Date: Sep 09, 2017 12:11 am Title: Chapter 3
Wow. I just finished this. Wow. This was heartwrenching. You definitely captured the tension and emotion well and realistically if not a bit funny;). Frankly lol I sided with Lisa here, it's selfish of him to write her that letter, after he finds out she's trying to move on, just to give her another reminder of how he hurt her and how things ended. I mean it really doesn't seem like he's learned any lesson here and thinks antagonizing here is supposed to be a sign of his "sticking to his vows to her". Just sounds like he has an agenda again like he just wants her back for selfish reasons. I mean if a dude's gonna apologize, after so many fights etc, pretty words like mr darcy or noah calhoun did ain't gonna cut it as an apology. He needs to atone for her forgiveness not intimidate her into reading a passive aggressive version of one. In my opinion a lot of those interviews she was put into an awkward and uncomfortable position of having to answer questions about a relationship she didn't wanna have to defend over and over again, and theres that balance between wanting to be honest and accidentally treating it like a therapy session. A lot of it sounded like it was coming from a place of deep hurt and anger, I mean she's already had to literally watch her own father die from substance abuse she has no reason to want to involve herself with that again or be put in the position of being an emotional cheerleader or having to "save" him from his loneliness, boredom even himself. Anyway i did really love your story one of the more emotional and heartbreaking ones I've seen keep up the awesome work. And great portrayal of Lisa she cracks me up!
Date: Aug 30, 2017 07:40 pm Title: Chapter 3
Lisa was always hot tempered! lol I remember this relationship from when it happened in real life. It was odd but it worked in my eyes for some reason. It's sad that it fell apart in such a short time.
Author's Response: Opposites attract. My husband is completely different than me, so much so that I kinda dislike him sometimes. HAHA But he balances me out. I feel like it was probably like that for them.
Date: Aug 20, 2017 08:35 am Title: Chapter 3
Just read all of your updates and I'm hooked. Can't wait for the next installment. Thank you for the story!
Author's Response: Thank you. I went on a little vacation to see my family and neglected my story. I am sorry but your review has motivated me once again. So hopefully I have something up soon for you guys.
Date: Jul 31, 2017 11:16 am Title: Chapter 2
Short but really good and juicy. I really like it so far as long as she doesn't rip his wonderful loving heart out. And chapeau for writing a book although you have small kids to take care of. Love it thank you so much
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and always replying nicely :) I will make sure the next update is longer but it's just gonna take me a little extra time to post it
Date: Jul 30, 2017 08:33 pm Title: Chapter 2
I think she will read it! Darn was hoping for a longer chapter. But that's ok, I remember what having two little kids is like.
Author's Response: My oldest is 2 1/2 and the youngest is 1. Went crazy and had them close, haha. My husband is always away for work so it's really just me. It's amazing I even find time for Michael. If you want a longer chapter, the turnaround will be longer ;( but I will try my hardest.
Date: Jul 30, 2017 07:11 am Title: Chapter 1
Please continue! Even if I'm your only reader.
P.S. You are a great writer. Your style of writing is the type of things I like to read. I'm already hooked!
Author's Response: Thanks! I liked the way I started it, because I wanted the reader to connect to Lisa. But now I'm like I wish I had done it another way so everything flows better. Anyways, I'm working on the next part now and hopefully will have it up within hours.
Date: Jul 28, 2017 09:12 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh, wouldn't that be wonderful to have her change her mind about getting married to Michael Lockwood and get back together with her absolute high: Michael Jackson? They would have been a force to reckon with had it been that way in real life. Please consider a happy ending. That would really be standing out. And thanks for your kind reply
Date: Jul 27, 2017 01:53 pm Title: Chapter 1
Also one can tell that you seem to know your characters, meaning you must know a lot about Michael's life. And from what I have read so far, you I cued your first story off very well with this beginning. I am already mesmerized by it and eager to learn more and read your next chapter. So please: Continue. I mean finally, somebody seems to dare to write something nic about Lisa Marie's feelings towards Michael and hopefully a love story about them with a positive outcome??
Author's Response: First off, thank you! I like fan fiction that could be factual. So there will be heartbreak because sadly that's the way their story went. However, I do believe they both really loved each other till the end, so perhaps a happy ending can be made.