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Reviewer: Lorry Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Feb 21, 2017 12:36 am Title: Chapter 10: The Beginning Of The Night

Disgusting pedophile..made my skin crawl...I hope he gets find out and bitten half dead by someone! Also don't feel too bad about updating you have things to do like we do in life. 

Reviewer: Gigi1971 Signed [Report This]
Date: Feb 20, 2017 01:02 pm Title: Chapter 9: "Yeah...Jeremy..."

Too short of a chapter. Please get her out of this nightmare before he takes her virginity and makes things worse! She is still a virgin, right? She must tell Michael. He will be her salvation

Reviewer: Llamalouise88 Signed [Report This]
Date: Jan 05, 2017 08:22 am Title: Chapter 9: "Yeah...Jeremy..."

Michael better get his super hero cape ready! Hurry! :'(

Reviewer: Gigi1971 Signed [Report This]
Date: Jan 04, 2017 02:35 pm Title: Chapter 9: "Yeah...Jeremy..."

Why does she have to go through this

Reviewer: Lorry Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Jan 04, 2017 07:36 am Title: Chapter 9: "Yeah...Jeremy..."

Ew Jeremy is sick and the definition of every male pedophile in this day and age! The psycho needs to be locked up yet or Michael finds out somehow what she's going though.

Reviewer: Gigi1971 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Dec 19, 2016 08:42 am Title: Chapter 8: I Don't Want To Hear It!

Yes, you should definitely do that

Reviewer: Gigi1971 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Oct 17, 2016 10:59 pm Title: Chapter 7: The Man With The Creepy Smile

Thanks for continuing with the story. But with this chapter you seem to be hinting, that creepy Jeremy is going to rape little Ariana. I think you shouldn't go for that dirt. Let her be exclusive for Michael. No e can heal from such a horrible experience at such a young age. She'd be ruined. Please consider that for your story

Author's Response:

Unfortunately, there will be something along those lines, however they will not be full out and explicit and as far as actual 'rape'. The reason I will be adding some type of sexual abuse is because I wanted to write something with full emotion in. I have already written up to chapter 13 and there has been two incidents. They will not be too bad, even though any type of sexual abuse is bad of course. I will have some relationship with Michael occuring in the story - I will not stray from that but there will be a few chapters where Michael has a mild appearance, but that will be purely because I will be building story. I apologise if what I end up giving you isn't up to standard. I have considered what she would be feeling. I don't want a normal girl with no feels or no character and something to tell as I have done before - I just thought it would be interesting. But, I will be adding that in since it's important to the title, and the story.

 

- Carys

Reviewer: Lorry Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Oct 16, 2016 03:18 pm Title: Chapter 7: The Man With The Creepy Smile

poor girl i wouldn't want to live with such a man either that is foul..i just hope she's able to defend herself somehow and stick with her feels to stay the hell away from a pedo like him!. don't say sorry at all it happens to the best of us when it comes to try writin 1k chapter. don't be so hard on yourself!

 

Reviewer: toolowtogetunder Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Oct 16, 2016 09:49 am Title: Chapter 3: What did he say?

Aww, I think she has a crush on Michael! That's soo adorable

Reviewer: toolowtogetunder Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Oct 15, 2016 01:53 pm Title: Chapter 1: The Jackson Concert

Aww this was so cute! Such a great start

Reviewer: waterlily91 Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 14, 2016 05:02 pm Title: Chapter 7: The Man With The Creepy Smile

OK that was creepy! Please don't let Ariana get hurt by this creep!

Reviewer: Gigi1971 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 09, 2016 11:12 pm Title: Chapter 6: Gone Forever

Great story so far. Please update again fast. This is great 😃

Author's Response:

Aw thank you! And I'll try <3 Thank you for the review; it means a lot to me xoxo

Reviewer: Lorry Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 09, 2016 03:24 pm Title: Chapter 6: Gone Forever

Well damn poor soul I can relate to her divorce with her parents minus the mum cheating..I just hope this man doesn't try anything with her..that is what worries me. Also mj needs to be happy with himself poor soul. A nice chapter as always hun <3



Author's Response:

Aw thank you ! <3 xoxo Much more to come soon :D

Reviewer: marje143 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 07, 2016 06:06 pm Title: Chapter 5: Make Up Time!

Omg Joseph is ass he make Michael feel so bad about himself that boy was handsome anyway the girls are crazy lol thank you for Michael p.o.v

Reviewer: Lorry Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 07, 2016 04:12 pm Title: Chapter 5: Make Up Time!

aw poor michael i can just picture what he was going though! what he was going though was just part of puberty now if Joseph could only see that though his thick skull he was a teenager himself once geez! he needs to pipe down and let the boy grow he will grow into his body over time! my goodness no wonder mj turned to plastic surgery and what not to feel he wasn't beautiful in his own skin grr. my rant is over for that part of the chapter lol. 

aw those girls reminds me when young girls like getting into their sister or mother's make up lol. I hope it's nothing to bad for her at home. Great chapter hun <3 



Author's Response:

Haha thank you for the review. And thank you for the compliment on the chapter. It means a lot. And I agree 100% with what you said about Joseph. Although, I do think some of us Moonwalkers don't give him enough credit to how much work he actually put into making the boys as big as they got to be. Even though he was a nasty selfish person, Joseph Jackson was one hell of a genius - maybe that's where Michael got his ways of being a genius from - he got his charming personality from his mother. Hehe okay I'm done. Thank you for reviewing, hun <3 xoxo

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