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Reviewer: Rell gargala Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 21, 2019 09:12 pm Title: Chapter 24 - Speechless

Mia is realizing she has feelings for Michael and that she may give him a chance to win her heart. Can’t wait for more.

Author's Response:

Yes, she is. I love writing her emotions and thougths toward him. Thank you for reading and commenting

Reviewer: TheRealStory Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 21, 2019 05:23 pm Title: Chapter 24 - Speechless

I cant get over how perfect these characters are, how you mastered the art of giving them each their very own personalities and clear divisions. You write beautifully and really you serve as such an inspiration. Every time i read a chapter I’m fueled to write something myself. Stay amazing! XO

Author's Response:

You flatter me! I am so glad you are enjoying this story and my characters. It means the world to me. :)

Reviewer: TheRealStory Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 21, 2019 05:09 pm Title: Chapter 23 - A touch, a kiss and a whisper of love

Literally gave me butterflies. Why cant men like this exist!!! Ughhhhhh girlll this was beautiful. Excellent descriptions. The story is unraveling perfectly.

Reviewer: WritingConquersAll Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 21, 2019 04:13 pm Title: Chapter 24 - Speechless

I hope one day Amelia and Katharine can hash out their differences but I’m so happy that they are finally married!! The moment I was waiting for. Can’t wait to see what happens next.

Author's Response:

I can't wait to read what you think of what I have planned next. Thank you for reading and commenting. <3

Reviewer: wendymj0307 Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 19, 2019 08:17 am Title: Chapter 23 - A touch, a kiss and a whisper of love

Beautiful!

Reviewer: WritingConquersAll Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 18, 2019 04:14 pm Title: Chapter 23 - A touch, a kiss and a whisper of love

Okay I see Michael is getting confident. I love this story!

Reviewer: liberiangurlmj Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 16, 2019 08:38 am Title: Chapter 23 - A touch, a kiss and a whisper of love

I’m not crying, you are!!!! 😭😭😭😥😥😥  short but sweet, I know that this is just a peek into the wedding and that you’re coming full force with the next chapter!!! If one kiss had Amelia so weak, I don’t wanna see when they- never mind 🙈🙊😂 yes Michael  doing what needs to be done!  I knew he would never give her a used ring and I knew that was one of the main things bothering her 😩 I would’ve felt hurt too but I’m glad it’s cleared up. Both of them are so similar and they don’t even truly see it. 

Reviewer: Gigi1971 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 16, 2019 05:06 am Title: Chapter 23 - A touch, a kiss and a whisper of love

Short and sweet like the sweetest candy. That was brilliant. It was so sweet to see how innocently sweet Arianna took care of Michael in the backyard of Liz’s house. Little Arianna has a heart of gold, too. It was really adorable, though I wish it had been Amelia rushing to his side, but she was too upset and angry for that, I guess. I am happy that Arianna told Michael how protective and genuine her sister is when it comes to the tabloids and their evil slandering. He needs to know things like that.
But no scene compares to smooth and confident Michael showing up at Amelia’s room, leaning against the doorframe all slick and cool. 😍😍😍😍That was the best scene. What a smart and thoughtful move to try to clear the air BEFORE getting married. He is so sweet, oh my god. Honesty flows out of him like hot chocolate. I was melting on the inside and I was humbled by his words. That’s how modest he is, all he asks of her is her loyalty and that she never betrays/ cheats on him. He is sooo sweet and romantic. What a man! And Amelia made that promise!!! That was beyond intense and I was so positively surprised that she was so calm and responsive. I guess I was right that she felt jealousy when Katherine made that hurtful comment. It was to hurt Amelia. So, thank you so much for clearing up that Katherine only said what she did to hurt Amelia and that it wasn’t true. Just like Michael said he would never do something like that because this is not the man that he is. He has too much class that’s just not his style. And Amelia is like no other woman to him. I’m very grateful that you cleared that up because it bothered Amelia a great deal and I guess that this was a major reason why she wanted to call the wedding off. I am so proud of Michael for finally being so bold and strong to speak his mind. I’m overwhelmed by it. I pray that he will stay that way. He needs this boldness to convince her that he’s the right kind of guy for her. He was lacking self-confidence and a man who loves a woman needs to show her how much he wants her it’s not always good to stay sweet, shy and reluctant. If you want something you go get it. And I think this newfound boldness in combination with classy, sweet and gentle Michael will leave Amelia no chance but to fall in love with him and hard. And that first kiss definitely opened all the gates towards her heart. Where ever did MJ take the courage from? Must’ve been the fact that she did show up to the wedding freely. Had she still been mad at him, she could have stayed at Liz’s, soo that fact alone must have boosted his confidence and gave him the courage to initiate the first innocent kiss. He was so slick and tender. 🥰 Aww 🥰 everything you wrote in those last lines is documenting the beginning of the change within Amelia, I am sure. Something amazingly great. It warmed my heart, you have no idea. Now, finally after experiencing that kiss that went through all her nerve ends and back, she knows what she’s been missing. Finally that English dude is out of her system. It purified her and washed out all the evil remains of that unhealthy relationship. It’s like a reset to her system. Now with Michael as her husband she will experience what love is really all about and what butterflies really feel like for the first time. YES!!!! You did it and so extraordinarily well�’�🤪😍😍😘😘😍❤️Head nod👍😍❤️❤️😍😘😘

Reviewer: Rell gargala Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 15, 2019 08:05 pm Title: Chapter 23 - A touch, a kiss and a whisper of love

Mia is finally see that she may love Michael back and Michael is still trying to show her that she has feeling for him too. Sneaky Peter Pan

Reviewer: Gigi1971 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 15, 2019 11:32 am Title: Chapter 22- Give into me

Here it comes:........
Sweet bejesus. What was that??!!? I was speech-and breathless for quite some time. I mean what kind of a whirlwind and immensely eventful chapter did you throw out there? I was overwhelmed. This was something else! I loved it with a passion especially and first and foremost the end of the chapter where Mike showed us readers a whole different side of him. But I will get to this a little later.......I will just say this much: I sang a hallelujah when Michael put his foot down the way he did and did not take “no”for an answer. Very sexy and feisty, too!!!😍😍😍😍
My god. I don’t even know where to start. Let me see: when you started off the chapter with Katherine Jackson, I knew she was trouble. From what I read and know about Katherine, who by the way was described perfectly as “the grapevine that will stay sweet, but nourish the tension that Michael has spent years detaching himself from” you hit the nail on the head.
I mean I know she means well but she was scary and really cruel towards Amelia. Probably because she’s so overprotective of Michael cause it’s her most sensitive son and she truly cares deeply for him. I especially didn’t like her totally unnecessary comment about her engagement ring.That was so uncalled for and hurtful. And interestingly enough, it really got to Amelia, too, although she keeps telling herself that she is not affected by Michael’s affection that everybody seems to notice and lately, herself, too.So that was quite interesting although I’m still not sure whether she just simply enjoys the undivided attention and pampering she’s getting from Michael to stroke her ego or whether she is falling in love with him. Just isn’t clear to me. I really embraced the fact that in this chapter you told us a lot about Amelia’s state of mind.
We learn a lot about her confusion and insecurity about whether she should believe what everybody else believes which is Michael being in love with her or she’s thinking about what it would be like if she fell in love with him and Michael was not in love with her how that outcome would be and she’s kind of like playing with different scenarios but all of them I’m not to her liking so it seems. At the end of the day she claims to still be suffering from her failed relationship with that dude from England. But that is something I still don’t understand because they don’t seem to have had anything in common he was a total opposite of her generosity and her kindness and her caring personality. He was so full of shit and still she claims she loved him. I wonder what she loved about him? They were so different in character, behavior and he certainly had no dignity nor grace. And he hurt her beyond imagination, multiple times scrupulously. I wonder why she is so reluctant to entertain the thought of developing feelings for Michael Jackson. Doesn’t she know that friendship is the best foundation for a long lasting beautiful relationship? I mean nobody compares to his character, gentleness and thoughtfulness and sensitivity.Something all women long for.
I although found it quite eye opening and sad to read about the contrast on how Amelia experienced and remembered the night of Michael’s proposal in comparison to Michael’s experience ( in the last chapter). She was all giddy and happy, but unfortunately not because he proposed, but because of the most exclusive “rock” that she was presented with!!! Whereas Michael had had to put up a mask to get through the rest of the evening once she had dropped that unromantic question “how the marriage of convenience will actually be lived out”. He was heartbroken and had to cry himself to sleep and my heart broke for him, too. That was a hard pill to swallow.
I already said it last time and I will say it again: I don’t know what to make of her hot and cold behavior. She loves writing back and forth with him acting like a teen in love hiding in her room and reading and collecting all of his poems and letters as keepsakes and loves the attention but still does not have butterflies when the man is near her???? Wow! And Katherine’s comment about Brooke Shields’s ring obviously hurt Amelia deep down and I wanna believe that this comment is the true reason she decided to call off the wedding. She did not feel special anymore in that moment. Hurt? Probably!
Anyways, all of this strange behavior keeps confusing the heck out of me. It sounds so unbelievably unrealistic. She must be in total denial.
I don’t know what to make of it.

I also got to compliment you on your ability of writing again. I absolutely love the scenes with these three powerful and strong characters together. Savannah and Liz are Amelia’s most powerful weapon and support system. It is amazing to experience Liz Taylor’s motherly care for Amelia. She’s is clearly protecting Michael‘s and Amelia‘s interests and in her attempt to what’s best for both of them, she always has their best interest at heart! She is amazingly wise! I love her to the moon and back and she’s funny and intuitive, too. Love the scene and almost died from laughter when Amelia was trying to be inconspicuous by hiding her humongous ring at the breakfast table and Savannah noticed, being all dramatic dropping her fork noisily, screaming expletives. Sooo fricking funny. You are describing it so vividly I can imagine sitting right next to them. Everything you describe, girl, it it’s so well written, I feel like a fly on the wall. It’s perfect. You’re a great author, I mean that’s an ability that only good authors possess being able to take the reader right into the middle of the action. And you are capable of that. This is what makes your story so magical.
So these three women together are great as they are providing the necessary surrounding for Amelia to he’ll with all and everything that’s been going down for the last couple of weeks and the preparation of the upcoming wedding. She is living there shielded from the outer world until Katherine arrives and destroys her little heaven of safety.
There is something about Katherine that isn’t solely caring and motherly but that strikes me as her being bitter. She’s jealous of Liz Taylor’s relationship with her son. She knows that he doesn’t confide in his own mother anymore the way he used to. That he has refrained from doing that because it never stays with his mother but always gets back to his brothers and even Joesph. With age and maturity Michael came to realize that it wasn’t wise to do that anymore but made him vulnerable and an easy target to get him to do things for the benefit of his family. And that is something probably among other things that Amelia doesn’t know about Michael and in her attempt to be honest was Katherine to have her on her good side, she screwed up telling her things she wasn’t supposed to know in Michael‘s mind.
But I’m really all for Katherine when it comes to the fact that she’s trying to protect Michael from making stupid decisions that will only bring him heartache and not the love that he’s hoping for. She appears to be wanting what’s best for him but since she doesn’t know him as well as Liz, she doesn’t really know what Michael feels in his heart and what he’s trying to accomplish with that wedding. And she obviously doesn’t know about his infatuation for Amelia and how strong of a friendship they have and how well they complement each other.
That brings me to the final scene of this wonderful action loaded chapter :
Michael in a state of emergency totally out of character!!!!! JUST WOW! Wonderful and unexpected to experience. He finally became a strong, stern and most importantly confident man. Someone he longed to be for a long time, by fighting for what he feels is right, by going after his girl, by making her stay and even going as far as holding her hostage!!!. That was amazing and so out of character! I loved it!!! I loved how he finally had the guts to admit his feelings for her. But I was so surprised and disappointed that Amelia didn’t catch up on it but instead behaved so weird and defensive and didn’t want anything to do with what he had to say and what he had to offer so beautifully and so honest. He really made himself vulnerable to her which is very risky. A part of me died inside of me upon the scenario that played out in front of me as a reader. Upon seeing her disturbing behavior and her rejection. In my mind, when I pictured him finally telling her his feelings , I thought she was going to kiss him right on the lips as a reaction towards his honesty and that wonderful revelation. But her reaction was hard to bear for me. But I’m so proud of Michael for standing up for what he wants and for telling his guards to not let anybody leave. I loved it!!! He is going to pull through with what he wants to do. Furious Michael is a sight to behold and I love him. MJ is on a mission to get his girl and he is putting his foot down vigorously. I mean seriously, he hasn’t come that close to getting married only for her to leave him one day before the wedding, to let her slip through his fingers. I’m so proud of him and I am extremely curious what’s going to happen next.
Fantastic! Great! Funny although sad regarding Amelia’s reaction but still an excellent ending to this wild chapter. 😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️

Reviewer: YuliAlexaMJ Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 14, 2019 11:27 am Title: Chapter 22- Give into me

I have not idea of what's going to happe. They are very complex characters and I feel sorry for both of them :'(

Reviewer: Clsflames Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 13, 2019 05:20 am Title: Chapter 22- Give into me

This is incredible. I'm speechless. Loved how you threw in that line from give in to me! Looking forward to what happens next.

Reviewer: yourburgersarethebest Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 13, 2019 12:32 am Title: Chapter 1- The Helmsley Hotel

Wow. You know, I saw this story for the whole week and I always wondered if U should reas it. Tonight, I decided to do so before bed. The reviews and good words about this story are TRUE. This fanfic isn't really like anything I've read before. Like "Fever" by PixieDust, I feel like it is written in a movie-like way, but your writing has a charm to it that separates it from other works.

From the little details (like Michael asking his assistant Frank to remove the red M&Ms) to the small historical refetences of the mid 1980s, this chapter has proven to me that your story deserves to be added to my favorites.

What I wished to see was more characterization of Danni. Her name is different. I would like to know where she's from. I know she's old, but what is she like in appearance? Does she stand by Amelia like a vulture, sneering at her every move, or is she like an elderly mother bear, there to guide her as she grows up under her father's shadow?

Michael was done VERY well. I can imagine him having an inner monologue very close to what you have written for him. Some writers exaggerate with Michael's mannerisms and speech, others struggle to get it just "right". What I notice with your depiction of Michael is that you allow his actions to protrat his character more than words ever could. I commend you for that. For example, Michael already expects Amelia's father to show up, so he's already straightening himself in hthe chair like he's royalty (lol). Michael is not an easy person to write, but you are one of the fanfic authors with the secret formula.

I hope to read more soon. I have to admit I really enjoyed your opening chapter. (Trim the word count a little, though?) See you around.

Reviewer: Rell gargala Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 12, 2019 10:45 pm Title: Chapter 22- Give into me

Mia, loves him but is to scared to show it. Sitting on pins and needles!!! Way to Michael, the truth will help Mia to see what her heart already knows!

Reviewer: liberiangurlmj Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 12, 2019 03:27 pm Title: Chapter 1- The Helmsley Hotel

Turn this into a book 💁🏾‍♀️ I’ll buy it!!❤️ 



Author's Response:

Hahaha! You're so sweet! 

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