Penname: Fire-in-her-veins [Contact] Real name:
Member Since: Apr 12, 2015
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Obviously my screename speaks for itself. Im brutally honest so i dont sugarcoat shit and will always call it as I see it.


Stumbled onto this site, and found a community I adore and feel accepted in. As well as having found amazing friends. 


Tbh haven't done much creative writing since I was a kid where I'd makeup stories where women ruled and men were not needed lol. My very own Themoscriya universe. But I decided to give it another shot in the form of a what would I do or how would I change this approach. Also I love giving feedback and being brutally honest in my criticism. 


Besides writing, I'm binge concerts any form of live music well not any, I lovee, my music tastes is as diverse as my hobbies, from drawing, some painting, to activism to scuba diving:)


I have to say I discovered Michael all on my own, I wasn't at the age when he left where I could really appreciate and love his work, music and artistry so I have to say getting to know him through his music, the people who loved and knew him, from the man himself and through of course the fans, his biggest supporters and family gave me the best education about music, love, and myself I've had. I don't have a specific era I like best, would say I fell in love or lust with the Dangerous album first and went from there. Feel free to check out my story, I'll try to be more consistent with updates:) 


Gender: Female
Age: 21+
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Summary:

Maleayah Duncan is an average 20 year old girl living in Las Vegas. She's not a Michael Jackson fan, but what happens when her family moves into his former home, the Monte Cristo house he once lived in after his trial and even meets the icon himself?

Maleayah:

   Michael

 

 


Categories: Invincible: 2000-2003, This Is It: 2006-2009, Adult, Hurt/Comfort, Humor, Romance, Trigger Warning!
Characters: Michael
General Warnings: None
Trigger Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 1534 Read Count: 376
[Report This] Published: Aug 04, 2014 Updated: Aug 05, 2014
Reviewer: Fire-in-her-veins Signed
Date: Jul 21, 2015 Title: Chapter 3: Mom...?

YOU. HAVE. TO. UPDATE. THIS. Im so in love with it!😍😍

Innocent by butterflies97 Rated: T starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 4]
Summary:

Meet Jada Williams...it was on the night of the annual NAACP Image Awards when the actress first met him, and since then it was her mission to become a permanent figure in his life. She wanted to become his closest friend, a wife to him, his lover but how can she when he's already with someone....


Categories: Hurt/Comfort
Characters: Original Girl
General Warnings: None
Trigger Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 6232 Read Count: 8000
[Report This] Published: Aug 06, 2014 Updated: May 05, 2015
Reviewer: Fire-in-her-veins Signed
Date: May 06, 2015 Title: Chapter 1: Meeting Him For The First Time

That was heartbreaking seeing him break down like that! I think you captured that quite accurately! It's awful to think he had to go through this alone except for Lisa who called him up & stayed on the phone for hours & even got her lawyers to help with his case. You wonder if it ever got that bad where he considered suicide as a way out. Awesome job at getting at how he really would have felt and acted upon hearing horrible news reports like that and having to deal with all of it behind closed doors. 



Author's Response:

I know :( That was actually one of the major challenges I had while writing this....I really wanted to try to capture Michael's essence and all of the emotions he might've had going through him during this time. I'm glad it enjoying it so far!!! :)

Summary:

Delia Easton was just your average senior in high school when she meets the new kid. All the other students thought he was strange but she was determined to get to know the REAL him, even if he ignored and acted like a complete ass to her....


Categories: Hurt/Comfort
Characters: Original Girl
General Warnings: None
Trigger Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 14 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 15407 Read Count: 22684
[Report This] Published: Aug 18, 2014 Updated: Jan 31, 2015
Reviewer: Fire-in-her-veins Signed
Date: May 06, 2015 Title: Chapter 1: New Kid

The feels are real!! You must update this its soo good!! 

Summary:

You'd think working as an intern for Michael Jackson's Bad album would have its perks right?......WRONG! Here's my story of what happened that interesting winter of 1987......


Categories: Humor
Characters: Original Girl
General Warnings: None
Trigger Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 27 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 50567 Read Count: 179611
[Report This] Published: Sep 13, 2014 Updated: Dec 27, 2015
Reviewer: Fire-in-her-veins Signed
Date: Oct 17, 2015 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22

WTF ughh he shouldve fucking won thats horrible! It was stolen from him! It honestly shouldve been and was better than thriller. Those judges need to be blackmailed, eaten by sharks and replaced. Him crying. No. Just no. Need to go kick some major ass. 

Reviewer: Fire-in-her-veins Signed
Date: Jun 22, 2015 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5

He is so kissing her ass to get her to record with him. I'm not gonna believe the apology until I see it. Yep he got his ass whooped big time unless he just made that up to get her to believe him and record the song with him. Btw awesome song choice. I love that he's not a vegetarian, that he's the polar opposite of how he's portrayed in the media as being this cute, innocent blushing sexy guy who in reality lovvves his meat and is a complete arrogant ass. XD god he's like this is my studio no dude ur head is going to explode one of these days with all that ego. Btw have you seen the Bad 25 documentary? One of the people who we're interviewed mentioned that Michael had that talent to bring so much emotion and raw honesty to a song. Even thought of as singing one of Smokey Robinson's songs better than him because of how personal he made it sound. Anyway I'm loving this! I wish she wasn't so nervous and intimidated by him. I'm glad she's finally making sure he knows her name. And I'm not buying the turning over a new leaf thing yet. I think he's much too tempted to be an ass & a BAD one too 



Author's Response:

I did see the Bad 25 documentary and I LOVED it lol I actually remember the part you mentioned too! I honestly think that's why he'd rarely cover songs by other artists.....he knew how to make the song HIS and that can be a good and bad thing because people will forget about the original artist's song and give tons of props to the mj version instead lol Anyway, I agree with you. Michael's trying a little bit too hard with being nice to her, especially now that's she's showing some unpolished talent.....he's giving off the vibe that he might have a few ulter motives and still wants to be a rude jerk to her. Hopefully Hazel will learn not to be intimidated by him and put him in his place AGAIN lol Thanks for pointing out the vegetarian part btw! Even though it's a little detail, it shows how Michael is NOTHING like how he's portrayed in public, which is what I wanted ;D For all these years he's been saying that he was one then when Hazel asks him about it, he's like "Wow you actually believed that ish?!" Glad you're enjoying it so far!!

Reviewer: Fire-in-her-veins Signed
Date: Jun 20, 2015 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

Oh wow now he's only interested in her because she freaking talented and for an 8 time Grammy award winning singer/songwriter he couldn't come up with a better apology? Not that I'm surprised. Love where you're going with this! Then he's like she'll look better without glasses like wtf. She doesn't need to change her appearance for him. Yep I ranted. 



Author's Response:

Lol it's hard, I'm trying to write him as a REAL ass to her, I def agree with you! he's only now interested in her because of her talent which is a shame smh His apology was pretty lame and sort of forced too lol

Reviewer: Fire-in-her-veins Signed
Date: Oct 17, 2015 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21

Wtf i cant believe no one did anything for him on his bday! That was soo adorable and fucking nice what Hazel did for him! Wow you really made him human i feel like a lot of people, fans etc dont realize is that hes not a god hes really not much different from us, he has insecurities, bad days, makes stupid mistakes, pride gets in the way, he breaks down every once in a while and to quote him he bleeds like anyone else meaning he gets hurt too. We just dont see that because him and other celebs put on a really good front in front of the cameras and the world. I like that you made him human, he wasnt completely egostistic despite his immense talent. He still got scared and anxious over how his work might be perceived, even though he knew it was flawless. So thank you for really showinh Michael and not the king of pop. 



Author's Response:

Awwww your welcome!!!! That's actually one of the joys I'm having with writing this story :) I really just wanna portray him or at least try to portray him as a normal everyday guy which can sometimes be a bit difficult since I never met him lol I just kinda have to predict with how I want him to act or how I think he might've acted in certain situations. I agree, because Michael was such a HUGE worldwide superstar (still is lol) I can see how it's hard for some people to view as simply human at the end of the day and tend to put him on a high pedestal.They tend to see Michael Jackson, the king of pop instead of just Michael, the human being....man that's gotta be rough having to deal with that all the time :/ Glad that you're enjoying this!!! <333

Reviewer: Fire-in-her-veins Signed
Date: Jun 18, 2015 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

Nope he seems impressed. I like that he doesn't act like how he portrays himself in the public eye. He's arrogant, entitled and takes everything for granted. He relies on his talent to get him through like and never has had to work hard to achieve something. I mean he was born with that talent he never had to train to get it. That's gone to his head. She's really emotional and sensitive but I get that nickname has a bad connotation for her. He's just being an ass the vomiting on her though that was rude even cruel. He just can't stand not being the center of attention. I feel like she shouldn't be so afraid of him I do like that she ripped his head off that was badass.  



Author's Response:

I agree, Michael seems to think the whole world revolves around him.....it's like um NO dude it certainly doesn't lol You're definitely right about the 'big bird' nickname and how Hazel has a bad connection with it :( I'm glad she finally stood up for herself too!! She gave him a piece of her mind lol

Reviewer: Fire-in-her-veins Signed
Date: Jun 25, 2015 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7

I love the song I'm so blue, cool backstory for that one! He should've put it on the album in the first place. He's hot when he gets mad scratch that jealous. Hell if I was her I would've started laughing when he punched Wesley. They should leave that in the short film. Wow he was right about Wesley, and here I thought he was just being controlling and nosy by telling her who she can or cannot go out with. Random question, how tall is Hazel? Is she taller than Michael? He's officially winning brownie points with me, he's so cute when he's being comforting. Yeah I love this wouldn't change anything. I love his point of view! He seriously needs to dump Tatiana pronto. Ugh this day is the worst ever can't believe it's been 6 years, feels like it was yesterday. Please update this soon! And that Crazy Autumn I love that one too!



Author's Response:

I'm so blue has always been one of my fav tracks even though it leaves me feeling blue no pun intended lol I still remember the first time I heard that song I IMMEDIATELY bursted into tears it was not a pretty sight smh. But yeah, I somehow wanna try to incorporate not only the actual songs that were on the  bad album but a few ones that didn't make the final cut as well. It was sweet of Michael to try to warn Hazel about Wesley's not so good Intentions. He knew something wasn't right when she walked back in the studio that night....Hazel is actually taller than Mike not like SUPER tall but only by a couple inches lol There's actually a reason why he's still with Tatiana's cheatin ass....you'll find out in the next chap for sure!!! And awie I know:( it's been a pretty emotional day.....certain songs of his I couldn't listen to because I knew I'd loose it. My niece (she's 6) told me not to cry because Michael's in a better place....she's too adorable lol I'll try to update on the Autumn of 2001 story soon! I'm sort of having a lil writers block with exactly how I wanna write it.....I'll come up with something eventually though lol

Reviewer: Fire-in-her-veins Signed
Date: Jul 08, 2015 Title: Chapter 1: You're A Jerk, I know.....

I think I'm going to go see her. She's coming to where I live. I never loved R&B but some of her stuff is pretty good. Which songs of hers do you like the best? Hmm as much as I LOVE dangerous performed live, Autumn has to see Billie Jean just like how it was performed in 1992 in Bucharest. I mean that's what he's most famous for partly and it's a classic. Especially since she's never seen the moonwalk. Ya she will be mind blown. With the autumn story just go with your gut don't think too hard about it. 



Author's Response:

Gurrrrl, I know it's a couple days late that I'm finally responding to ur comment but it's official!!! Janet will be coming to my city in Feb an  I just got my tickets!!! I'm so freaking excited since this will be my first ever concert! My mom's lucky because when she was my age she saw Michael perform during the dangerous you're and now she's gonna get to see his sister! Honestly, I don't have a fav song of hers (I love em all) but my all time fav album would probably be velvet rope (that was the first album I bought and hooked me as a fan) and all for you. Growing up though, I never really listened to her but once I became a teenager I remember walking into a music store (the same one that I would later start working at lol) and I remember seeing the album cover for velvet rope (it's Janet looking down with reddish/orange curls in a black shirt) and I just remember the pic of her really intrigued me. When I bought the album and played it later in my room that night I was shocked to discover it was Janet Jackson. I was like daaaaamn this is Michael's sister?! No way....her music's pretty good! Lol a lot of her music is sexual but I don't mind it ;) if anything, I admire the fact that she isn't afraid to express herself in that way, like the guys are allowed to do it so why can't the female artists do it too? But the wah she sings about it is classy you know? Not nasty (no pun intended) lol could u imagine if Michael sang about some of the stuff she does? The fans would go WILD!!!

Reviewer: Fire-in-her-veins Signed
Date: Aug 11, 2015 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15

Ugh why are they picking on Hazel? From experience unless you're in a small school environment then that won't happen in college. The stupid high school mean girl shit. First off she should be proud of herself she wrote Man in the Mirror one of the most famous best selling singles ever AND the sexiest man in the world is wrapped around her finger. Remind me again why she's letting those losers get to her? Yea eyeliner is a bitch to figure out once you get the hang of it its pretty easy. Contouring on the other hand just no. I love that hes so nervous and giddy for their date its adorable:) I bet he would get embarassed listening to himself on the radio dont see why hes amazeballs. And aww their song came on😍 i so bet he drives around & listens to his own music i just know it. He fangirls over her calling him baby in her sleep how cute is he. Love the beach surprise he really does pay attention to her. Love that he still builds sandcastles. Its cool he goes shirtless in front of her not that shed judge him for having vitiligo or anything. I think she didnt take the locket because she thinks he wants something in return or just expect more. Or maybe its just a really nice gift and she should try to go with the flow either way they have to decide what they are to each other. Seems like theyre rushing i mean this is a first date so. And hes only recently admitted he likes her. Hasnt explained the previous dick behavior. I hope hes not immature enough to lash out at her for not accepting it and for her wanting to take this slow



Author's Response:

I agree! Hazel shouldn't let those bullies get to her! She just has some really poor self esteem :( And I also agree with what you said about why she didn't take the locket from him

Reviewer: Fire-in-her-veins Signed
Date: Dec 28, 2015 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27

U SHUD B SORRY. Leaving me hanging like that. Lovve love love this!!! U kno victoria beckham had a similar reaction when she saw david sitting on her bed naked, she was like DAMN gurl u did good;) she finally saw neverland shes sooo lucky! He is soo damn good at distracting her the thunderstorm 😏 Oh im sure she was terrified she just wanted to go snuggle with the sexiest man alive. Cant say I blame her. Whys he asking her to promise that she wont leave? He cant be that insecure about the relationship? Of course he has to ask at the worst 😉 possible time when she doesn't feel like saying anything but yessss. Seriously love this thanks for updating!!



Author's Response:

Aww your welcome! I promise I'll try to update more often! Life's just been pretty hectic for me now haha glad you enjoyed it though! <333

Reviewer: Fire-in-her-veins Signed
Date: Aug 22, 2015 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

He gets panic attacks?? He needs to realize he was being a dick to her and stop this passive aggressive crap. If you want something/someone you fight for it. The whole itll happen if its meant to be is just bullshit. Thats horrible what he said to Tatiana i know he didnt mean it after all he wrote im so blue about her cheating on him. Good for Hazel for getting out and partying with her sister and Kendrick. K if Michael wants Hazel to listen to him he has to get her to not wait around for the opportunity to present itself. I dont think him knowing details like what her fav foods are or that she has always wanted to go back to a beach isnt stalkerish what would be stalkerish is if he knew what time of the month her period was judging by the tampobs in her trash that hed been going through. That would be just downright creepy. Saw a movie where that happened, called Kiss the Girls. It was an actual stalker and kidnapper who did that to his potential victims.  shes standing up for herself! Shes right on all points hes not used to having to communicate meaning not just get what he wants when he wants it. And making compromises too. Love that Ken doll is so understanding like a normal person should be. Haha I am right good 2 kno u agree XD The king of pop needs to get his head out of his ass and get a reality check if he wants this relationship to work. Awwww all Haze cute nickname btw was thinking of was MJ's lips when she was making out with Ken doll not sorry i call  him hes actually a decent dude who deserves a better nickname but whatevs



Author's Response:

Lol I actually do remember reading somewhere that Michael would suffer from panic attacks :/ I just thought I would add that to his character in this story because of how he doesn't really like being in the spotlight (other than on stage) and it sorta freaks him out to see how much people love and are crazy about him. He doesn't seem to understand why lol I actually wanna see that movie u mentioned! It sounds interesting. I don't mind u callin him Ken doll btw rofl. It's super sweet how Kendrick is so understanding and cool about the whole situation. I think he always had a feeling that Hazel was into someone else but it's a good thing he wasn't mad about her leading him on like that. That's just wrong of her to think of Michael's lips while she was kissing Kendrick smh plus she accidentally called him 'michael' too? Oh boy lol anyway, Kendrick's gonna become a really good friend to her :) as for Michael and Tatiana, yeah what he said to her was a little harsh and somewhat true but I think it's just cuz he now realized that Hazel is the girl he truly wants to be with but he's gonna have to win her back and like you said, get his head outta his ass and a HUGE reality check :)

Reviewer: Fire-in-her-veins Signed
Date: Aug 20, 2015 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 16

I love that he knows her favorite foods. Thats just freaking adorable. They shouldve talked about the necklace. I mean they just went on 1 date, its a little too soon for that. He shouldve taken it slow but i get it, he is probably really happy for the first time, in a long time and wants to shower her with gifts. The necklace isnt for Tati he's just lashing out. Love that hes writing songs about her he should talk to her instead of shutting her out and assuming the worst i assume something awful happened with his previous relationships before Tatiana? Then he goes off and acts like a dick again. I dont blame her for quitting. Kendricks good for her not as a love interest still waiting for his MAJESTY to get his head out of his ass, but as a friend. He just calls up and assumes shes at his beck and call. And he can treat her how he wants cuz hes michael jackson like no dude get a reality check and apply ice to that burn XD im so bad 😎 lovve that her sis came into town to see her she could use a good support system. And really stupid bird? Thats the best hes got. Btw for some reason im thinking hazel looks like olivia pope from scandal but younger. Idk why. Hope she has fun at the club she needs it! And mike needs to man up and get her back and give her the credit to man in the mirror



Author's Response:

Hey! Yeah, I don't wanna make Michael seem you know, a lil stalkerish lol because he notices all the little details about Hazel and what she likes/doesn't like. He definitely is paying attention to her even if he doesn't want to admit it. They really should've talked about the necklace but as soon as Michael found out she didn't want it, he immediately went back to being an ass to Her cuz he didn't get his way. You'll definitely find out in the next couple chaps why Michael acts so harsh towards women. He's had some pretty rough relationships in the past, especially with Tatiana. Lol I LOVE what you said about Kendrick and his MAJESTY DOES NEED TO GET HIS HEAD WAAAAAY OUT FROM HIS ASS ASAP rofl I Think its adorable that Aiko came to surprise her on her bday too!Hazel hadn't seen her in 4 years and really could use her support. To be honest, I never really had in my mind exactly what Hazel was gonna look like (I always imagined she either looked like Aaliyah or Taytiana Ali) but I loove the Olivia Pope look too! That's really good. Let's just say Hazel will have......an 'interesting' time at club midnight lol And Michael really needs to give her credit for co writing the song. 

Reviewer: Fire-in-her-veins Signed
Date: Jul 16, 2015 Title: Chapter 1: You're A Jerk, I know.....

What a dick move. Cant say i wasnt expecting that. Shes not used to rich dudes in that industry who can afford to screw with women etc, are total playboys. Shes really sensitive but she should know that most of his life was in front of a camera and hes used to putting on an act. Hes so immature god. He just knows how he affects women. Loved their creative process together, loved that you chose man in the mirror, i think you captured perfectly how he came up with the song and what its message is. Loving this thanks for updating! 



Author's Response:

Amen! I agree 100% pretty soon Hazel is gonna be able to break through the invisible wall Michael has put up all these years......she's gonna have him sprung honey ;) lol