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Reviewer: m3chanicalan1mals Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 29, 2017 04:46 pm Title: Chapter 2: Origins

You have a good sotry going along so far! My only suggestions would be to make sure the dialogue is matched to the character who's speaking as it does get confusing at parts, lessen some of the spaces between paragraphs, and make sure CSS doesn't show up in between paragraphs. I can't wait to see what you have in store. ^.^

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your response! I'll try to follow along with your suggestions.

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