SURPRISEEEEEE!!! 🎉 It’s none other than your PPIC, your Brian, making a brief return especially for your chapter. I know we talked briefly today about when I’ll be back with the updates, and it’s still kinda uncertain when that will be but you’re my friend and I know you’ve been waiting for my feedback for a very long time. Ofc I wanted to dedicate time to this given the length, but you know what - I wanna read it. Plus my exams are over, and the review MAY fall short but at least I’m here! Honestly you’ve been working on this since like September fam. It’s ABOUT TIME LOL. I feel my shing zooping already!

Ooh so straight away something I noticed is that you used the present-tense type of narrative. I’m not usually a fan of this narrative style, I find it hard to keep up with but for this instance - it worked  it worked well, because the pacing legit makes ME feel HER tension. YAS OFF TO AN AMAZING START!! 👏🏽 Oh myyyy GOURD Michael just came out of nowhere and pinned her😭the next 6000 words is going to be A TRIP. lol I also need to try not to comment on EVERY LITTLE THING. 

No but I can’t resist omg like I even love the way he pronounced her name for the first time, with that hesitation. Reminds me that they’re strangers. Makes this 100x hotter. 

“REALLY REALLY BAD” OH YOU DID NOT JUST HAVE HIM DO THAT WHAT’S NEXT, is he going to start advocating peace and telling her they need to save the children while they’re in the middle of the nasty like “we have to heal the world” or 

Prince’s entrance was epic. He talks soooo dirty omfg😂. WHY IS MICHAEL WHINING LMAO I LOVE HOW ACCURATE THIS IS. 

Lol...nipple - the one word I refuse to use during my own smut scenes. Kudos to you for using it brazenly, Rashida.

omg there’s that scene we discussed where they make her watch and wait!!! It def lived up to everything you made it out to be! Loved that entire scene. Side note: I’m honestly surprised by the amount of dialogue in this but you know what it fits and adds to the smuttinesssss. Keep it going fam. Royal Badness and Thriller Boy. Why no GLITTERSOX HAHA  OK no but idk why TF you were asking ME for advice and shit when it comes to descriptions, BC YOURS ARE AMAZING, FAM!!! 👏🏽 I mean you’re really not holding back 😂 which is great for this type of writing. GOD U USED MIKEZILLA. Why. That term needs to die from this fan base BRO U SHOULD HAVE just gone with ‘Ronald’. 

Slippery monster 

but “slick as silk” is good 👀. Feel like severine’s disbelief that these two music legends actually hate each-other mirrors your own beliefs 😂 that Pricheal. Really. Existed. Well no she shouldn’t complain 🙄 I get she’s impatient bc she hasn’t had her share of the relaxing atmosphere salty snack as of yet, but this scenario ain’t ever gonna happen again! She’s the only person from earth and from Jupiter who will prob ever witness that so SHE CAN WAIT. Lmao

ooooo released with a pop. YES. Your use of onomatopoeia is good - something I could work on. Just adds another element to the whole senses thing, makes it so much better 👍🏽. Seriously she’s getting bored?! OMG I remember you asked me if you should do the lyric interpretation and FAM CAN I JUST SAY, I am soooo glad you did it, it fits pretty well! Def increases the tension of that entire scene and it’s unique I honestly don’t think I’ve ever read anything like that happen before - which is a compliment trust me. Whoa I’m like legit afraid to write instances of self-pleasuring but damn. I’m actually jealous by how well you NAILED THAT in regards to Severine. Idk why but I’m not laughing at the  the cookie jar reference she made. IT WOKRED LOL. But love how she was like nah fuck you guys I want to GO TO JUPITER TOO AND U CAN HELP ME COME BACK TO EARTH MINUS THE FROWNING AND CROSSED ARMS (couldn’t resist 😂).

Bud. Come on. BUD. AS IN HEY BUD, WANNA HANG OUT? I’m off to the golf club, join us, bud! At least her nips aren’t pregnips. Lmao so I was just enjoying reading for a few paragraphs and then Michael drops that she tastes like pineapples 🍍😂😂. I CANNT BELIEVE AN ACCIDENTAL JOKE/SUGGESTION we were talking about actually snuck it’s way into this story, and at first I was like ‘she won’t really add this’, but then the pina colada happened with the coconut thing and omg😂. I CAN’T EVEN. This is the scene I’ve been looking forward to in particular, and I loved the little element of humour to it. It seemed just getting more and more explicitly as the zooping action happens, and I ain’t even complaining fam. The actual sex scene was incredible. Simply. HAHA he threatened to pull out 😂 classsic. Def one of my fav moments of this chapter. 

Now that I think about it, prince and Michael were totally merciless to poor severing, even when they got right down to it finally, they still had so much control over her and they were damn cruel to say the least!!!!! But WOW as long as this was, not a single part of it was boring at all. You really faced a challenge here in regards to keeping it interesting whatvwith the length, and you def did an amazing job with that. Pina coladas. Case and point. Haha but I also know you were really lost on the entire tbreesome scenario overall. WHY? YOU ACED THIS. You did FINE. More than fine! You were legit apprehensive for no reason fam, you didn’t need my input. Ya got this on your own. Like damn she screamed soooo much she lost her voice HAHA. 

I’m so happy you added that next morning scene. I did expect it to be longer, not just a paragraph? Like I was looking forward to reading Michael and prince waking up in shock at the fact that they’re cuddling while sleeping and severine catches this on camera very sneakily. But 🙄 this is already very lengthy and eventful, and I know you were so desperate to complete and upload it once and for all, so ima let you off Brian. Still, I also think you wrote it really well, and it ended on a very nice note! The one-shot as a whole feels pretty finished to me. There’s only so much like smut one can cough up and I feel like you have DONE MORE THAN ENOUGH 😂 this is enough to provide me with entertainment and I really did love reading this, finally!!! Wasn’t romantic at all, but didn’t expect it to be. It was raw, fun, hot and erotic and I didn’t even know you had this in you, man😂. 

OKAY SO hopefully you liked my review!!! My hands gone numb from typing it, so you better LOL. I don’t expect you to respond to every point I’ve made and there were so many more things I wanted to comment on but they’d just be my general thoughts -nothing toooo important, thought I did fill you in on Basc what were my fav moments and the way you wrote certain scenes. You’ve taken slash to a whole new level with this one-shot. In short, it was fucking brilliant. Would rate 20 stars if I could. Can’t give you a GIF so I hope the emojis are a good alternative for you 😂 THIS WAS EPIC CRISTINA/RASHIDA!!!! I FEEL ACCOMPLISHED now that I’ve read it! 

I WILL READ THIS ASAFP BIH YAS MY BURTTT still a bit shook omfg 

Hi! I saw your review on my story earlier and also realised you have a story too so I thought I’d give it a try. Well, I’m glad I did! I think this is an interesting beginning - love how they are inspired by each-other’s art. I’m here for this!

Phew I’m glad the event got off to a good start and I’ve been looking forward to it!! Tracee answered the questions like a bossss. I thought the kinds words from both Michael and Tracee were on point. A lot of those young girls had it hard, and even though Mike and T are going through shit, they at least have each-other. They can keep wishing and wishing for children but for now I really hope they come to realise just how good they got it compared to some of those young mothers. 

“He’s not gay, not all of them are gay” LOL you tell him, T.

I don’t know how I feel about them having a surrogate/donor. Both mentions (Michelle and Jenna) got me like .....I lowkey think Gail would be the better option since she’s Tracee’s sister like she’d do anything for her. Of course the cherry on the cake would be if they could conceive using their own cells if ya knowww what I mean. Either way they will end up with a child which is what we want FAM. Good chapter pea!

HA OMG Gail finally moved out!! I have mixed emotions about this because for a while I’ve been saying she needs her own place so that Mike and T have their place back, but in a way I’m lowkey sad she’s not gonna be there but hopefully she’ll visit lol! - as if she hasn’t spent enough time there already. Can’t wait to see how Gail adjusts to life AWAY from Michael and Tracee. I loved the part when they were talking about the different seasons that was cute af. And I think it’s really bold and brave of Tracee to go to the teen mom’s thingy considering how her circumstance has been when it comes to having children but also I’m really proud of her for choosing to go and i’m Positive she will be fine with Michael by her side. But he better go with her - hopefully his own charity project doesn’t end up clashing or making him too busy and unable to go with her  

The story’s very centred on Gail and Romeo atm. Just saying because I miss the Michael/Tracee action a bit! I understand they’re busy on other ventures. Anyway speaking of, I hope Gail hasn’t done something that she will regret later on...we shall see! 

Given how much Gail hates Romeo’s guts, I’m surprised she met him only a few days after finding out he’s back. Don't know much about this guy but I believe him. And damn they made up so fast lol....thought they’d at least be civil first before jumping to the dating stage but whatever makes Gail happy!