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Reviewer: valeryjackson Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: Nov 06, 2016 07:47 am Title: Chapter 1

I've loved it. And i almost cried.
You did a great job :) can't wait to read more fiction from you.

Reviewer: BlackMercury Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 15, 2016 08:37 am Title: Chapter 1

All I can say is WOW! I wasn't expecting the ending but I loved it. I can't wait for you to continue this story.

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reading and responding! Glad you enjoyed it. :)

Reviewer: Areyoulistening Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 14, 2016 02:30 pm Title: Chapter 1

Absolutely amazing! I cried!

Is it true, though? That he found the pills like that?



Author's Response:

Hi. :) Thank you so much for reading and replying! 

I'm really not sure if it's true or not. It's just an idea that I've always had about how their relationship may have started to go downhill, so I wrote this based on that theory. I have heard rumors in the past about her not wanting to have kids with him or not being ready to have kids with him when he wanted them, but I don't know if there's any truth to that. 

I'm so touched that you enjoyed the story. It really means a lot. Thanks again! 

 

Reviewer: Annies_NOTokmj Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Aug 14, 2016 12:02 pm Title: Chapter 1

I like it! Please, keep going.‘🙋🙌

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reading and replying!

This is actually a one-shot so that's the end of this story, but I will post more stories soon. So glad you enjoyed this one. :)

 

 

Reviewer: The man with no name Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 14, 2016 10:53 am Title: Chapter 1

You're welcome. You deserve it! :)

The ending is truly a surprise which makes your story even greater and very realistic. Because in my opinion, Michael is not a saint. I am very glad that you kept it that way. It shows that Michael is only a human. If Lisa is a liar, then Michael is a cheater (and he had had 'things' with Debbie even before he found out about these bills).

To me, the last part is like a sweet revenge, but it was even scarier than that. I think because it also showed that beside being a wonderful man and a nice husband, Michael could be considered as a cold and ruthless person. I feel like this is the way he thinks in his head: If you cannot do it, there are others can. English is not my first language so I cannot find enough words to describe what I think and how I feel. I am not even sure if I chose right words :)). But yeah, that's how I feel about the ending.

In my opinion, 'Void' is not dark. It's realistic and emotional :).

I am looking forward to reading more your work :).

P/S: I have this question, can you help me out? :) If Michael had received 'the news' four weeks ago, then he must have found out that there was nothing wrong with him. So why did he not have any doubt about Lisa? Why did he still think it was his fault? Thank you.

Author's Response:

I have to agree with you about Michael not being a saint. He is flawed in just about everything that I've written about him. I like it that way. It does make the stories more realistic and makes it more fun for me as a writer to explore his "personal demons." I couldn't imagine writing about the sweet, innocent Michael that he portrayed to the media a lot of times because I believe him to be much more complex than that. He makes for the perfect protagonist (and sometimes, the antagonist). :)

 

I would have never guessed English is not your first language. You described what you meant perfectly. I understand and completely agree about the "if you cannot do it, there are others who can." I believe that philosophy probably applied to Michael in many aspects of his life--personal, professional, etc.

 

I'm happy that the story was so realistic to you. That was my goal! I actually wrote this prior to Lisa Marie's interview with Oprah a few years ago and I was surprised to see some similarities between this story and what Lisa said in the interview. 

 

I'll try to post another story soon. Most of my old stuff has to be rewritten. I was much younger when I wrote it, and it shows. :)

 

To answer your question at the end: That was a mistake on my part because now that you've mentioned it, I realize that receiving the news 4 weeks prior would have meant that he knew nothing was wrong on his end. Shhhh, don't tell anyone. :) I'll probably go back and edit that. Thanks for mentioning it!

 

Reviewer: The man with no name Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 13, 2016 11:38 pm Title: Chapter 1

I cried when I read all those words and feeling from Michael. They were so sincere, emotional and so real. In short, you've done an amazing job! Your writing is really great!

But the last part, the way Michael behaved so calmly and sweetly while saying these words...Girl, you made me almost choke by my own tears and emotion! The sweeter he was, the creepier everything was! That was so scary! Like for real...I was speechless. I don't know whether to continue cry or not. But Michael's gentle way of comportment and talking all these words, I am sure that it hurt more than a slap to Lisa's face.

I really like it. Thank you! I think you are a very good writer.

Author's Response:

Wow, what a review! I'm so glad you were able to connect with this story so much! It was hard to write. I cried while writing it. And I'm [happily] surprised with your reaction to the ending. Admittedly, I always hated it and I was gonna change it before posting it here but now I'm glad that I didn't.

 

Thanks again for taking the time out to read and leave such a great comment. I have other short stories--most of them not as dark as this one. I'll try to post them soon if you all want more. :)

Reviewer: Val Jackson Signed [Report This]
Date: Aug 13, 2016 05:54 pm Title: Chapter 1

I enjoyed your writing. Excellent!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reading and responding! I really appreciate it and I'm glad you enjoyed the story. :)

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