Date: Jun 15, 2017 12:58 pm Title: Chapter 11
The Neverland tour I can't wait to see what happens between Michael and Twinkle next. This is such a great story and thank you for posting it here as I mentioned i never got to finish reading before.
Thank-you for taking the time to read! I appreciate it so much! I'm tweaking the Neverland chapter. Hope you enjoy it when it's posted!
Date: Jun 15, 2017 12:38 pm Title: Chapter 10
Suzanne is not to be trusted and Twinkle needs to watch her back. I think there are definite mutual feelings. I don't think Michael will be mad if they get him in the water attack. He won't like losing but he will see it as all in fun and might even plot how to get them back for next time. lol
Date: Jun 15, 2017 12:22 pm Title: Chapter 9
I don't like Suzanne. I don't think she has romantic feelings for Michael at all she just wants to use him to get in good with her Dad again. I think Michael sees through her. I know it's hard but Gina and Crystal need to remember this is her job. I hope Crystal remembers to behave if she gets to talk to Michael.
Date: Jun 15, 2017 11:53 am Title: Chapter 8
Lucky girl Twinkle is. Anyone of us would die in her shoes. I can't wait to see what happens between her and Michael at Neverland. No wonder Michael doesn't like Suzanne she is throwing herself at him!!!
Wouldn't we all love to be in a Twinkles shoes! Next stop Neverland!
Date: Jun 14, 2017 06:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
I remember this story from another MJ fan fic board and I never got to read the whole story so now i am starting over and I am going to finish it. This poor girl with so much tragedy.
I remember you is it Nancy? :)
Yes it is posted on MJJU, And MjjLegion. I have changed it a bit since posting on mjju.
It is Nancy...your username is familiar. What forum do I know you from?
Thanks for reading!
Date: Jun 14, 2017 08:07 am Title: Chapter 11
I just read all 11 chapters and I LOVE this story. They are both so sweet and perfect for each other. I laughed so hard when he fell on the floor because he was staring at her ass. He comes off as perverted and innocent at the same time which is adorable.
I also like the pace....it is better to build a bit of suspense rather than have them get together immediately.
Now this Suzanne b&$#@, we all know she is going to try something. Michael seems REALLY uninterested so I don't think she will succeed in seducing him, but I wouldn't be surprised if she tries to get revenge on Twinkle some other way. She strikes me as a "if I can't have him, nobody will" type of psycho.
Thank-you so much for the lovely comment! I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. I'm glad you like the pace of the story. I often think that I should move it along faster, but when I go to write it just seems right to build on their attraction. Let's hope Suzanne doesn't spoil this for them!