Penname: Redone [Contact] Real name:
Member Since: Nov 08, 2013
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MJ Fan ~ Music Lover ~ Constant Reader


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Beta-reader: Yes
Gender: Female
Age: 21+
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Reviews by Redone
Summary:

Michael presents an interesting business proposal to Christina and she accepts. Now they are bound by contract for a long time. Will they make it?


Categories: Adult, Hurt/Comfort, Romance
Characters: Michael
General Warnings: None
Trigger Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 29 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 64720 Read Count: 10596
[Report This] Published: Mar 22, 2011 Updated: May 03, 2016
Reviewer: Redone Signed
Date: May 03, 2016 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27

Wait - it jumped from her escaping neverland to a year of separation?! I'm confused. It was too much too quick

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Date: May 03, 2016 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25

I was just thinking of this story the other day! Sorry for disappearing since I last reviewed. Life = cluster.

Reviewer: Redone Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: May 03, 2016 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26

She is such an idiot to keep meeting Jared. I can't fault Michael for being so resentful and angry.

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Date: Aug 15, 2015 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19

Girl, I had been following this. So happy to see you back into writing!



Author's Response:

Thanks! I had written 9 more chapters, but totally forgot about posting on this site! I'll be posting one new chapter a day. Hopefully by then I'll have another finished too!

Summary:

Flo

Flo and Michael both share the same problem. Thanksgiving is coming up and their folks are expecting them to bring a date home. They make a deal that they'll pretend to be in love for thanksgiving break. But in reality they hate each other. What will happens when the act starts to become reality for Flo?


Categories: Bad: 1986-1990, Hurt/Comfort, Humor, Romance
Characters: Michael
General Warnings: None
Trigger Warnings: None
Series: Jazer's Library
Chapters: 74 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 123487 Read Count: 70230
[Report This] Published: Jun 01, 2011 Updated: Dec 17, 2012
Reviewer: Redone Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: Apr 06, 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Just started reading. I'd wanted to read more of your stuff, but generally don't like AU. 9 chapters in and I'm hooked. You now officially have 3 stories I'm going to be bugging  you to update.

thank you

 & I apologize in advance.



Author's Response: Well first off hola! Lol thank you for giving my stories a chance and for giving genuine criticism it's always appreciated.

Reviewer: Redone Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: Apr 07, 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Okay, you asked for a review of the story, so hopefully this lives up to your expectations:

Characters: I like the creative liberties you took with Michael's history. I think the abuse fit in and the development of the turmoil within the family felt natural. I also like how you kept the J5 in there despite it being a more AU story.  And his character? I could see him like that IRL. I loved Flo's nerdiness. Casey was pregnancy at a whole new level of hormonal madness. Same for Rebecca in terms of Bridezilla madness. Brittany...reminds me of a friend of mine. Eerily so. Creepy! 

oh my

The only dynamic I didn't really get was in the work setting.

Plot: The unfolding of Flo and Michael's relationship was very sweet. When he put his hand on her leg, I knew this story was a keeper. I liked the work stuff until the boss' death. I got the drama in the apartment, but the death/murder could have been a whole story unto itself. And the Paige, twist? Max twist? Girl, you had enough drama for at least three stories.

Writing: Girl, you are funny! I like your writing style. I also liked when you took Michael's POV. Those were my favorite parts. I think breaks between scene changes would have helped. I had a little trouble tracking at times. However, that stuff can easily be addressed. You've got what a lot of writers do not have - fluidity and attitude. You can't really teach those!



Author's Response: I agree with everything you're saying. When I wrote this story I was really experimenting with plot development and at the time all of my stories were all over the place lol. I love this story dearly but it got a bit ridiculous at times. Thank you for your review and for your others as well.

My Bully by AtMJsHouse Rated: M starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 686]
Summary: Past Featured Story

 

Yahara

 

 

Yahara has always been a nerd in school. She has had many bullys and being teased is nothing new. But when she goes off to college she and her life starts to turn for the worst. Especially with the bully of all bullys picking with her. What happens when Yahara begins to fall in love with her bully? Will he love her back? Will it work between them?


Categories: Humor, Romance, Thriller: 1982-1983, Bad: 1986-1990, Hurt/Comfort
Characters: Original Girl
General Warnings: None
Trigger Warnings: None
Series: Jazer's Library
Chapters: 84 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 121316 Read Count: 152323
[Report This] Published: Aug 02, 2011 Updated: Nov 07, 2013
Reviewer: Redone Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: Jun 01, 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I'm still in love with this story. So many questions remain that I want answers to! What's gonna happen with the ring? What's the deal with the money that was delivered to Eli? What did Tatiana whisper to Michael? What's up with Yahara eating more lately? What does the key open?

Please say that we'll be getting some of these answers from your creative mind, soon?!



Author's Response:

You will hun patience is a virtue lol I try not to rush this story I want each chapter to be thought out and written carefully. But I will be updating just wait on it.

Summary:

Cameron Jameson has worked for Michael as his assistant for two years. They had grown close whether she wanted them to or not. Many aren't able to see Michael when he's truly himself. She's one of the only people who knows Michael in and out. From his womanizing ways to his occasional partying. But what happens when she's his next target?


Categories: Hurt/Comfort, Humor, Romance, Suspense
Characters: Original Girl
General Warnings: None
Trigger Warnings: None
Series: Jazer's Library
Chapters: 38 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 59025 Read Count: 50553
[Report This] Published: Sep 29, 2011 Updated: Jun 11, 2014
Reviewer: Redone Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: Feb 01, 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Please update!



Author's Response: Ok

Reviewer: Redone Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: Apr 22, 2014 Title: Chapter 37: Chapter 37

Chilling. Thank you for another great update!



Author's Response: Aw thank you I'm so glad that you enjoyed it

Reviewer: Redone Signed
Date: Jun 11, 2014 Title: Chapter 38: Chapter 38

Woah. What a dark Michael. I don't believe he is going to change....I'd want him to, but it would have to be a huge change and those are rarely lasting.



Author's Response:

True and no problem. I knew I had to update eventually before you guys hunt me down lol

Reviewer: Redone Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: Jun 11, 2014 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Also - thank YOU for updating!

Summary:

He was born a Maestro. Music, love and myth is all he has ever known. He lives in a world magic created and music protects, but has sadly begun to fade. Those who fear him are trying to distroy him, and those who love him have no power to save him. What happens when the whispers grow silent, and the magic slowly begins to leave him behind. Can he be Maestro forever? 

 

 

Ghost    

 

 

ATTENTION READERS: MY UPDATES WILL NOT BE AS FREQUENT WITH THIS FANFIC AS IT WAS WITH MY OTHERS. I AM CURRENTLY WORKING ON MANY THINGS, INCLUDING OTHER NOVELS, SO AS A RESULT I WILL BE UPDATING ONLY A FEW TIMES A WEEK. I HOPE THIS DOES NOT CAUSE ME TO LOSE ANY OF YOU AS READERS. I LOVE YOU ALL VERY MUCH AND APPRECIATE YOUR LOYALY AND FEEDBACK. <3 


Categories: Romance, Adventure, Suspense, Hurt/Comfort, Fantasy, Adult
Characters: Original Girl
General Warnings: None
Trigger Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 32 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 114465 Read Count: 16709
[Report This] Published: Nov 04, 2011 Updated: Oct 31, 2016
Reviewer: Redone Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: Nov 16, 2014 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 26: Part Two

Ooooh. I love this twist! I'm sorry that I'm not writing more drawn out and elaborate responses. I'm simply too eager to get to the next chapter.

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Date: Nov 16, 2014 Title: Chapter 8: A Hand Magician

I love their conversations. I think you do an excellent job with dialogue. I'd love to hear more about their surroundings, to help me create a vivid image of where they are in a given scene.



Author's Response:

I am very surprised by this comment. You are the first reader EVER to suggest that I should add more detail into my chapters. Usually my readers comment on the fact that I am too detailed. I'm not really sure what to make of this. 

Reviewer: Redone Signed starstarstarstarstar
Date: Nov 16, 2014 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25: Alone in the snow

I get that you have your writing style. I'm just saying that stuff b/c you asked for honest feedback. I think my only other process comment would be to double check diction in some instances. I think autocorrect at times assumed the wrong word. Truthfully, when I comment on your writing, it isn't in comparison to what I read on this site. It's in comparison to published fiction, as your writing is generally well above the standard for fan fiction.

WTF at her selfishness, running away like that. jkafsdl;



Author's Response:

I am so moved by your words. I can't even begin to tell you how humbled I am by your comment. i had no idea you held my work in such high esteem. i am honored. Thank you so much for being so sweet. 

 

A.F.Q Jackson

Reviewer: Redone Signed
Date: Nov 16, 2014 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23: Emma's mistake.

Wtf. She is getting arrested?! Damn that D.S. and his love for doggedly going after people who he had personal issues with >.>