Date: Jun 18, 2014 06:07 pm Title: Beauty & The Beast.
Okay, wait, so what was the whole thing with Michael and Jane in the first chapter of this story?
Then in this chapter how did her and Big Daddy get hooked up? And, I thought that Big Daddy and Reada had a, "fling"?
How come Big Daddy didn't get as long as Michael when they both were to blame? Don't you think that Big daddy had his fair shair of crimes?
Oooooooooh, and Michael better be soon doing a heeeeeeeeell of a loooooooooooot of singing and rocking to Monique!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I'm actually getting really jellous of Monique now!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response:
Michael and Jane were dating in the furst chaoter and we're still dating until he went to jail. :)
Jane and Big Daddy aren't involved in any way. She was just nervous because Michael was getting outta jail and followed Big Daddy to the club. Him and Rita are still having a fling/abusive relationship.
Michael was involved and still is involved in a crime ring. Big Daddy is just some two-bit, perverted hustler that hangs around the club. He confirmed Michael's crimes and Michael got a jail sentence whereas Big Daddy got to walk lmao. :( Big Daddy is a coward.
Oh he will!!! I am making their relationship blossom so don't you worry lol!
Lol I kinda am too!! :DDD
Thanks for reviewing! xo
[Report This]Date: Jun 18, 2014 01:50 am Title: Caught.
WHAAAT?? No, but he just got back and now he's going to be locked up? Exactly how long will he be away this time?
I'm so leery of Big Daddy and with Michael not around to protect Monique, I sincerely hope he doesn't try anything. I mean, he has Rita wrapped around his finger even after he slammed her against the wall like a rag doll. Like seriously, it doesn't take a scientist to know that he is no good.
And I totally lmao at her experiencing her first signs of arousal towards Mike! Poor girl... I can't wait til she's of age. It just sucks how much she loves this guy but clearly because of the age gap... she's just a lil girl to him. Hmph.
Can't wait for the next update!
Author's Response:
Okay, he will be away for at least eight years ;) I'm gonna jump that gap in the next chapter. The man can't stay outta trouble...
Big Daddy is a fucking creep. I hate this character...even though I made him. LOL.
I didn't know how I was suppose to handle that. I mean, because usually around that age young girls 'discover' themselves as being female so with her being around Michael and already being attracted to him at such a young age, set a platform for that. But don't worry, it gets better lol! ;)
Thanks for reviewing!! I'll have that next update for ya! xo
Date: Jun 17, 2014 06:34 pm Title: Caught.
What? How could Michael be sooooooooo kind and yet do things against the law?
What made him go away for two years?
I loooooved how he rocked her, now if he could do more rocking and looooooots of singing to her that would be sooooooo nice!!!!!
Author's Response:
LOL. Some people cna be that way. I think some people separate their personality from what they do to the public. :) But he's a nice guy, just got caught up in some bull.
He went away for two years in Chapter 3 because he had to go peddle and traffic drugs , run from the law etc. which is the same thing he got arrested and locked up for in the last chapter. :) Poor thang. Poor thang....Lol.
Awww. Yeah, Michael is such a sweetheat. I promise there will be more of that! :DD
Thanks for reviewing! xoxo
Date: Jun 17, 2014 05:37 pm Title: Until We Meet Again...
So was the prologue a glimps of what the ending of the story will be like?
I don't really like this Red character but maybe he'll warm up to Monique in time?
Oh, and will Michael do loooooooooots of singing to Monique in this story?
What gave you this idea for this story?
Date: Jun 17, 2014 05:33 pm Title: Until We Meet Again...
So, was the prologue a glimps of what the ending of the story will be like?
I don't really like this Red character, but maybe he'll warm up to Monique in time?
Oh, and are you gonna have Michael do looooooots of singing to her?
What gave you this idea for this story?
Author's Response:
Yes :)
The prologue is basically a glimpse into the ending of the story and what's gonna happen :) I don't think anybody likes Red's character but her will get better, I promise. I will make him mature more since he's gonna be more of an adult in the future, when Monique is older.
I do have sequence for the story where Michael will be singing to her, but it's not until he will be pursuing her ;) I feel like he's one of those guys plus Monique doesn't know he can sing yet :3 But yes! He will sing to her lol.
The idea for this story basically came from the Smooth Criminal short film (the setting, the time period and Michael's persona in the video) and combined it with my idea of this OC that I had who didn't have the ability to speak which was inspired by Ariel from the Little Mermaid, in which she wanted to let the guy know how she felt but couldn't because she couldn't talk. So I took both of those ideas and made them into one :)
I added the realistic views like racism and things of that nature to give the story more of a realistic feel and that's how Speak came to be!! :D
Date: Jun 17, 2014 04:16 pm Title: A Girl & A Young Man.
This story is....well..gosh, just...there's really no words to say how good this story is.
I really thought that Moneqc was much younger then ten. I thought she was at least five, or six.
It's a real shame that nothing would be done about the rights of blacks, or any other race until the fifties. To think that people were forbidden to be even mixed in schools, jobs, and places to eat, just because there skin was not the same color? That's just wrong!!!!!!
Even still to this day, some people are still racest.
Author's Response:
Wow!
Thank you so much! I am really, really flattered that you think that it's good. I can't put into words how much you've touched my heart with your review. I take my writing very, VERY seriously and I really love when people enjoy it or feel any kind of strong emotion by it so thank you so much.
It is truly sad how people of different races couldn't have any equal oppurtunities or rights as human beings in society during that time :(
It really is. And it's importnt for us not to forget it either...how things used to be :( It was insane. It baffles me to think that some people are still racist or show any prejudice of ANY form. It's a horrible, barbaric thing that people need to fix about themselves.
It doesn't matter what color skin you have or your religion or your sexual preference, it doesn't matter. We are the human race. This is our earth...we all have to get along to make this world brighter <3
:D Thank you for reviewing and your support. Thank you again for the lovely review. <33
[Report This]Date: Jun 17, 2014 04:05 pm Title: Caught.
This was soo sad to read but really good to you are a very good writer I really like this story and can't wait to see where you take this you have my support. Also will you be updating Moonbeam as well?
Author's Response:
I am actually writing the next chapter for Moonbeam Levels :)
I'm almost done, don't worry! :DD I'll have it up as soon as possible for ya!~ ;)
Date: Jun 17, 2014 03:41 pm Title: Prologue.
What time is this story going to be set in? Is it in the 19 centery?
Author's Response:
Lol it's set in the 1935 and ends in 1946. So it's set int the 20th century. :)
Date: May 19, 2014 05:19 pm Title: Until We Meet Again...
Awww Monique, I feel so sorry for her :(
I hope Rita be a good person to her while Michael's away "peddling". Lmao
I wanted to cry while reading their departure, you really did good on that part.
Can't wait to see how it's gonna be when he sees her again.
Please continue :)
Author's Response:
:( it's sad to break them apart but it'll be worth it! :D
But shit's about to get real with Michael on the next chapter!
Awww! I like to hear things like that. It tells me I did a good job with descriptions which is something I obsess over. Lol
Thanks for reviewing! I'm glad you liked it! xo
[Report This]Date: May 19, 2014 08:00 am Title: Until We Meet Again...
Awww that was so sweet I love this can't wait for more please continue.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much, hun! b25; I'm so happy you liked it!
[Report This]Date: May 18, 2014 11:50 pm Title: Until We Meet Again...
This is really good, continue please <3
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it! :D I'll update as soon as possible!
[Report This]Date: May 18, 2014 09:00 pm Title: Until We Meet Again...
The characters fit the story and I love the plot. She can't speak so it makes thing more interesting. Hope you update soon!
Author's Response:
I'm glad you like it!!! :DD
It does make it more interesting since she can't speak. It makes it a bit more difficult to give her dialogue.I have been studying up on her disability to get more of a feel on what to do with her. :)
Thanks for reviewing! I'll update as soon as possible!
[Report This]Date: May 18, 2014 08:52 pm Title: Until We Meet Again...
Well now, Red has no filter whatsoever! Jeez
And I wonder what type of "peddling" Michael has to do...
I absolutely love the the interaction between these two... Michael is so cute with his caring self. Sighh I can't wait til he comes back.
Author's Response:
Yeah, Red is a bit of an idiot lol.
Yeah, their little relationship is very sweet but I want it to change as the story goes on. xo
Lol. He is in some deep shit...but you'll see in the next chapter!
Thanks for reviewing! :*
[Report This]Date: May 18, 2014 06:11 pm Title: Until We Meet Again...
Awwwww that was a very bittersweet chapter! Im glad Rita is going to take care of her. She seems like a good woman!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reviewing! :D I'm glad you enjoyed it :)
Date: May 17, 2014 11:16 am Title: A Girl & A Young Man.
Girl you did great, ugh you make mgr want to start back writing studies...
Anywho this is my favorite story so far, I really love this even though I only
read 2 chapters, lol but so what I know this is going to be great.
- - Michael is such a sweetheart for taking the little girl in, I feel sorry for her,
fun what happened to her parents and all, and her disability, but it seems as
if Michael will be her "knight in shining armor". And Jane, ugh that whore, calling
that child a heathen, need her ass beat, at least
Michael did go to the child and check on her.
Please continue :)
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing!!! :DD
I am pretty excited about continuing to write this story!~ It's gonna get better as I keep going. Thank you so much for the compliments! xoxo
Lol Jane is a bitch but I have plans for her *evil laugh*
Thanks for reading! I appreciate it!