Reviewer: VickiJ Signed [Report This]
Date: Jun 29, 2013 07:20 pm Title: Chapter 36

I think you did very well for contributing to the story. 

I can't believe that jelly is actually thinking of meeting with Kenny/Richard without talking it over with Michael, smh. She is putting not only herself in danger by her unborn child too. Besides this guy only intent is to hurt not ask her for money which she doesn't know. If Michael would have just told Jelly what was going on she wouldn't do these rash things without telling him. I hope they both tell each other what's going in in the next chapter before something happens to Jelly again.

Author's Response:

I agree...makingmichaelmagic did well.  Jelly's decisions are very risky.  Michael should have told her. 

Reviewer: Parisis Signed [Report This]
Date: Jun 25, 2013 02:19 am Title: Chapter 35

:D I love it! 

Author's Response:

Thanks!

Reviewer: VickiJ Signed [Report This]
Date: Jun 23, 2013 09:39 pm Title: Chapter 35

Now it all makes sense why Kenny/Richard was so upset about Jelly and Michael. But Michael is still a jackass for once again keeping something like this away from Jelly. She almost went to jail for killing his cousin and lost their baby too. I hope there's more to this plan of catching Prince Al than this whole Kenny/Richard angle. He said he would protect her last time but once they broke up he stopped. I hope that he doesn't make the same mistake again. 

I can't believe Jelly's dad thinks she should marry Kenny/Richard, creepy. I know he doesn't know what he's really like but he wants to brake her legs for Christ sake. This is gonna break Stephanie heart when she finds out about her brother.

P.S.: Will you be bringing your story Irony back? 

Author's Response:

Michael's choices in protecting the one he loves leads to so many disasters. Kenny/richard is indeed creepy.

BTW: 'Irony'. I'll try to being that back - hope I can squeeze it in.

Reviewer: April Signed [Report This]
Date: Jun 23, 2013 04:07 pm Title: Chapter 35

Not a smart move mike. You said that last time!!!!

Reviewer: April Signed [Report This]
Date: Jun 22, 2013 07:20 pm Title: Chapter 34

That was rude as fuck! Really Michael....he needs to grow a set and stop using jelly. Poor girl

Author's Response:

He is really rude as f! OMG girl he can be really down and dirt sometimes.

Reviewer: makingmichaelmagic Anonymous [Report This]
Date: Jun 22, 2013 09:22 am Title: Chapter 34

This is my opinion more about your writing style rather than the story itself:

Some grammar and typo errors which are not noticeable and definitely editable and a bit permissible.  You do have a very interesting story plot that kept me going.  Very catchy character - the girl not being fat.  About the humor part.  I really applaud you for that it was very rare that I get to laugh when I read stories or novels that attempts humor on it. With this writing of yours - I did lmao! That is something really hard to write-mix in a story.  Since I laughed at most of your chapters.  I would say the humor part was quite effective however risky - it was a 70/30 bid shot to keep your readers interest and keep them going.  The downside to humor in your story is that when the humor was totally dropped in some of your chapters that's when you starts to loose your readers interest and your reviewers comments and when the drama parts kicks in that's when the boredom part sinks in. I understand the drama parts was necessary to twist the story and it does make sense otherwise I would not have read this story and just look for funny jokes online. 

All in all I will still give you a 10/10 rating because this is really a very interesting read.

Author's Response:

Aylwin- girly. Thanks for reading and reviewing my story.  still 10/10 lmao!  glad to make you laugh. BTW: Thanks for writing 'Only in my Dreams'.  I know you are not a super MJ fan to begin with but geez i love you for writing 'hot' chapter stories about him as the main lead.  Post more chapters soon love.  

Reviewer: MJsPTY80 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: Jun 17, 2013 04:56 am Title: Chapter 33

Hello there! I finally caught up. I had been reading your story for the past 2 weeks and I am really enjoying it! Waiting for more....

Author's Response:

glad to know you are enjoying this...really hectic on my end right now...pretty soon i'll write a new chapter for this.

Reviewer: April Signed [Report This]
Date: Jun 12, 2013 10:30 am Title: Chapter 33

This is not going to end pretty...

Author's Response:

Michael here has guns in my head ...for now:***no comment***