Penname: NeelzLovesMJ [Contact] Real name:
Member Since: Aug 14, 2016
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Hellooo people of mjfic.com!


I'm an author here and writing has been a passion of mine since a very early age. I love all things literary - whether it's reading or writing. I adore literature and am huge fan of John Steinbeck, F. Scott Fitzgerald, Shakespeare and C.S Lewis among others. I also study English Literature and one of my favourite novels ever is The Great Gatsby.


I'm currently doing A-Levels in the UK, but outside of school, I'm an avid artist and have been drawing since I was in nappies. Another creative hobby of mine is music - I sing and play and I'm learning how to produce using software.


Music in general is a great part of my life and I listen to mainly Hip-Hop and R&B, both from today and from the 90s, though I like my House and Dancehall too. 


I grew up around MJ and his music and he fascinates and inspires me. My favourite allbum of his is Bad, as is the era, though I love him from 1958-2009. I combined two of the loves of my life and ended up writing a fanfiction story on this site. I take pride in my written work and doing anything creative is like a release for me. 


I'm still young and don't really know what I'll do in life XD but as for now, I know that I want to keep writing until the story is finished for you guys. 


Age: 18-21
Gender: Female
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Summary:

 

To the world I'm the reason the Jackson Five is breaking apart. 
To the Jacksons I'm the reason Michael Jackson's career is ruined. 
To my family I'm the reason for my parent's broken heart. 

But to him I'm the love of his life. 

Pregnant with Michael Jackson’s baby at nineteen years-old, Renee finds her life turning upside down.

“None of this means anything if that means you’re going to leave.”
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“Everyone is blaming me like I made this baby by myself when I didn’t!”

 


Categories: Jackson 5: 1965-1975, Off The Wall: 1975-1981, Thriller: 1982-1983
Characters: Michael, Original Girl
General Warnings: Some Scenes of a Sexual Nature
Trigger Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 14 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 45488 Read Count: 4795
[Report This] Published: Sep 16, 2017 Updated: Jul 31, 2018
Reviewer: darkmc912 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: Nov 05, 2017 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 5

Ok first - that secretary. I’m about to catch these hands! LOL she has no chill wow. TBH I think Michael should just the stupid paternity test done. It’s obvious the baby is Renee’s but if he doesn’t comply with Joseph it’s just going to make it worse like he might aswell just do it.

One thing I noticed was how Renee’s emotions change sooooo rapidly and how easily triggered she gets! Of course that’s because of her pregnancy hormones coming into play and I think you captured this type of circumstance brilliantly. Like one second she’s flustered and enjoying the bacon and Michael’s company, and then Michael drops that he might need to get tested. Way to ruin the moment bruh! Lmao fr tho, he should support her decision to move to her Aunt Myra’s. At this point in time, the BEST thing he can do is support her because clearly not everyone is on Renee’s side (which sucks). Aside from that I wanna know what names Michael has thought of no lie😂

I really am impressed with the types of descriptions you write regarding emotions as well as actions - “I chewed slowly as I reflected on his words”. That whole scene was really tense but again they got over it with their reminiscing. You’ve made it super easy to visualise everything. I also think the pacing is fine it’s steady and the addition of flashbacks enhance the reading experience. I hope Renee continues to stay optimistic and maybe doing what SHE wants will assure this... 



Author's Response:

LOL yeah the secretary was a little out of line. As for if the Michael will get it done or not we will see. He may to prove Joseph wrong, or he might not because it could hurt Renee's feelings. Either way we'll see as the story progresses. 

Ren's mood changes are very up and down, but as you mentioned it's the pregnancy homormones, as well as the stress taking turns on her. Thanks so much for all the compliments you made about my writing it made me smile and I really appreciate it!

Thanks so much for reading as well and I hope you stick around for the future! 

Reviewer: NeelzLovesMJ Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: Jul 17, 2018 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 12

OMGYASBEETCH

OK OK WAIT. I have. so much. to say. I read your response and I jumped to this chapter without thinking twice LOL. 

FIRSTLY, I just freaking love how Michael didn't even have to ask her straight up, something like 'well, what do you say?', in regards to the proposal. He made her say yes again because he couldn't believe it awwwwww mannnn the feels THE FKING FEELS BRANDY. This is the positivity Ren needs in her life and i cannot express how happy I felt while reading about her own happiness. She deserves this and so much more! 

This chapter is definitely going down as one of my faves so far for obvious reasons but also bc I liked the frequent interchanging POVs which really intensified things, and I can see why you did that (Ima get to that in a sec), and because of the two distinct moods you created in the space of like 2000 words. IT'S LIT. So, this Monica girl...I can totally see why Ren acted the way she did towards those rumours, which is natural, but I know she gonna come between my happy couple. Clearly good things don't last too long but I think Michael should tell her soon that he's not a single pringle anymore and she can goooooo awayyyyy. Be gone thot. Jk but better sooner than later. Pleaseeee don't let Ren's heart get broken, no matter what!

So far this story has been straight-forward. The use of a timeline helps keep things guided which is what I do too. I think flashbacks need skill for them to work effectively and you've used them well throughout! I know that as writers, our plans rarely ever stay the same and when they change, things can get a bit wtf. Defo continue with the flashbacks bc they bring out a lot of the story because your characters have so much history - like I hope to see one involving Michael and Monica! Of course keep them where needed - you know that if I ever have questions, I'll ask you in a review. Y u stress?! As for the non-story-talk, I'm 18 and yes I do start my first ever year of Uni in September! Gonna be moving out so I'll be broke af and have to 'adult' and no you're a way better writer than me - don't even go there!! I'm gonna read Burned tomorrow, still need to gather my emotions but until then I'll see you soon!! Amazing af update fam.



Author's Response:

LOL you saw I said she would say yes didn't you? 

I had to give y'all the feels son, whatchu meaaaan lol. Ren does deserve happiness I agree and in due time she's going to get there (maybe) but I'm not going to say too much because I refuse to give the story away. 

Thank youuuuu for marking it as a fave. I hate switching POVs like that but for this chapter I literally had no choice LOL. I could've made it all from Renee's POV but then it would've been too short and the same if I made it strictly from Michael's POV so I just switched between the two. I was hoping it wasn't too much... glad to see it wasn't. 

I wouldn't say Monica is going to come in between them necessarily... but when people overthink a lot of the time things can be looked at the wrong way... if that makes sense. "Be gone thot" lolololol noooo I wasn't ready. As for Ren's heart getting broken... what is the true definition of a heart break? Tell me sis, cuz I wanna know. 

Thank you! Sometimes me and flashbacks don't get along and I thought they were really messing this story up, but I see that they are not which enough for me to keep it going. Exactly. Plans change all the time and next thing i know I want to take my story in fifty different directions thus fucking up my synopsis entirely. Me stress because me is a natural stresser/worrier. I worry waaaay to much. 

Girl you trippin. You got mad skill, son. I ain't even close! And i hope you enjoy the hell out of your first year of college. Live it to the fullest. Study hard, party harder. LMAO

Reviewer: NeelzLovesMJ Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: Apr 23, 2018 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8

"I read that if a woman eats a lot of spicy food then the baby will come out bald." 

I rarely actually laugh aloud and lose my shit when I'm reading stories, but THIS CRACKED ME TF UP LMFAO, where did Michael read this?! Omg he'd be the best, yet most clueless father ever. All jokes aside, it's assuring to see these two educate themselves, especially since they're going to be young parents. It shows they're really going to take care of lil lime and they recognise that a baby is a huge responsbility.

Okay...first, I am not saying that teen pregnancy has got to be in any way easy - it was unexpected for Renee, and I know just like most young girls do, she pictured having her first child when she's older, perhaps a little more mature and preferably settled down. But when she complained about how she's "so damn fertile", it kinda sounded low-key...unappreciative? And like regret? Idk if she was joking orrr it could just be her hormones and everything she's currently dealing with, but what she said stood out to me particularly because I now know how lucky a woman has gotta be if she's perfectly fertile...I mean - I have PCOS bro! I'd rather be OVERLY-FERTILE than INfertile. She needs to be aware that there are lots of girls who, by nature, won't be able to concieve/have children as easily as she has; she shouldn't really complain about it. Fair enough she's 19 but come on fam...don't overlook the importance of what you got. (Plus I know she's not on some Kylie Jenner shit and she'll be a good mum XD). 

Totally agree with Renee and wanting to stay out of the media's eyes. I seriously love how comfortable these two are with each-other. Somebody get them their own house, and two wedding rings. And then they can raise this baby the right way. BUT they should only marry if they want to make that committment, as if a baby isn't enough committment, they shouldn't just tie the knot because Renee's pregnant and it will validate everything or whatever. It would probably offer a better environment to raise their child in though...so yeah, they should do it! HELL YEAH. 

Reviewer: NeelzLovesMJ Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: Jul 03, 2018 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 10

It's been a hot second since this has been updated, I'm excited to finally sit down and read!

Okay I just absolutely love seeing Michael take such good care of Ren. Is Kash gonna be sticking around? Because I'm already getting bad vibes from her and I'm all about that positivity. Holy shit she's four months in already and they still have no clear plan of how their child will be raised? This has got me stressing and I can feel something bad about to happen - I feel it. In regards to your end notes, YES I MISSED THEM LOL! Renee seems like a naive girl and if Michael's not around for the first two months of their baby's life, I think the girl would crash and burn all by herself. This doesn't sound like the kind of thing she's going to be capable of doing by herself, and yeah in a way - I'ma just come out and say it - it is because of her young age. But I'm not worrying too much. Michael has proven his dedication to her and I know he won't let this happen. Well, he better not, or Thriller Boy is cancelled and that's no joke! I hope some kind of compromise can be reached by September. Maybe Michael could take a hiatus from touring? I mean, at least that way, Jermaine can finally be in the limelight and that means no more beef right? I'm jk, but I cannottt waittttt to see what's gonna happen here.

I know you have several stories ongoing, but please continue this, Brandy! I IS HERE FOR DIS. This is one of the very few that I actually read, and I enjoy reading it. Feels like there's too much brewing up at the moment and I'd hate to not be able to see the outcome. Catch you back here soon! Also I meant to ask you, how did your finals go? 



Author's Response:

Kash... we're going to see more of Kash, yes. 

Nope! No plan yet. They have a lot of things to discuss but Michael was only home for a limited time. When he returns things will start to be set in stone but it's going to get a little rocky... spoiler alert lmao. Anyway, I'm glad you missed them! I love writting them as I do my other couples. I do agree. Renee is naive and it has a lot to do with her age, yes. 19 is grown but is freshly gone. You haven't really taken care of yourself and taking care of another human being can be hard especially if you didn't plan it. Michael being famous doesn't help either. 

He's definitely dedicated to Renee, but... well you'll find out for yourself. Mwahahaha. Okay I'm playing around. Back to being serious Michael could take a hiatus from the tour but that would mean he's upsetting his fans and we know that Michael loves and lives for his fans happiness. They'll come to a decision soon enough and let's just hope that everyone is happy about it. LMAOOO @ Jermaine being the headliner of the tour... talk about some empty stadiums and arenas there'll be. I'm such an ass LOL. 

Yessss I write a thousand stories haha but I do plan on continuing this and the support that I get from you guys makes it 10x better and more enjoying to write. It's been longer than I wanted but the new update up. 

As for final girrrrrl them shits had me like 

But I'm so freaking happy that they're over!! I do start school back up on the 20 of August which is why I'm trying to get as much updating in as I possibly can within these next five weeks. Y'all about to get tired of me but OH WELL. 

Reviewer: NeelzLovesMJ Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: Mar 20, 2018 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 7

OMG. Well to say it's been a while would be an understatement, girl! I, for one, am glad you're back with another update! 

No no noooo fam. I'm worried about Renee...should she be working that much in her condition? Desperate times call for desperate measures but I'm sure the shop can hire someone who DOESN'T have another human inside of them LOL. I'm just concerned for her pregnancy (given her age) and hope it's smooth-sailing and she is ok, and the baby is ok too. Wow interesting seeing Michael in the studio!! I personally always love when stories have this aspect of realism - his career. So recordings and albums and tourings, award shows etc...it's so cool when it's incorporated and as authors, it's fun to play around with it!

Haha the shade at La-Toya's voice...(someone had to say it though). 

LOL THIS GETS FUNNIER, first Renee was nearly caught about to get down and dirty with Michael and then he refuses to let Toy hear his material because he know's she's gonna steal XD idk if you've seen it (and bless your eyes if you haven't), but La-Toya's live rendition of 'Shake Your Body' is so CRINGE and just legit laughable. Okay serious now fr - why are Michael's brothers upset? Acting like they didn't cheat on their wives and have kids with other women, who never interfered wiith their touring and stuff, but suddenly Michael and Renee's baby will? Bye. At least they're trying to make this work despite the opinions of those around them. FR. 

OOOO THE NAME DROP! YASS HAHA, so that's what Michael is thinking! Brianna is nice! I love how he just casually said it XD. The only thing that made me smile even more is how much Michael cares for her. Even better they addressed their feelings at the end which is so important. It makes me optimistic that they'll get through this alright - I just hope nothing changes. 

Great, well-needed update, Brandy! 



Author's Response:

Sorry it took so long! 

I think for now she's okay. She's nearing three months and since she was relatively tiny from the beginning she's not that big, but she does have a small little bump. The baby hasn't had any complications so for now she should be okay, but if I was her I'd be looking for something different myself! And I very seldom write Michael in the studio, so it's exciting when I do! We're getting ready for off the wall girl so we have award shows, parties, all of that coming up as Renee progresses in her pregnancy. 

LOL no shade, no shade, but it is really pitchy. You'd know who's talking without even looking up. And I've never heard her rendition and since you say it's bad I doubt if i ever will LOL. I agree with Michael's brothers. They have families and wives, but are upset with Michael and Renee's situation? It's unfair. Yes, yes, yes Michael did drop a name and throughout the chapters he might drop a few more I have yet to decide *taps chin* but we will see! 

I hope they get through it too, but we will definitely see. 

Thanks so much girl. I appreciate you reading! 

Reviewer: NeelzLovesMJ Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: Nov 23, 2017 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 6

Broooooo that phone call hurt me more than it hurt Michael. Legit I can just picture him talking to Renee on the phone secretly. In a closet. Sounds like exactly the kind of thing teenage Michael would have done aw. I don't call him a bean for nothing LOL. Hahaa even I was like 'oh great Jermaine's going to give advice about women'. Lost af i agree lmao.

Knee-high tie-dyed socks OMG the 70s must have been lit XD. Love how you keep up with the context of the the time in whch the story's set. Ok I'm done being analytical lmao. Awwww so I really liked this chapter - I thought it was nice that Michael went to visit her at home and I get why he's lowkey beating himself up for not having the courage to tell her legit omg she's not going to cut you off fam, you're MJ. It's obvious she cares about him and shit like forced him to take some cake...jk, but if she gets annoyed that he calls her a friend then isn't that enough of a sign that she's after a different kind of label herself? 

I guess it's up to Renee to make the first move, then, bc it doesn't seem like Michael wlll. Good chapter! ....great now I want cake lol



Author's Response:

Michael was embarassed so the closet was the best choice, lmao! 

Girl, ikr? I tie-dye my own when I have time. Just buy some cheap long songs lol. I try my best. I wasn't born nowhere near the 70s. Shoot, I was two years shy of being born in the 2000's so I try to do enough research to keep up with the times, outfits, lingo, etc. It's hard though because sometimes the internet isn't specific enough and I have to go out on a limb and hope I don't muck it up. 

Michael is shy and modest and believes Renee doesn't reciprocate his feelings when clearly she does, but he can't see it. Hopefully he will see it soon and they can come to some sort of mutual standing. I'm weak! She like eat the cake Michael, eat the cake. 

Thanks for the support and I hope you got your cake.. maybe!

Reviewer: NeelzLovesMJ Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: Apr 23, 2018 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 9

Ha yes they'll grow, Renee - that's what pregnancy does to the female body. I see you've done your research on the Jackson fam! Renee's dong everything right, like surrounding herself with people who are bascially experiencing the same things as her, given how alone she's been with this whole thing...she needs support.

You mean JERMAINE is sour since leaving Motown. I have reciepts of Jermaine's saltiness ok, e.g. 'Word to the Badd'. LOL. Anyway, I hope Michael's career doesn't interfere with his relationship with Renee. We all know that Michael going solo changed the mf game what with the success of OTW and Thriller. This chapter was great, I loved the dynamics. The ending was especially lovely...the wishes they made; it really proves their innocence at their young age, yet it's almost ironic in a wonderful way since she's going to be a mother. Not telling what their wishes were was a good idea *DJ Khaled 'you smart'*, because I hope that they wished for a future with each-other in it, where everything is all good and they're happily raising lil lime. But do wishes always come true?

Also, nothing you write is 'boring'! This story is lit, and the pacing and progression doesnt feel too rushed nor too slowed. Now i really know Michael and Renee as characters, and I care about them and what happens to them. Keep 'em coming, Brandy!!



Author's Response:

Awww, thank you so much for your support Neelz! And I try to do my best when it comes to the research if I'm trying to be timeline correct lol. Girl lets not even talk about "Word to the Badd" shit was terrible. He tried it. I think Michael was a little upset when Jermaine left but he moved passed it (at least in my eyes). The wishes will definitely be revealed a little later in the story. 

Thanks so much for your review and reading. It means a lot! 

Summary:

 



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In the Summer of '97, Eva leaves India to move to London where she will be staying with her troublesome twin cousins, Aadesh and Adil, as well as her stern Grandma Riya. 
She meets Michael, an aspiring photographer, and they form a close bond. 
There's only one problem. 
Eva is to have an arranged marriage in one year. Her husband-to-be has a dark, cruel side which only Eva knows. 
Can Michael save her from the marriage? Will Eva's secrets from life in India catch up with her?

 

Disclaimer: I own characters and their backgrounds used in this story. Everything else belongs to their rightful owners.


Categories: Drama, Family, Hurt/Comfort, Humor, Romance, Suspense
Characters: Michael, Original Girl
General Warnings: None
Trigger Warnings: Emotional Abuse, Racism
Series: None
Chapters: 28 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 76487 Read Count: 45898
[Report This] Published: Sep 24, 2017 Updated: Jan 05, 2019
Reviewer: darkmc912 Signed
Date: Oct 01, 2017 Title: Chapter 2: II

BRO wtf this was so short. Seems like Eva's got her whole daily routine in place by her high-key racist grandmother :/ SO peak like the whole arranged marriage thing is really weighing down on her conscience and it must be terrifying af..! Haha but I'm just anticipating seeing her and Michael meet for the first time. Keep it up sis! <3



Author's Response:

I am SORRY this was short for you little one lmao. I will make the chapters longer in the upcoming chapters. have some mercy on me geez lol. yes I feel for poor Eva she has to live with her and have the marriage at the bank of her mind who knows something might happen lol. but we shall read when the two cuties will meet it will be legendary haha. thanks onion <3 

Reviewer: NeelzLovesMJ Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: Jun 28, 2018 Title: Chapter 18: XVIII

Yikes Michael didn’t take the truth so well. He just needs time and to give Eva a chance to explain. He must be sooo confused and sad I feel so bad for mike😭. He clearly doesn’t understand why Eva had to keep it a secret and I don’t think he gets just how big this thing is... At least Aunt Jay could bring some happiness with her good news! And damn that cliffhanger I wonder if Eva will be able to tell her side of the story, if he’ll listen. Bc rn, Michael only knows ones side - Vik’s. 



Author's Response:

I agree the magnitude of what is going down has not dawned him yet that she did this for a reason and yay to aunt jay at least in the mist of drama a flicker of happiness appeared lol. we shall what goes down in the next chapter onion! mwhahahaha -cough- thanks as always <3

Reviewer: darkmc912 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: Oct 13, 2017 Title: Chapter 4: IV

That is one hectic af household! People running everywhere half-naked. Lol. Aw she dressed up and we know why haha. I wanna meet Aadesh's Spanish gf oooh seems like forbidden relationships are a recurring theme here. TBH - glad Michael forgave her and let her model but he seemed desperate to get the project done. Still he was being fussy af like the perfectionist he was lolll poor Eva she's never done that before give her a break Mike - she really should get a pager so she can contact him! GOOD POINT. And love how they got over the awkwardness and she lost track of time with Michael and he let her keep their first memoriam together. 

Wonder what Riya's reaction will be..... Great chapter tomato. <3



Author's Response:

lmao cause the twins don't care for privacy smh. of course she has a reason to dress up and don't worry we shall meet the young lady soon lol. michael is too forgiving but it's good at the same time but maybe he just wanted to get it done between the deadline, everything has to be done right tsk. he does need to find a way to get in contact with her but we shall how that goes. thanks onion <33

Reviewer: NeelzLovesMJ Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: Dec 08, 2017 Title: Chapter 11: XI

I wanted drama. I got drama. Well Marcus has like -0 chill so. YES he was out of line lmao. The family dynamics were fun though but I wish Michael and Marcus didn’t need to bring their beef into the entire cookout but thankfully Roy broke it up🙄. Looks like Michael and Janet are going to need to fight for Eva’s attention! To me, it’s like she’s already family but she just doesn’t know t yet. I can tell they LOVE her and she def enjoyed trying out those foods. Again I’m enjoying seeing the clash of cultures. Hopefully Mike is alright! Wonderful tomato 🍅



Author's Response:

You asked and you received the drama you wanted. Ikr they shouldn't have but what can you do with those two smh and yes thankfully Roy came in and shut it down. Yas she will have two of them and she won't know how to handle it lool. I agree she doesn't know it but she will realise in due time. The jackson clan are a welcoming bunch minus idiots like Marcus smh. She sure did and gosh I hope he's OK too. Thanks onion! 

Reviewer: darkmc912 Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: Oct 08, 2017 Title: Chapter 3: III

Unique way in which they met. Luckily she caught his camera or he would’ve thrown her into the water along with it lmao. When Eva mistook Michael for being Indian I suppose she thought he was of Tamil descent? Bc idk Indians aren’t “dark” persé (I know I ain’t) but aw it shows that she’s desperately looking for someone who she can identify with since she just moved to the UK. Love Jay and Roy they’re couple goals. Can’t wait for the photo-shoot!



Author's Response:

michael wouldn't be that mean to throw her in the water if she hadn't caught his camera smh lmao. yes something like that and yes she is slightly desperate to find someone she can talk to. Yass to mike's uncle and aunt they are sweet in their own way lol. it's coming soon <3

Reviewer: NeelzLovesMJ Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: Jul 09, 2018 Title: Chapter 19: XIX

I’m really happy Michael forgave Eva. His time to be upset was finished! Since everyone’s secrets are out, I feel like this is a turning point in the story; the chapter of revelations and I love that Michael and Eva got flashbacks. For Eva’s it’s honestly very real in the sense that arranged marriages do typically tend to happen between two people who know each-other somehow; either from childhood or family connections. And Michael’s was really profound. The way you described the car accident was really great I could picture the action in my head. 

Since everyone’s on good terms again, please tell me they’re not going to let this marriage go ahead. Vik is evil. They gotta come up with something! Can’t wait to see what happens next. Lovely as always tomato <3



Author's Response:

 

it is good to see that mike went against his heart and allowed Eva the situation but something has to get this chain of change to happen who knows what could happen! I am glad you liked how I described the car accident I found that to be the hardest to write about but now it gave michael a chance to grief and let that pain stay in the past!. who knows might happen onion! thanks as always <3 

Reviewer: NeelzLovesMJ Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: Apr 07, 2018 Title: Chapter 16: XVI

Wow Paul must be working magic or something the way he can flirt with just about any female. Like that’s talent, fam😂. He may be aware of the power he has but I’m glad he will keep his eyes on the gorgeous Georgie bc I SHIP IT. Looks like they had a great time at the farm with all of the horses! I can totally relate what with the childhood nostalgia/memories aspect of it because me and my siblings would regularly go visit our aunt on Sundays and whenever we do this in the present day it DOES still feel nostalgic to me, revisiting places where we grew up. Anyway I kinda missed Eva in this chapter but she made an appearance towards the end so i’ll let you off, Lorry👀. Haha OMG AADESH IS A TOTAL FANGIRL. Love it. And omg typical for them troublemakers to be fighting all the damn time lmao. You can’t leave them alone for more than two secs legit. But you know how aadesh has his hopes up about the prospect of a relationship between Michael and Eva? Yeah he might not want to get ahead of himself because it seems as if Rita is working hard to make sure this wedding will go ahead ☹️ Fr she’s planning Eva’s future for her which sucks, but that’s the reality of arranged marriages. Great chapter tomato!



Author's Response:

just one of his great talents that he is slowly pushing away for his girl lmao. Mike and Paul had fun indeed going back to their memories and being able to relive em as adults and I agree its great to go and back feel that nostagalia feeling again. the troublemakers are always fighting sadly enough smh and yikes Daadi is planning behind the shadows poor Eva. hopefully something will happen to intervene to stop the wedding from happening! time will only tell! thanks onion! <3

Reviewer: NeelzLovesMJ Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: Nov 10, 2017 Title: Chapter 8: VIII

Seems like Eva was completely out of her element for this one. That was one interesting party mao never heard of teenagers use HEROIN. Lmao. Wonder where they got it from. At least Michael was there so she would have some company bc it’s not like she knew anyone there but she’s gotta learn to adapt I suppose. Their dance was sweet, loved Michael’s shyness when he asked if he could drop her home, and tbh I’m just glad they all made it home in one piece. Great chapter tomato <3



Author's Response:

Oh hush lol. Teens can find what they want and bring it to the party! It's a party man chill ha.of course she has to adapt and learn she doesn't have to have it so it's fine. They are precious in their own way. At least the car didn't break down lol. Thanks onion 😂