[Report This]Date: Oct 03, 2015 08:15 pm Title: The White Rabbit Vs The Light
30
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[Report This]Date: Oct 03, 2015 08:15 pm Title: The White Rabbit Vs The Light
Okay another ten
Im just
wow
Author's Response:
Another one *DJ Khalid voice!! Lmaoooo<333
[Report This]Date: Oct 03, 2015 08:14 pm Title: The White Rabbit Vs The Light
Holy shit
HOLY SHIT
HO-LY SHHHHIIIIIT
This omg
This was perfect in ways I can't explain. You're incredible. I love you I love you I love you I love you I love you
Hola! *cries in perfection* OMG
I gotta read this over again. This one is my favorite chapter. Damn! She betrayed him and broke his heart and now the daughter's the one saving his soul pretty much
I'm reading this over. I just can't believe it. This was so perfect. Can I give you a twenty in rating? or 50 omg
Author's Response:
PLOT TWIST!! You know I love you too bew!!! I appreciate every added rating. Hola Hola!! Lol <333
[Report This]Date: Oct 02, 2015 10:21 pm Title: The White Rabbit Vs The Light
Oh yeah!! I'm officially addicted 2 this story! I love it! Mj is a trip but I love him in this story!! Like always I'm a silent reader but I had 2 read and leave a review cuz I couldn't pass this story up. I love the imagery and the goose bumps I get when reading this story. I agree ur an incredible writer with a awesome imagination. U did that honey!! Wish i could write like this!! I love this story I'm officially addicted!! Ur not in my list of favs 4 nothing plz keep it up! Hope 2 hear from u soon!!
Author's Response:
Yaayyyy I'm glad you're hooked!! I love writing this story a lot!! Thank you so much for appreciating all the nuances of my writing. Stick around more to come and again I'm glad you live it!! <333
[Report This]Date: Oct 02, 2015 04:11 pm Title: The White Rabbit Vs The Light
That was beyond amazing. His finally caught that elusive whiny white rabbit. She did try to beg for her miserable pathetic life. But it didn't work. And I looooovvvveeedd The ironic twist that you used Tut. Michael hated Mena with a passion coz of wat she did. But he falls for Hola. Now that was brilliant. I mean that. Can't wait for more luv :)
Author's Response:
Yes he caught his elusive white rabbit finally. She was still a horrible person all the way to the end. Lying and begging was all she knew how to do. It was a major plot twist that Hola his love was Mena's and Dillinger's daughter all this time. It's almost a sneaky revenge in it self. You'll see their story soon!! Thank you so much for the live everytime! <333
Date: Oct 02, 2015 03:41 pm Title: The White Rabbit Vs The Light
Another excellent chapter! I was laughing my butt of when he was like, "I remember when it was wanton screams of 'yesssss Michael, yesssssssss'." LMAO! He can be too funny when he's getting revenge. I know he hoped taking her soul would have hopefully eased the pain but it didn't. He was still angry and heartbroken, which was why he claimed the whole experience to be "anticlimactic." Poor thing. Shamefully, I didn't catch on to the fact that it was Mena's daughter who's his savior until this chapter. Despite the fact you mentioned on several occasions that they both had green eyes. Smh, IDK how I overlooked that one important fact. But that is a great twist. Irony is a crazy mother f*&^@! isn't it? Lol. I'm in love with this story and looking forward to reading more.
In case you couldn't tell already, I think you are an incredible writer. I'm absolutely mesmerized by the excellent dialogue you've created for your characters. Nice work!
Author's Response:
Michael slipped into the shoes of death and they fit him perfectly. He got to be the man he wasn't in life because his death showed him a lot. He thought that claiming Mena's and Dillinger's soul would somehow fulfill him and make him whole again and he could move on from the pain that was still somehow lingering, but it didn't. And now the irony of him being captured so easily by his murder's daughter it will be intersting to see how it unfolds. From reading the reviews you were not alone in making the connection with Mena and Hola. Lol.
Thank you so much for the complement love. I appreciate it so much. I adore you're work as well as you know. <333
[Report This]Date: Oct 02, 2015 02:18 pm Title: The White Rabbit Vs The Light
OMG!!! This just got tremendously awesome!!! Even though eww not the spawn of that heartless bitch!! Hopefully she's nothing like her mother was.
Michael getting his revenge on Mena was hilarious, I love him as Death. Mena was so pathetic smdh..
Now I wonder how he's going to advance on Hola if she can't see him... Your description of his instant sprung state was so REAL I felt like I was right there in the room with them.
I need more!!!!!! <3
Nuclear bombs of creepy Internet love exploding all over
Author's Response:
Thank you love!!!! :) Lol. The spawn of satan. I can tell you that she's nothing like her mother and you will find out more in the next coming chapter. Michael is amazing as death right?!? It was like second nature cause he gave himself over to it fully. That's what he does with things and people he becomes passionate about. You will see that in the upcoming chapters. His nose was wide open as soon as he laid eyes on Hola.
San Andeas fault line seperating California from the mainland sized earthquake levels of creepy Internet love rushing at you!!!<333
[Report This]Date: Oct 01, 2015 09:20 am Title: Reaper
This has to be my favorite chapter so far. I have to admit that I was sort of cheering him on when he finally got to Dillinger. But my heart went out to him when he had to take his mother. But now I'm more than ready to see his "white rabbit" finally get hers! My favorite moment was at the end though because I just love to see how happy he is in his present life. I find it to be a very beautiful outcome. Can't wait to read more :)
Author's Response:
I enjoyed writing this one. It was good to see him finally get some kind of retribution for what was done to him. Reaping he found out wasn't always a hoot. Him having to collect his mother and not being able to be as emotional as he knew he should have been was so sad. His present life gives him joy. I just posed the next chapter so now you can see how this new "life" came about. <333
[Report This]Date: Sep 28, 2015 10:21 pm Title: Human
Reviewing late when I only have four-five more hours until I get up for school. I was gonna read earlier but I was so tired, lol. Still is.
Back to the story.....
Oooooohhhh, I liiikkke!!!! ;););)
But damn, why he gotta be dead than alive?!?! This Mena chick I know for a fact murdered him. I should murder her no good ass. What did he do so bad to deserve death??? Anyway, I love how you did the number poem thingy. Reminds me of Nightmare on Elm Street. Freddie's poem in a way. Had me singing it for a minute. Lol.
Overall it's great yet different. I like different and I'm glad this popped into ya head.
I'll be continuing tomorrow after school and dance practice. You definitely got my attention with this one now.
Author's Response:
I hope you can get into the story. It's short but I will be good. I hope. Yay. I liked that poem part too. It added to the tone of the story. Stick around!! <333
[Report This]Date: Sep 28, 2015 07:39 am Title: Death Becomes Me
Wow! Now things really got good. I already had a good feeling that Mena and Dillinger were already romantically involved.
Author's Response:
Yup. They both played Michael for a fool. So dirty. Retribution comes don't you worry. <333
[Report This]Date: Sep 28, 2015 07:11 am Title: Parable Of The Talent
Octavia Butler is amazing so I completely understand why you adore her work so much. She's very original. I'm going to search for this song. It sounds very interesting. Poor Michael. He truly is blinded by love, or should we say lust?
Author's Response:
Michael is caught up in it all. He loves her and he lists for her but he feels it's all mutual because he thinks she wants the same thing he wants. Little does he know. You'll see what the real was is in the next chapter.
Octavia Butler is dynamic. My fav book of her's is Kindred. Man such an awesome read. And yes. Look up that song. The Nina Simone version is the most soulful version IMO. So beautiful! <333
[Report This]Date: Sep 27, 2015 06:27 pm Title: Fools Goal
Oh wow! He has a family in his present life. I can't wait to see how things play out.
Author's Response:
Yup he has a little family in his present life. Watch how it all unfolds!!<333
[Report This]Date: Sep 27, 2015 05:56 pm Title: Human
Oh I think I'm really going to like this one a86;
Author's Response:
Hey Yayyy. I hope you enjoy it. It's a short ride but interesting!! <333
[Report This]Date: Sep 27, 2015 03:20 pm Title: Reaper
Oh my goodness, that was like reading a kind of divine retribution! It was so good! I hate that he was unable to take Mena unawares the same way that he could take Dillinger. Its not fair though that Mena got to live a happy full life ...
I love the absolute shit out of this story, I hope you know!
Now... *brandishing steel baseball bat* ... where's chapter 6!?
Author's Response:
*Walkes into this review with a suit made of double ply reinforced bubble wrap. Thick around the ankles. Lmaoooo. I'm so happy you love the story. I appreciate it to the fullest Me Lady!
It was the divine at of retributions with Dillinger. It will be more somber with Mena though. He has things to hash out with her plus a wrench gets thrown into the collection process. You'll see!! It's coming!! <333
[Report This]Date: Sep 27, 2015 08:46 am Title: Reaper
Wow, Michael's taken to this reaper job WAY better than I thought he was going to - especially without the sex.
LOL At first I was like, um why is Michael pleasaed to this pregnant woman is losing her man - morbid ASS, but then I found out it was Dillinger and I couldn't have been happier!! YES!! He got his revenge.
But then awww... he had to come for his mother. He handled that a lot better than I thought he would too.
I NEED MORE SOON!! Can't wait to find out what happens next!
Author's Response:
Lmaooo. His ass is morbid dancing and singing his ass off all happy like. He had fun with Dillinger. His mother was hard but he doesn't have a grasp of emotions as such anymore as reaper. He does miss the sex though but soul collecting is orgasmic for him. Addictive. One last revenge to handle!! <333