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Reviewer: NatashaRosee Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Feb 22, 2013 03:42 pm Title: Chapter 1- New neighbors

Glad you brought this back.

It's really good :)



Author's Response:

Thanks it means alot that you guys say that because at first I wasnt sure if it a good story

 

Reviewer: Rate Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Feb 20, 2013 03:08 pm Title: Chapter 7 - Its not easy for all of us

I read every chapter before you deleted it but I'm glad you brought it back cause it's really a good story!

Please continue!

GO GO GO!

Author's Response:

Thanks^^

 

Reviewer: briarae92 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Feb 19, 2013 08:12 pm Title: Chapter 1- New neighbors

great chapter <3



Author's Response:

Thanks <3

Reviewer: RhythmChild Signed [Report This]
Date: Feb 19, 2013 06:53 pm Title: Chapter 6 - The Solution

It looks like a decent story, and I don't know why others haven't reviewed it yet, but I will. May I suggest that you make new lines for the dialogue, otherwise it will look visual cluttered, which usually makes the reader averse to reading it.

So instead of: "What are you doing?" I asked. "I'm just working," she said.

Try:

"What are you doing?" I asked.

"I'm just working," she said.

 

Good luck!



Author's Response:

thanks!

I will try it and well its my fault that there are no reviews because I deleted before.So dump.

well thanks

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