that line alone, I KNEW they were k-12 students in a classroom.
Oh - Her original idea for a diagnosis had been BD- Bipolar Disorder, not BPD, Borderline PD. One's a mood disorder and the other is a personality disorder ;) Both are notorious for mood swings, but the duration and quality of the swings are distinctly different...though often confused by even MDs. You mentioned medications, so I'm assuming that you are still referring to BD, as the most evidence based txts for BPD don't rely on meds.
Going back to my raves: I love how you drew upon his incredible hearing at that moment in their interactions. It was like you were harnesing the powers of the 3rd person omniscient, but without leaving his perspective. Masterfully done.
I sense the beginning of the end for Michael and Arianna. Good riddance. At least West's drooling serves one purpose - distracting Michael from Arianna's clinginess. She's obviously noticed Michael's err lack of responsiveness lately.
Loved your update and can't wait for the next!
p.s. let me know if I can be of any help in providing inspiration/motivation for you to finish 2000 watts.
Author's Response:
Haha! Every time I see this review, the GIF kills me. I literally laugh out loud. So thanks for that! You're welcome, by the way, lol. Oh, and thank you for pointing out the BPD and Bipolar Disorder mixup -- I changed it immediately when I saw this review, which was a long time ago. I knew when I wrote it that something didn't feel right. I should have referred back to the chapter. P.S. I reply to reviews when I update, haha. So thanks again! Thank you so much for you kind words as well as critique. It is so very appreciated.
Also, about 2000 Watts. I feel as though I'm just in a different mindset than I was when I started writing that story. I was younger and went to a school where kids were gang-violence enthusiasts, so that lifestyle was very present in my life. I have the whole idea of how I want the story to end, I just simply can't find the motivation to write it, even though I would like to, especially because I know there are people out there who would like to see it completed. Maybe someday. But I will definitely let you know if/when that day comes! Thank you, love. :)
Thanks for the review! :D <3
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“Never ignore a person who loves you, cares for you, and misses you. Because one day, you might wake up from your sleep and realize that you lost the moon while counting the stars.”
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Her name; Harper. Born in Brazil, raised in France and living in London, Harper’s biggest dream always had been to be a supermodel. Not just a model, a flavor of the month, someone you will forget as soon as a trend ends. No, a supermodel. A face you will remember, a name you won’t be able to dismiss from your mind, a figure you will think of... An icon. Wishing is one thing, but making it real is better. A dream Harper reaches when she received that phone call. She said she would do anything to fulfill her dream, right?
His name; Michael. A superstar, the King of Pop, millions of album sold around the world, loved by countless but hate and misunderstood by many. After the allegations, after the rehab, after the civil suit settlement, after the out-of-court settlement what happen? The aftermath. Going on stage every night knowing that the whole world thinks you are a monster. Standing up on front of them with the physical pain that you have knowing that everybody is thinking that you are someone you aren’t. And all he dreamt of was to be loved. A dream Michael reaches when he received that offer. He said he would do anything to fulfill his dream, right?
Who knew a phone call could change her life? Who knew an offer would change his life?
In a world where everything seems to oppose them, a woman and a man will eventually end up together. Not for love, but for their image. To be seen as a man again, to have the fame she thinks she deserves. It is just a joke for them, a publicity stunt, a fake love story, but what happen when one of them get caught up in the game?
I DEDICATE THIS STORY TO IAM_MUSIC FOR HER SUPPORT SINCE THE BEGINNING OF KISS OF LIFE. Love you girl ♥
Categories: Lisa Marie Presley: 1994, HIStory: 1995-1999, Adult, Romance
Characters: Lisa Marie Presley, Michael, Original Girl
General Warnings: None
Trigger Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 44 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 108922 Read Count: 35876
Date: Oct 16, 2014 Title: Chapter 43: CHAPTER 43 | Start Anew
I can imagine the headlines: "Michael Jackson hits himself; does not file charges"
Awww what a great make up scene!
Oh, you know that I'm ready for the last chapter. As if you had to ask.
Author's Response:
Well I hope you're still ready, even one month after the 43rd chapter, because this is it! Thank you for your always so funny and kind review Redone! I love you! <33
Date: Aug 14, 2014 Title: Chapter 41: CHAPTER 41 | Clarification
FYI - Horning is either when animals with horns fight each other or (in slang) when a guy wakes up with an erection. I think you meant that she was "honking"
I'm so glad they worked out the Ethan drama. I hope that's the end of that....but I'm sketchy on that due to the pregnancy test....that better be Michael's.
I love seeing your name in the "most recent" list!
Author's Response:
Awww, thank you! I love this story I just got caught up with holidays, and now school and the other stories but the new chapter is here.
OMG, I knew it! If my ass has re-read the chapter before posting this typos wouldn't be here >.<. I'll correct it when I'm done with my other stories. Thank you Redone :D
Date: Apr 15, 2014 Title: Chapter 39: CHAPTER 39 | Aftermath
While Michael did overreact, he also had just realized that he'd essentially been paying a man to have sex with the girl he was paying to play his gf AND who he was lusting after. The fact that she didn't immediately ask for another bodyguard raises flags as there is just NO way that could turn out good.
THEN Harper's decision to call Ethan in the midst of the drama?! 
I see Harlow's advice as potentially backfiring.
Author's Response:
HEY REDONE :D
LOOOOl, it's true that if we see it like this...
You know Harper is kind of wrong for calling Ethan but I'm sure she has a good reason :) And Harlow's advice wasn't bad I think. Michael does need to calm down if they want to have a real conversation!
Thank you for the review and the rate, Love :D
Date: Apr 06, 2014 Title: Chapter 8: CHAPTER 8 | All by Myself
“Shh, shh. Play the piano”
Oh shoot, LMP moving in?!
Author's Response:
?uestlove LMAOOO! You know shit is about to hit the fan!!
Date: Apr 06, 2014 Title: Chapter 6: CHAPTER 6 | Unrequited
“Because I want you Harper!” Michael exclaims
Author's Response:
LMAO @ this gif! I'm definitely watching all the seasons of Sex and the city this summer ;)
I'm glad you're reading this too :D
Date: Sep 27, 2014 Title: Chapter 42: CHAPTER 42 | Payback
Sequel for Shades of Truth <---- YAAAAASSS!
Girl, Michael better be out of breath because he was rushing for the phone. And I don't get why they think causing the other pain is going to do their relationship any good. SMH. C'mon Michael and Harper, get your ish together!
Author's Response:
I'm glad you're excited about it. I thought about the plot but I don't know how I want it to end so I'll be online once I figured it out ;-)
LMAOOO! He better be yes! Now they need to make :(