Date: Sep 14, 2010 10:34 pm Title: Just An Avarage Dinner In The Jackson Household
I loved that one.... It was supercute and I enjoyed everbit of it!!! I know you will pass that test with flying colors, I'm in the 8th grade as well and I know tests can be stressful!! :)
Author's Response: Really!!!!??????? Thanks so so much!!!!! :)
[Report This]Date: Sep 14, 2010 10:15 pm Title: Just An Avarage Dinner In The Jackson Household
i remember doing those silly writing things we had to do in 8th grade. i thought i was deff going to fail, but look how far i've gotten! haha, but no matter how much you don't think so, those 'silly' things are gonna help you a lot more later.
woah, enough of my lame rambling. good chapter girly!!! loved it!!
Author's Response: thanks so much this test is really already stressing me out. I'm glad you like it. Oh and your rambling isn't lame it's helpful:)
Date: Sep 14, 2010 08:09 pm Title: Just An Avarage Dinner In The Jackson Household
dat was a cute funny chapter
[Report This]Date: Sep 08, 2010 12:03 am Title: Comfort
Awwwwwwwwwwwww its awesome with great with wonderful with cute with adorable.. made my heart warm to read this chapter.. she was being so mean to everyone specially him, but she was hurt I'm sooooooo happy that he was her comfort and she opened up to him.. its was so cute how they feel asleep together and she huged him tighter.. and their name calling and tickle game was so cute.. ohh and she let him call her by her name that makes me happy..
Author's Response: why thank you very much. I might not be updating very much for awhile for a have a very bad case of writer's block and i have no idea what i want to happen next. So if any of you have any ideas that would be very much appreciated. THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR YOUR REVIEWS!!!!!!!!!!!! Do you want to see more heart warming stories, sibling rivaling, more about the pregnancy, or funny let me know.
P.S If you want to see funny your goin have to bear with me for i have the slightest idea how to write funny stuff. Bye Bye for now!!!!!:)
[Report This]Date: Sep 05, 2010 01:58 am Title: And The Truth Comes Forth
Awww its cute and sad.. I think she needs to talk to someone..
Date: Sep 04, 2010 03:30 pm Title: And The Truth Comes Forth
awww yes it was gud
[Report This]Date: Sep 04, 2010 01:12 am Title: Jealous Much
Them kids leave me shocked too lol
Author's Response: lol they leave me shocked and i wrote it:)
Date: Sep 03, 2010 11:35 pm Title: Jealous Much
I liked this chapter....Plz keep going!!! :)
Date: Sep 02, 2010 07:23 pm Title: The Assistant
xenedra i am so sorry i accidentally deleted your review see i was trying to respond then i wanted to change what i wrote to try and ask you what chapters you wanted me to redo. Plz don't think that i deleted your review on purpose. I am so very sorry. Plz forgive me. :)
[Report This]Date: Aug 31, 2010 08:23 am Title: The Assistant
I'm gonna give you some constructive criticism. I really like your story. I do. It's got a great plot idea, and the writing is very good actually. But the first few chapters were hard to read, being a mother myself...I can see the factual errors. If you really want this to be a good story, which it can be...I suggest you work on making it a little more realistic (twins, being born by c-section after 2mo of pregnancy, the gushing blood for no apparent reason- you cant just look at someone and determine that they are going to bleed to death- and the release two weeks after they are born when survivability would have been zero?), and also perhaps a little less jumpy. What I mean by that is put adequate time intervals between fantastic events. It all happened really fast and it takes away from what is good about the story- which is the plot and the writing. But please don't get me wrong and please do not take offense. I do like it. :) It wouldn't take too much to edit this and make it come off better in the beginning. And you said you wanted to become a better writer, and welcomed constructive critique right? So I'm tryin' to help. :) Take care.
Author's Response: Your right i did welcome constructive critique and that you so much for it. I actually like it when people tell me things like this. I will probably edit the beginning, but i can't during the weekdays with school and all. Please keep reviewing and tell me what you like and don't like. I welcome positive and negative reviews, because to me the negative helps me just as much as the positive. I'm going to shut up now. I now I must be babbling. You take care to. Have a blessed day!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
[Report This]Date: Aug 31, 2010 12:46 am Title: All Hell Breaks Lose
I'm soo happy that they got full custody of the kids.. but its so sad that her sister died.
Date: Aug 31, 2010 12:27 am Title: Dealing
great update beautiful
Date: Aug 24, 2010 01:20 am Title: The Truth Is Out There And It Hurts
great update umm i think if dey wnt to keep justin away from the twins mari needs to charge him wit rape so he wont be able to c dem i mean he did threat to hurt cj wat kind of dad is dat.
[Report This]Date: Aug 24, 2010 01:02 am Title: The Truth Is Out There And It Hurts
Idk how you put pics in a story..
But but its good that she told him.. ugh now that scum want to see his kids.. his not their father Michael is their father!!