




Date: Oct 12, 2011 01:53 am Title: Together..
Aww what a beautiful story.
Date: Apr 21, 2011 03:59 pm Title: Together..
that was good lolz i love it u should keep writing
Date: Jan 10, 2011 11:07 pm Title: Thoughts...
This is such a beautiful stroy!! I can't wait to read more...



Date: Jan 03, 2011 11:30 am Title: The Beginning..and The Meeting
Nice start but its difficult to read clearly as there are no spaces. If your describing a scene and then dialogue takes place during the scene make sure the dialogue is separate so its easily read.
Author's Response:
Thanks for giving me some feedback...yeah i will do that now..thanks for commenting on that..ya see i write it on windows notepad and its difficult to edit when it gets posted online..More will be up soon and i will edit those in the story..:)
Date: Dec 26, 2010 11:30 pm Title: Trouble...
I like your story so far. Can't wait for more
Author's Response:
thanks..more will be up soon..x