Date: Apr 20, 2019 04:08 pm Title: Chapter 6 & Epilogue
Amazing short story! I loved it, wow, this deserves way more reviews! Good job, and very sweet concept. The M side of me would have loved to see them get it on at the end though XD! But still marvellous and extremely sexy in a classy way I think x
Author's Response: Haha, I actually wanted to go there, honestly. But I hadn't written much of those kind of scenes before so I played it safe. (And they aren't married, so XD) Every one of your reviews was insightful and brought me great joy. I'm elated that you enjoyed what you read! :D
Date: Apr 20, 2019 03:45 pm Title: Chapter 5
This chapter was sweet I'm glad mike finally stood up to Dick. I can really imagine mike throwing down them moves at homecoming too lmao! The principle that singled them out sucks, it's sad but I believe little things like this really would happen back in the day, even today in some regions of the world. Amazing writing too of course!
Author's Response: Thank you! :3
Date: Apr 20, 2019 08:05 am Title: Chapter 2
Ooh kinda steamy, your story moves at the perfect pace, you get a lot into these small chapter I am loving it. A lot is left unsaid but it adds so much to the magic of this story! Fantastic work again :)
Author's Response: Hi, Ms. Apricot! Thank you for reading. Yes, I left context clues again so that readers could figure out what happened ;)
Date: Apr 19, 2019 11:30 am Title: Prologue & Chapter 1
Okay wow. I had to open this story up as soon as I saw it was written by you & you said I could write but my writing is NOTHING on yours! Girl this had me hooked from the first too lines! It is so fitting for the time and just flows effortlessly. I love your descriptions and the way your characters talk. This story is so vivid straight from the get go and if it were a film I'd probably watch this beginning again and again. I gives me strong vibes of Back to the Future and Marty Mcfly's parents! It happens to be one of my favourite movies of ALL TIME!
The peer pressure you illustrated was tense and so real without you ever having to mention the words peer pressure. I felt so sorry for Michael getting that drink dumped on him and he STILL went and gave the girl back her sweater, your Michael seems like he's got grit as he didn't cry about it. He is really sweet and I loved his brief display of impatience when the little girl was counting the screws loool! LOVE IT!
I wander what will happen to him living in such a hateful and racist environment, I could relate to his treatment on many levels. Can't wait to read the rest x
Author's Response: LOL that's really surprising because your writing had me floored when I first read "Smoke". I was like damnnnn XD! I appreciate your words. I do remember the movie "Back to the Future", but it's been almost 10 years since I watched it, lol. So, I have to watch it again to understand that reference. It was a classic. I'm glad you noticed that about the peer pressure, because that was the goal: I wanted the reader to figure it out. I also wanted people to see that Michael was surprised by the incident, but he wasn't shocked. Thank you for taking the time to review Chapter 1. And same here with "Smoke": can't wait to finish it!
Date: Apr 15, 2019 11:30 pm Title: Prologue & Chapter 1
My goodness, this is so good. I love your writing style. I said "oh, come on" out loud when she tossed the malt in his face. Poor baby. I know I have more to go, but just letting you know I'm enjoying so far :)
Author's Response: Lol! Thank you for your comment! It makes me smile that you have enjoyed it so far.