Reviewer: Megs Signed [Report This]
Date: Nov 29, 2013 05:00 pm Title: Prologue: Wet dreams

Uhm, okay, so... I don't usually read MJ slash, but I just had to with this one because you write very good and I was curious.

 

I liked the first chapters and I give you props for them because they were interesting, never boring. The only thing I don't find to be too believable - especially since Michael is portrayed as someone who's having doubts about his sexuality - is the fact that JUST after the first kiss he smiles and says "let's go to the bedroom"

Lol, that's very unlikely to happen. I can understand there's sexual tension, desire... but it's supposed t be something new, scary and overwhelming for him. I would suggest you to postpone this.

 

But then this is just my opinion. :)

Good luck! <3

Author's Response:

Thank you so much, it means a lot coming from someone who doesn't read slash and I appreciate your opinion :) I admit I had my doubts about this chapter and I was about to change it. I wanted to portray him as someone who is so confused (like you said) and that doesn't know what he wants so when he sees himself in that situation he just likes it and I don't know, it's the heat of the moment. He's not thinking clearly but he'll regret it later, that's the idea that I had but I'll be thinking about what you said and I might change some things x

Reviewer: Zeb Rex Anonymous [Report This]
Date: Nov 29, 2013 06:50 am Title: Chapter 3: Confusion

OMG, OMG, OMG! You updated!! This is so exiting and so good! I like the way you write really and I hope you update more often. :)

Lol, it was so awkward in the car when Michael woke up. Like, geez... xD 

Author's Response:

Thank youuuuu xoxox. Honestly I hardly have spare time lately so I don't know if I'll update soon. I'll try though :) and yeah even writing it was awkward I even thought of removing that part lol

Reviewer: Zeb Rex Anonymous [Report This]
Date: Oct 23, 2013 12:12 pm Title: Chapter 2: The glow

I really love this! I think it's genius! Michael's personality is different from any other "Michaels" I've witnessed before... And the whole thing about him, being attracted to a man and not "wanting" it, is fascinating. Good job, Girlinthemirror! Much love/ Zeb Rex

Btw, I like the text on your summary. It's really cool! :)

Author's Response:

Thank you, I'm glad you like it :)

Reviewer: celestia Signed [Report This]
Date: Oct 07, 2013 01:25 am Title: Chapter 2: The glow

Ohh.. intriguing! I really like Michael's multiple personality and I love it that he called Brian to excuse his bewildered behavoir. Keep going. :)

Author's Response:

Thank you <3

Reviewer: Andrew Anonymous [Report This]
Date: Sep 24, 2013 07:56 pm Title: Chapter 1: Threatened

Oh boy. I like where this is going! It won't hurt! Not that much. Well, at first...

Reviewer: Zeb Rex Anonymous [Report This]
Date: Sep 22, 2013 08:44 am Title: Chapter 1: Threatened

I love it! I think you have transformed Michael to a very interesting character, who doesn't really know what he wants. To see his actions in this chapter was really exiting. I definitely want you to continue with this story. I personally think this is your best :)

Author's Response:

Yeah he's so confused, poor baby. Thank you so much!

Reviewer: Treasured Signed [Report This]
Date: Sep 21, 2013 07:17 pm Title: Chapter 1: Threatened

Keep going love the story excited for new chapter

Reviewer: FromTheLipsOfAStranger Anonymous [Report This]
Date: Sep 21, 2013 10:45 am Title: Prologue: Wet dreams

I usually don't go for stories like this, but this first chapter really eats at your brain and makes you hungry for more. I love the way you faded in and out with bits of the past encounter with Brain. Great work, Girlio. We should try to collaborate one day! Love your choice vocab by the way. Rock on <3

Author's Response:

Heey, thank you so much girl. I do my best, it's kinda hard for me since English isn't my first language. A collaboration with you would be so amazing <3