[Report This]Date: Mar 07, 2012 10:00 am Title: Ready...on my own....
Alright, so I think that you've got a great idea here, it seems like your really expressing it well too BUT
the grammer and stuff is a bit off. Ex - Somewhere here you wrote 'I'm like HE'S second daughter'. Should be HIS.
You use a lot of commas and ... and I think you use it to signifie pauses in someones speech. That's something you should try and limit yourself to doing because after awhile, it starts to get confusing and hard to read. Try to stick to the puncuation rules.
I'm definitely going to keep reading because I think this is a good plot! :)
Date: Feb 07, 2012 02:19 pm Title: ....Because of.......YOU!
Happy birthday Alina!!!<3<3<3<3<3
ALL the L.O.V.E in the world!!! :X:X:X:X
Date: Jan 29, 2012 11:43 pm Title: ....Because of.......YOU!
P.S: I was worried about me, because I became a fan after Michael...passed; that's why I'll never think that I am a true fan..
P.S 2: You know I love this picture of you! (giggling) :))
Date: Jan 29, 2012 11:41 pm Title: ....Because of.......YOU!
I....I don't know what to say...for some moments I couldn't think,my brain was blank, I just stared at my ceiling seeing only the darkness of the room....
What you've written it's just....so touching, so full of expression, so true...I don't have enough words to describe it...it touched me straight in the heart...
Michael would have adore it, I just know it. I'm sure of it. I know he's smiling down at you right now.
What a great soul and heart you have.
I just feel the urge to hug you >:D<
Love you so much!!! Love you most!!
[Report This]Date: Jan 29, 2012 12:31 pm Title: ....Because of.......YOU!
You updated! Yay!!! :)
Your such a talented writer and...AWW!! I love the pic!!! Such a beautiful girl :)
Amazing chapter!!! Your as amazing a writer as you are a reader.
Update again soon!
Much <3
Leah
[Report This]Date: Jan 04, 2012 03:48 am Title: If you PISS me off ONE more time,I'll go THRILLER on your .....butt ! "
Yeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeessssss!!! Finally Michael gave that evil Amelia a piece of his mind! He left her speechless! He put her in her place exactly as she deserves! LOVE it! I like to see Michael with attitude, lol :))
Pictures, I looooove the pictures so much!!!!! And yes, the last picture is more than perfect!!<3<333
GREAT chapter (like always)!:X:X:X
Excited for the new chapters to come!!!!!!!!:x:x:x
All the L.O.V.E in the world!!!!!!<3<3
Uh, my first day of the year...was...bad. I felt, in one word, horrible, if I can say. But it passed...
L.O.V.E <3<3
[Report This]Date: Jan 02, 2012 07:14 am Title: WHO'S BAD?
HAPPY NEW YEAR!!:X
God, I simply LOVE the ,,forever" word contest :))) They are SO funny! And soooooooooo cute together :X:X:X I LOVE them!<3
Uh,my new year begun...fine I guess. Lots, LOTS of food. I watched the show and the fireworks in town. And I went to sleep at 4 in the morning because I watched the WMA's iconic moments on the Tv. It finished with Michael's moment in 2006 where he performed We are the world, and at the final it showed the message: ,,In the memory of Michael Jackson, The King of Pop 1958-2009", so I cried a little because it was so sad, and yeah...
But how YOUR new year begun, because you seem thrilled!
I have to read your new update tonight; I'm very excited! <3
L.O.V.E L.O.V.E L.O.V.E <3<3<3
Date: Jan 01, 2012 05:42 pm Title: If you PISS me off ONE more time,I'll go THRILLER on your .....butt ! "
No!!!!!!! I love it
Date: Jan 01, 2012 11:37 am Title: If you PISS me off ONE more time,I'll go THRILLER on your .....butt ! "
Yeeees!!!! Michael, you're great!!
I love this chapter...I love the way he acted with Amelia...I hope she's really out now...
And Ariel and Michael are just too cute...
But a question : Will Ariel discover that Michael was her neighbour at the beginning of the story?
Date: Jan 01, 2012 11:08 am Title: ,,Come together"
Finally !!!!!!!! They kiss :)
Date: Jan 01, 2012 10:59 am Title: What will I do if I just can't stop LOVING YOU......?!
Omg they have to go together
Date: Jan 01, 2012 10:51 am Title: ,,I just wanna touch and kiss And I wish that I could be with you tonight You give me butterflies inside"
Why can't they at least have a Moment alone
Author's Response:
:)) Well......um...you know I love suspence!
MUCH L-O-V-E
Date: Jan 01, 2012 10:34 am Title: He ,,WANNA BE STARTIN' SOMETHIN' " ?
Awwww I love it
Author's Response:
yOU DID?
THANK YOU! SO MUUUCH!
LOVE YOU DEARLY!
MUCH L-O-V-E!
Date: Jan 01, 2012 05:24 am Title: WHO'S BAD?
It was a sweet and funny chapter...I have a little idea of what they could do being the two of them...And on how Michael could be bad lol...Really bad but in a good way, of course lol.
Ok I say anything more lol...
Happy New Year sweety!!! I wish you all the best and have fun on your vacations!!!
LOVE!!!
Author's Response:
hI!
:))
I tried my best with the chapters,so I hope dearly you liked it!
You have a little ,,thing" don't you>
SOOOOORRRRYYYYY....but they wouldn't do ,,anything" ...you'll just have to wait...
He can BAD...really ,really BAAAD... :))
Thank you so MUCH! WISH YOU the best! I wish so much to go in Paris ! and meet you!
MUCH L-O-V-E!
[Report This]Date: Dec 31, 2011 08:30 pm Title: WHO'S BAD?
Yay, you updated XD. I love your story soo much <3. Please updated soon and when you have to chance, will you please check out my stories? I really apperciated if you did. And happy new years to you too and I love you too:) Much L.O.V.E
Author's Response:
hI!
Yes,I've updated ! finally!
You do love MY story?
W
O
W
THANK YOU so dearly!
Sure,I will read your stories...! no problem!
Why thank you! I wish you a HAPPY NEW YEAR TOO! FULL OF LOVELY THINGS!
LOVE YOU TOO!
MUCH L-O-V-E!