[Report This]Date: Jan 08, 2020 11:41 pm Title: Chapter 43 - Snow covered truths
Not for long and watch out for Nicholas; he’s up to something
Date: Jan 08, 2020 04:01 pm Title: Chapter 43 - Snow covered truths
Im not here yet, but Ill get there one day! Im sure its just as excellent as all of your.other chapters. Keep up the great work, Athy! Writing isn't easy but you sure make it seem like it is.
[Report This]Date: Jan 06, 2020 12:07 am Title: Chapter 42 - The Crescendo
I have to be honest with you. That chapter could have been twice as long and still wouldn’t have been long enough simply because:
1: The story has been building around this moment for so long and the tension was so high that the anticipation for their sexual union/ copulation wasps high, it was over the roof, so that one chapter will never be enough to do justice in describing the love, admiration, devotion, passion, lust and desire that they share for each other.
But it was the right moment for them to give in to each other for they have been waiting for this moment for so unbearably long. But most importantly it was the right moment, because it finally felt right because Amelia eventually uttered the four letter word and expressed her love for her sweet, patient, sexy, loving, devoted husband.
2: Your description was so romantic and loving I loved every minute of it but it was over much too fast. You have a way with words my dear🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰 I absolutely loved and had to laugh about the comment you made Amelia make after their umpteenth round of lovemaking “Who wants to be gentle?†That was so wonderful because it showed how quickly she got addicted to Michael’s expertly lovemaking 😉 That was so funny and I was happy to read that Amelia is totally hooked. I am also thankful that you made clear that the rolls are somehow reversed, now. That Michael gets to say “ I know you do†and that it’s Amelia who helplessly and repeatedly vows and expresses that she loves Michael. He so needs that confirmation and this really makes me smile all through the chapter to the point that I read it over and over again because I am so happy to read that Michael has finally achieved what he has been dreaming about and longing for for so many years: To turn the sad story of unrequited love into one of reciprocated love. He is in total bliss and still trying to comprehend if what is happening is real or still a fantasy. The anticipation for their lovemaking was so high that he was so feverish and love drunk that he had a hard time comprehending what was going on. So he has to have her again. Perfect! I can see Michael smile and jubilate all through this chapter. It’s so satisfying to read! I swear!
I am still overcome with a warm feeling of pure admiration for this lovely chapter. And what really catapulted me into an euphoric state were these two sentences at the end of each description of either of the two lover’s state of mind after that first night of finally letting go of all their inhibitions:
Your description of Michael’s internal thoughts:
“He felt like a man, but more importantly, he felt like a person for the first time in his life.â€
And your description of Amelia’s internal thoughts:
“Amelia felt like a true and powerful woman for the first time in her lifeâ€
They are each other’s blessing and are meant to be.
So thank you but please give us much much more of these magical, uplifting, romantic chapters because in their case they ain’t never enoughâ¤ï¸â¤ï¸â¤ï¸ðŸ¥°ðŸ¥°â¤ï¸â¤ï¸â¤ï¸â¤ï¸â¤ï¸â¤ï¸â¤ï¸â¤ï¸â¤ï¸â¤ï¸â¤ï¸â¤ï¸â¤ï¸ So, 10 points of rating are not enough!
Date: Jan 05, 2020 12:06 am Title: Chapter 5- Traditions and Fantasy
Tatiana Thumbtzen quickly faded the moment she opened her mouth and began to speak.
Okay, so when you said that this was alluding to a true line Michael said about Tatiana Thumbzten, my heart broke XD That is soo mean! And to think she had so much respect for him. Boy, bye.
Date: Jan 05, 2020 12:02 am Title: Chapter 10 - Fool's will play
"Michael smirked wondering why he was putting so much effort into disliking her."
I like this sentence a lot!
""Is she your Wendy?" Arianna smiled and looked at Lisa Marie. Michael turned a very bright shade of red and opened his mouth to tell his youngest guest that any woman who came to Neverland could be Wendy, but Lisa Marie took his hand in hers and smirked.
"I would like to be."
Great suspense there!!
"Michael never did. He always won, he always succeeded, that's just who he was."
Nicely written!
I liked this chapter. It was full of suspense, development, and great dialogue from Frank, LOL. I hope to read on soon when I can! I started reading the first half, and then school started, so I'm just starting on reading where I left off. It might have been an earlier chapter, so I have to check. You are a TALENTED writer and I hope this story gets even more love. All the best to you, and I'll read more of Black and Blue soon. Beautiful story.
[Report This]Date: Jan 02, 2020 06:07 pm Title: Chapter 42 - The Crescendo
Dang, things are getting super hot for these two
[Report This]Date: Jan 02, 2020 10:16 am Title: Chapter 42 - The Crescendo
They're so good to each other <3
Date: Jan 01, 2020 09:30 pm Title: Chapter 1- The Helmsley Hotel
Holy goddamn smokes.
This chapter is just omg ðŸ˜ðŸ˜ðŸ˜ðŸ˜ðŸ˜ðŸ˜ðŸ˜ðŸ˜ðŸ˜ðŸ˜!
Fire fire fire 🔥
[Report This]Date: Jan 01, 2020 05:32 pm Title: Chapter 42 - The Crescendo
Lord have mercy.... whew 😅😩😩 I need to recover from this chapter. I'll be back in two days 😩😂 Happy New Year 🥳🥳🥳🎊🎆â£ï¸â¤ï¸
Girl trying to kill me with this chapter. I'll be back with my final thoughts when I gather myself from this um "crescendo "
[Report This]Date: Dec 28, 2019 02:37 pm Title: Chapter 41 - A sensual symphony
Girl, this was such an amazingly emotional chapter on so many levels and in all described scenarios. I salute you for your ability to convey all of those extreme so extremely well. It all feels realistic and believable. Savannah’s distress was very convincing as was Michael’s emotional onslaughts towards Amelia. He did the right thing to confront her with those divorce papers. He was at his wits’ ends and so drained emotionally that it was the only logical consequence to call it quits. To release her. I am over the moon with joy that the outcome of his confrontation was her complete confession. Grandiose! I loved every minute of this chapter.!!!! Amelia loves Michael and Michael loves Amelia !!! The world is back on its axis!
[Report This]Date: Dec 28, 2019 10:16 am Title: Chapter 41 - A sensual symphony
Awesome chapter...I was holding my breath first part then *swooooooon* at the end. Can't wait for the fireworks of the next chapter.
Glad to have you back on here Athy, I love you stories.
Happy Holidays x
[Report This]Date: Dec 26, 2019 01:15 pm Title: Chapter 41 - A sensual symphony
First of all, I understand Michael's frustrations and anger towards Amelia and how he felt hearing her call his name while sleeping but she was delirious and having a really high fever so I don't think she called him name in a romantical sense. I think the fever caused some mixup and that's why she went towards the fire. Michael has to give her some slack! Michael really went out and got some divorce papers ðŸ˜ðŸ˜ðŸ˜ awww he was really hurt. That hit Amelia out of left field but it got her to brave up and finally express her true feelings for Michael, just mad it took something like that to do it but I'm so happy she finally did, it made Michael so happy 😀 whew that last paragraph took my breath away.... they love each other so much and they finally got a chance to express a little bit of that love 😉😉
Savannah..... sighs... Frank is drinking because of YOU! he's hurting just like you are hurting. She's being so hardheaded and not thinking straight. Instead of running away and becoming a beard, she should do the right thing and tell that man about his baby. It's not right for her to group frank up with her nasty racist and fascist father.
I hope she in the end makes the right decision.
She's making decisions now purely out of emotions and being afraid of not having her inheritance... she gives too much power to her father. Amelia, it took almost dying to truly see thst you and Michael are made for each other and that Michael truly loves her and she loves him just the same.
I can't wait for chapter 42!! Continue with the great work!!! â¤ï¸
[Report This]Date: Dec 26, 2019 01:10 pm Title: Chapter 41 - A sensual symphony
oh God! They almost got divorced but finally Amelia told him the truth! I can't wait for the next chapter! :3 <3
[Report This]Date: Dec 25, 2019 10:58 pm Title: Chapter 41 - A sensual symphony
Dang, Michael I told you that Mia loves you. You are about to find out how much!!! What someone says in a feverish brain can’t be held against them because they are delirious with the fever!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reading and comenting. I am so glad you enjoyed it. Have a great holiday season. :)
Date: Dec 25, 2019 10:08 pm Title: Chapter 41 - A sensual symphony
Oohhh damn !
This was a super good chapter ! Absolutely loved it
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reading and commenting! I am so glad you enjoyed it. Have a great holiday season!