Date: Jun 23, 2016 11:59 pm Title: Chapter 3- Revealing the Truth
Hey! Sorry it took me so long to read all of the chapters. I saw this story a while back and only read the dream sequence, but I gotta say, you have a very good sense of writing, and the effort you put into this story really shows.
The 80s references are a lot of fun. I was a little worried that you were making Michael seem too childish, but in the scene with her grandma I really felt like it was him. Your characterization of Dionne is also very good, and I love how she has her own inner conflicts without seeming petty or melodramatic. The fact that she rejected her grandma's religion for genuine reasons shows strength and practicality rather than just dumb stubbornness. Speaking of which, is Arudianism a real religion, or did you make it up for the story?
Overall, I'm very interested in this story and look forward to seeing where it goes. :)
Author's Response: Hello, Miri! Thank you very much for this great and very detailed review. I don't get much views on this so I was shocked to see one here. No Arudianism is something I made up. Im glad you enjoyed. I'll get back to updating as soon as Im done with Mr and Mrs J :)
Date: Mar 23, 2016 02:44 pm Title: Prologue- Calls Into the Night
You put the picture on the summary but where the tree symbol is place the link of where the image is and place it there then click insert. Hope that helps! 😄
Author's Response: Oh OK thanks. I'll try it
Date: Mar 23, 2016 01:47 pm Title: Prologue- Calls Into the Night
Ummm... I think you put your banner picture in the wrong box, O.O
other than that, good story!
Author's Response: Im new and Im still trying to figure out how to use this site. That pic is the cover of the book do you know where im supposed to put it? thank you for the review