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Reviewer: Creole_hunni Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Dec 20, 2015 04:34 am Title: Chapter 6: Back to Reality

THIS IS MY WHOLE REACTION TO MICHAEL COMPLETELY FRONTIN' AND BEING A COMPLETE JERK TO THE POOR GIRL

LOL HE'S TRYING SO HARD TO SEEM INDIFFERENT HE'S LOOKING FOOLISH!! LOL HE NEEDS TO DO WAAAY BETTER! BUT THE DATE WAS CUTE! ANGEL BETTER KEEP HER GUARD UP WITH THIS ONE. THATS THE ONLY WAY SHE'LL COME OUT ON TOP

GREAT CHAPTER!! UPDATE SOON PLEASE!!



Author's Response:

Thanks boo! But you can't blame the man for trying right? Even if he did suck at it lol. We'll have to wait and see who will come out on top. I plan this to be a long stort

Reviewer: Zendaya Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Dec 18, 2015 04:05 pm Title: Chapter 6: Back to Reality

Wow, Mike was being a jerk. But when isn't he really one? Kimani is really confusing me with her emotions her feelings. One minute she doesn't care then the next she does. Like, pick one girl. Lol. I really believe she's gonna be the one to crack and develop feelings first because the way she acting, it's obvious.

Now this contract.... is she gonna sign or not. She probably have a debate about that too.

So her father and friend calls her about her 'dating' Michael Jackson. That was quick of them popping on the tv screen. I already know she's gonna go off on Michael now that he called.



Author's Response:

Maybe he's trying to keep his business professional? We'll see soon enough and I'll be posting chapters from his POV as well. Obviously she isn't supposed to care and she knows it. But no one expected the acting to be that great and she's just confused and trying to protect herself. We will just have to wait and see who cracks first.

if you were only doing this to be nice, as this entire thing is a very sudden charade, would you sign the contract? It makes things legal and official and messy to get out of. 

TV tends to be quicker than paper. And Michael is in big trouble now

Reviewer: Lorry Signed [Report This]
Date: Dec 17, 2015 12:05 pm Title: Chapter 6: Back to Reality

 

what a great way to end the date michael by being a complete Jerk..how thoughtful of you..Poor angel oh how bad I feel for her and how is she going to deceive the whole jackson clan she and michael have been together for months! i hope it won't be a dieaster.



Author's Response:

Maybe he's only trying to keep a professional facade so neither of them get hurt. Or maybe he's saving face in front of his driver. Who knows? Either way something is a bit fishy with him don't you think? As far as Kimani goes.... good luck to her is all I can say because this is barely the beginning of her journey into this "relationship".

Reviewer: TutThreeSevens Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Dec 11, 2015 07:20 am Title: Chapter 5: A Very Sweet Date

The difference with Ki's boss and Michael is a legal one. Michael isn't her employer so while his proposition to her is morally as questionable, only her boss' could lead to legal issues if carried out. My judgment was rendered on those terms. Besides Michael only asked for her to pretend to be his girlfriend. Sex wasn't implied or stated as a condition so not really illegal. 

Yayyyyy the date was cute. Them feeding each other was adorable. I can see wether the relationship is fake or not real feelings can come into play. I think Michael's feelings are already engaged. Kimani is suppressing hers hard but she's playing with fire. As always I love their banter. They fit. 

You were right Michael seems more shy and reserved now than he did before. 

More soon. <333



Author's Response:

Reminder: it was a thought not an action, so he isn't doing anything wrong. And Michael did employ her like a call girl which is still considered a form of prostitution in the eyes of the law because sex can be implied. Sex wasn't stated by any parties.

Always remember: looks can be deceiving. And if you were her and you knew this was fake would you allow yourself to fall hard and fast? It's only the first date.

Reviewer: Zendaya Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Dec 10, 2015 03:55 pm Title: Chapter 5: A Very Sweet Date

Date went rather well. They're playful butchering back and forth gets me everytime. Honestly, this 'date' seemed more realistic than just a pretend one. I actually thought they were foreal for a minute or two. 

Now with Kimani going back and forth with her thoughts, it's like she wants to do then again she doesn't. But she kisses him and that makes me think alot like hmmm obviously you want to go trough wit it. 

I'm sure Mike enjoyed that kiss alot and can't wait to get another. As for Her name Angel, I believe it's to protect her real identity because of who he is. 



Author's Response:

That's an interesting theory on her name but he has said her name 2x  during the date thanks to her stubbornness. Still very interesting nonetheless I never thought of it like that. And you can bet he enjoyed that kiss lol!

But can you blame her for fighting herself?  This is supposed to be fake, no matter how good it looks or feels.

 

Reviewer: Lorry Signed [Report This]
Date: Dec 09, 2015 01:40 pm Title: Chapter 5: A Very Sweet Date

Aww there interaction was adorable and their spoon feeding each other ? Icing on the top of s cake lol. I'm glad they got along and angel should give him small chance at least (that nickname is infectious or I'm just lazy to spell her name) lol.



Author's Response:

Lol it's not a hard name though. And they got along a pretty well for now but we'll see how long it lasts

Reviewer: TutThreeSevens Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Dec 03, 2015 05:08 am Title: Chapter 4: Cheap

The nerve of her boss. How about you run an efficient studio to gain loyal recording arbutus instead of trying to pimp out your employees. Ugh. Disgusting. 

*Claps hands* It's date time!!! Let's see how Pop tart(I love this nickname btw😩) pulls out the stops for his Angel. 

More soon! <333



Author's Response:

He's a man with flaws but Michael kind of treated Kimani like a hooker too so don't be too quick to judge one over the other. *shrugs*

Date time is up next but not until after finals! I'm sorry for the wait

Reviewer: Zendaya Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Dec 02, 2015 08:30 pm Title: Chapter 4: Cheap

Mr. Higgins had me like wow!!! First, he went in on homegirl for being late but when she mentioned two beautiful words: Michael Jackson, all hell died down. He even gave her a free trip to the damn spa. What boss even do that??????? 

Damn, we're so close to the date, lol. I'm so anxious to know what's all gonna occur. Or, if Michael is ever gonna get that Kissinger so desperately wants to test her kissing skills, kml.



Author's Response:

I wish my boss did that. But yeah mood swings aren't for fun. He's a bit of a jackass I must admit.

And yes so close yet so far away from this date (blame finals) but I promise it won't disappoint!

 

Reviewer: Creole_hunni Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Dec 02, 2015 07:07 pm Title: Chapter 4: Cheap

 LOL ITS REALLY CRAZY HOW HER BOSS THINKS HE CAN LITERALLY PIMP OUT HIS EMPLOYEE'S NOW! LOL HE WAS JUST CHEWING HER OUT!! NOW EVERYTHING IS BUTTERFLIES AND RAINBOWS LOL...LITERALLY LOVE THE NICKNAME SHE HAS FOR MIKE..POP TART..LOL SO CUTE ! CANT WAIT TO SEE WHAT HAPPENS NEXT. YOURE DOING A GREAT JOB!



Author's Response:

I'm loving the gif usage in this review lmao . Keep it up for me please lol but I mean he's a man, what can you expect from them?  But remember Michael had insinuated that Kimani was a prostitute or could be bought first. He can't be let off the hook if we're going to be  getting mad at anybody here. But yeah that boss is a nutcase . And I like pop tarts. Lol you'll have to wait till after finals to see what happens on their date 

Reviewer: Lorry Signed [Report This]
Date: Dec 02, 2015 01:23 pm Title: Chapter 4: Cheap

her boss is gross honestly! 'why didn't i think of giving my workers to clients' how can digusting can one man be? ugh!
but i still love mj and her interaction I just hope the date don't mess up and yes I agree she will need those sunshades XD. 



Author's Response:

Men don't always understand or think before they speak. But can you really just blame him when Michael also suggested that she be paid for her services in an earlier chapter? They both are subtly insinuating that they think she's a prostitute by reducing her to some price paid by them in exchange for goods provided by her (whatever they assume those "goods" might be). 

Lol gotta love sunglasses and banter

Reviewer: Creole_hunni Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Dec 01, 2015 12:06 pm Title: Chapter 3: Late Night

This is too funny!! love the story so far!! Looking forwatd to your next update!!!



Author's Response:

Thank you very much! I always appreciate reviews so never hesitate to post but the next update is coming soon today.

Reviewer: TutThreeSevens Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Nov 30, 2015 08:29 pm Title: Chapter 3: Late Night

OMG Mani and Pop Tart's dialogue is so cute. She's going to be a sucker for him I can tell. Heck I'm a sucker for him. 

To answer your question from the last chapter. I do like cocky self assured Michael. He can still be sweet with hints of shyness but when he knows what he wants and goes for it? It's the best lol. 

I adore them both.

His little pervert self. Lmaoooo. They're both hilarious. 

More soon. <333



Author's Response:

Lol well we'll have to wait and see how they grow on each other.  But what if this Isn't the real Michael, behind the scenes?  Thank you for the review and let's see  where this goes from here  soon 

Reviewer: Zendaya Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Nov 30, 2015 04:21 pm Title: Chapter 3: Late Night

First I'm gonna start off by saying, I didn't see any errors at all. You're all good hun :)

Now, micjael is lowkey annoying in his own cute and charming way. He's very bold with the ladies I see especially his 'Angel'. I laugh everytime because she just can't stand his stinking guts but likes him anyway..... when he's being sweet and not a total pervert.

I'm sure looking forward to this 'date' they have tomorrow. Wonder how it's gonna go.



Author's Response:

I think we are all looking forward to the date but we'll see how that goes. I think love always consists of being annoyed as hell of someone but tolerating them  and their antics anyway.  But what if this side of Michael isn't the real Michael?

Reviewer: Lorry Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 30, 2015 08:27 am Title: Chapter 3: Late Night

Lmao! Gurl this whole conversation had me cracking up, I love her comebacks might a few of em when i need em. Let's just hope the date *cough* lunch won't be diseaster but we shall see who knows? all i can say is make a few more spaces between their banter it gets alittle overwhelming for me to read at times :)



Author's Response:

Trust me there will be plenty more back and forth throughout because Kimani is like me and loves to be difficult lol. Thanks for the constructive criticism because I wasn't for sure if I should separate more or would that make it harder to follow.

Reviewer: TutThreeSevens Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Nov 24, 2015 03:42 am Title: Chapter 2: Keeping It Brief

Lmaooo. Poor girl was thrown a mile pass off guard. Hell I was taken aback by his forwardness. I like him already. 

Self assured and arrogant and sweet to a fault Michael is my fav. This arrangement is going to be funny I can already tell. Kimani gave in a bit quicker than I expected she would. So I'm thinking she's a bigger fan than she's letting on. 

PS. Is there a way you could separate the dialogue so it's easier to understand who's talking? I'll be reading regardless but it will just make it easier to read without having to reread to understand. 

More soon!!!<333



Author's Response:

Lol  you do? Arrogance tends to lead way to big down falls. Kimani too damn nice  to hold out too long, especially with her job on  the line. Her job is very quick paced so she can't be late  for anything unless she wants to be late for everything. She still has willpower though and a strength of her own so don't underestimate her just yet. Everyone clicks at some point.

Thank you for your honesty this is why we have reviews. I'll fix that in the upcoming  chapters. 

Stay tuned!

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