Date: Nov 11, 2013 04:45 pm Title: Chapter 22: Troublemakers
Slash is pretty sexy ;) he doesn't hold a candle to Mike though, obviously lol. Great chapter!!
Author's Response:
Of course he doesn't hold a candle to Mike, but he would be nice to have as a side peice. As long as Michael doesn't find out I'm cheating........
Date: Nov 07, 2013 02:42 pm Title: Chapter 20: Surprise!
Oh my god that is so embarrassing...but honestly, Michael brought this on himself. He should've called his mom to tell her he was alright.
Author's Response:
You don't mess with your mother she WILL show up at your door if she doesn't hear from you. At least mine would. I totally agree, Michael is to blame.
[Report This]Date: Nov 07, 2013 08:03 am Title: Chapter 13: Till Death Do Us Part
AW SHIIIIIT.
Eventful chapter to say the least... Michael's dopey ass is just lucky Olivia was there or else he would have been in shit I'm telling yah.
Olivia is so brave and caring, and I love how Michael didnt think twice to save her. Then when Olivia shot that man in the crotch, this girl don't play XD
This chapter had me on edge like I havent been for a while whilst reading fanfic, and for that I commend you. XD You're a tremendous writer and I'm not gonna lie I feel like giving up writing >_> haha I need some pointers from you. XD
Hope to catch up with more tonight if I'm free. :D
Author's Response:
I'm glad you like Olivia I wasn't sure how the readers would respond to her at first. Overall the feedback has been pretty positive but I was worried at first that people would think she is a bitch.
Thank you for the compliments! You are too sweet. But whatever you do, DONT GIVE UP. I love your stories and I'll be sad if you stop them.
The best advice I can give is plan out the plot ahead of time. I don't plan everything but I do know what major events I want to happen. Otherwise I find it difficult to maintain different storylines and tie them together. And you're right, it's better when there is a plot besides "Michael and original girl fall in love."
[Report This]Date: Nov 07, 2013 07:50 am Title: Chapter 11: A River In Egypt
Simon Cowell... Girl did you just?
Honestly I can't see anyone being Dr. Dickhead but him tbh haha... Maybe Alan Sugar but he's more of a "piss me off and you're fucking done" guy.
XD
Author's Response:
Simon is a pretty obvious choice. Tbh I kind of copped out with that one. Glad that I was able to make you laugh!
Date: Nov 07, 2013 01:20 am Title: Chapter 16: Divinity In Motion
Dude. Dude. DUDE. I....am fucking SPEECHLESS. Please teach me your ways of sex-writing okay? Like....for real, I felt that. I FUCKING FELT THAT SHIT. You were right, now I really do need a cold shower lmao
Author's Response:
Awww your compliments make me blush :) I'm glad you liked it. I'd never written a sex scene before this one so I spent a lot of time on it. Tried my hardest not to make it cheesy sounding. This makes me sound like a ho but I just recalled the best sex I could remember having and described it......
Date: Nov 07, 2013 12:48 am Title: Chapter 14: Aftershock
HAHAHAHA!! Jermaine omfg "baby dont tempt me" LOL I am so done xD
Author's Response:
Jermaine is delusional and he's only going to get worse........he isn't used to the challenge presented by olivia. It's too bad that he fails to realize that challenge means 'snowball's chance in hell."
Date: Nov 06, 2013 07:29 pm Title: Chapter 11: A River In Egypt
Simon Cowell HAHAHAHA!! I'm done. Well that pretty much ruined my image of Dr. Dickhead xD thats for sure.
Author's Response:
I took the easy way out. The first person who popped into my head when I thought 'asshole." I'm glad that my uncreativity made you laugh!
Thanks for the review and rate.
Date: Nov 06, 2013 05:12 pm Title: Chapter 7: Bathroom Buddies
BASQUIAT? I CANT BELIEVE THIS. Jean-Michel Basquiat is my FAVORITE artist. It's like you read my mind! I can't believe he's in this story....okay girl. That's it. You have officially won me over lol. This is definitely one of the best stories ever!! You're a great writer.
Author's Response:
I'm so glad you're reading my story MJJaddict.
As for Basquiat, he's one of my favorites too which is why I gave him the shout out. Plus I live in NYC so I've gotta give love to the locals.
Like a Boss:
[Report This]Date: Nov 05, 2013 12:51 pm Title: Chapter 8: Back to Reality
"Someone is either taking a painful dump or having sex in there. Hopefully not both at once. God Olivia get your mind out of the gutter."
"Sweetheart I hate to break it to you but I'm sure that pussy is already destroyed. Must be like throwing a hot dog down a hallway," thought Olivia. "I need to get out of here NOW."
Bahahaha I just............ I'M DONE.
I LOVE OLIVIA. :')
Just started reading and I'm already so into this girl, why on earth did you not recommend me this masterpiece!? Tsk tsk
XD
This is so very excellently written, and I love how theres more than just the growing feelings between Michael and Olivia going on. :3
The chemisty between the two tho; SHIPPING THEM, I AM!
I know whats gonna keep me up tonight
, <33
Author's Response:
I LOVE NEW READERS AND I LOVE YOUR STORIES! Especially "I don't know what to tell you" and "I want you back." I'm still mad at you for deleting "I want you back" that was one of my all-time favorites and one of the first stories I read on here.
And of course I'm not going to recommend my OWN story to you (or anyone else for that matter), that's just tacky. So no judging!
Seriously though I'm glad you like it :) I"m so happy you're reading this!
I love that gif of Michael falling to the ground. I can never take my eyes off his crotch when I see it. It's just so.....prominent.
Thanks for the review and I look forward to hearing more from you in the future!
[Report This]Date: Oct 31, 2013 12:45 pm Title: Chapter 31: Payback
Well that didn't turn out like I thought it would at all. Olivia did kick Diana's ass as expected but I didn't think she would just up and leave Michael or her family like that. On top of that she left with Jermaine of all people and then kisses him, eww. That was just too much! In the pervious chapter Olivia had common sense to figure out that Jermaine purposely brought Diana along to drive a wedge between her and Michael. Now she's acting like she done lost her damn mind and kissing Jermaine, smh. What the actual fuck is going on? I have to be honest and say Olivia is acting like a dumb bitch rigth now and when she comes back to her senses she'll regret doing what she's done. Michael didn't ask Diana to give him head and he didn't set out to hurt Olivia but she has set out to hurt him over a misunderstanding.
Author's Response:
Olivia will regret it BIG TIME. Have you ever been so angry that you were blinded by rage and not fully in control of your actions? This is Olivia in this chapter. Once she calms down she's going to feel like a dumbass because you're right, she is acting like one.
Now will Michael understand her or will she drive him away? All I'm going to say is that the consequences of her actions will not be what you expect.
I hope that you will continue to enjoy the story an thanks for your loyal readership!
Date: Oct 30, 2013 09:28 pm Title: Chapter 10: I Want To Eat Your Face
if it were me and an asshole did my sister like that, the question of "capable of murder" wouldn't exist it would be "where did that fucker go?"
i believe olivia is capable, and is completely justified
Author's Response:
I agree if it were my sister I would consider murder as well.
As to Olivia's role in the whole thing, you'll just have to wait and see........
Date: Oct 30, 2013 09:00 pm Title: Chapter 6: Madonna-Whore Complex
andy...is that liam hemsworth? he's handsome either way
Author's Response:
Not sure. I google image searched "handsome man in tuxedo" and that's how I found it lmao.
Date: Oct 30, 2013 12:38 am Title: Chapter 31: Payback
Two wrongs never make a right and Olivia should learn that lashing out in the heat of anger and going along with whatever reveng plan she cooked up on the spot will only get her deeper in trouble... But possibly she only thrives on drama, heartbreak and nervous breakdown - I met these kind of people who love to be unhappy, as twisted as it sounds...
Author's Response:
You're exactly right and Olivia WILL learn this lesson the hard way. And not in the way you would expect......but she'll regret it.
She definitely isn't one who thrives on heartbreak but she's so angry that she isn't thinking properly. Or at all to be honest. She'll come around.
I've known people who love being unhappy too....drama is their lifeblood. I think it's because they get more attention on them this way.
Thanks again for reading and reviewing!
[Report This]Date: Oct 29, 2013 10:16 pm Title: Chapter 31: Payback
When I read your response to my previous review, I knew I wasn't ready for this chapter lol. But I have to admit I laughed to hard when Olivia grabbed Diana by the hair and dragged her out LMAO! It made me laugh harder when Michael talked about her titties! But Olivia punching Diana >>>>
When she got in Jermaine's car, I was a little bit confused. If she was trying to kill Michael, she sure succeeded.
Come on, girl! JERMAINE?!
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I don't know what you're trying to do Camille but I don't think Olicia got him killed. Nope. I might be wrong but no. She is not that stupid
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I love you Olivia. I really do. You're a bas bitch but using Jermaine to make Michael jealous. Good fucking bye
I know she is upset but does she really think Michael asked Diana to come to his room and suck his dick? Ok, what happened is bad. But kissing Jermaine. This is a hot ass mess. Michael will be heartbroken, Jermaine's thirst will be multiplied by 400 and Olivia will forever have the taste of his grease in her mouth.
A mess
Author's Response:
HI ANNIE!
Olivia is so angry and heartbroken that she isn't thinking clearly. She's just trying to hurt Michael as revenge for hurting her. Once she realizes that he was fooled she'll regret her actions but her thoughtlessness will have far-reaching consequences. That's all I'm gonna say.
As for the murder subplot, you're just gonna have to wait and see. It's all part of the master plan which I've had from the beginning. Plenty of surprises are in store.
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!
Date: Oct 29, 2013 06:02 pm Title: Chapter 31: Payback
1. That was UNNECESSARY 2 You leadin Jermaine NASTY ASS on 3. You're makin Michael angry. Mm, Olivia juss turned STUPID ... with all them degrees she got, MM MM MM wat a WASTE.... mm mm mm! NOTHING good is gonna come from this.
Author's Response:
Olivia isn't thinking straight at all. She is letting rage guide her actions. Trust me, once her heads clears she will regret what she's done.