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Reviewer: Beatit777 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 21, 2017 02:50 pm Title: Ch.11

I'm imagining this conversation LOL... Chris sure thinks highly of himself doesn't he?...LOL No, seriously he's cool :D.

Will be interested to see what type of girls this 'fine glass of chocolate milk (I love that description, btw :D)' is able to attract...LOL :)

Author's Response:

Let's keep that secret between you and I we don't want his ego to get Eben more inflated lool. The fool will have several at his beck and call. Typical lol

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Date: May 18, 2017 07:02 pm Title: Ch.10

I could see Chris in my mind too LOL... He's one of the good ones, MJ's lucky to have him for a friend :)

Nothing like a good friend to help a person take their mind off an unhappy situation :)

Author's Response:

Chris is handful but he means well lool. He really is and he arrived in the nick of time to do so.with all his craziness and all lol

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Date: May 14, 2017 05:49 pm Title: Ch.9

Wowwwww....

Hell of a secret to have to keep...

Let's hope Amber will forgive Michael after she lets it sink in WHY he had to keep this particular secret...

Look forward to reading more :)

Author's Response:

indeed it is lol. let's hope she does but for now she's allowing her emotions ride her judgement. thanks mary <3

Reviewer: Beatit777 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 13, 2017 03:21 pm Title: Ch.8

Wowwwwww....no wonder Michael is trying to hide his family from Amber

Joseph is acting like some sort of mob boss or other...

Maybe it's time for Michael to warn Amber, secrecy is not always a good thing, impo

Look forward to more :)

Author's Response:

I cannot blame him one bit. Joseph is crazy and obsessed with moment. It could be time to tell her about it but we won't know how she will react when she finally finds out the truth...lol. 

Reviewer: Beatit777 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 09, 2017 04:39 pm Title: Ch.7

Hm...maybe Michael thinks Marlon will spill a few 'beans' about what's going on in their family...

Look forward to finding out what's really going on :)

Author's Response:

Perhaps so he really doesn't want Amber to know his crazy life behind closed doors and she will find out eventually lol. Thanks Mary <3

Reviewer: Beatit777 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 04, 2017 08:40 pm Title: Ch. 6

I'd always had a feeling Michael got along better with his mom/sisters than with his dad/brothers. Good depiction of that in this chapter...

No errors that I can see...

Love imagining what it would have been like to go to school with Michael in rl :)

Look forward to more :)

Author's Response:

I agree he might have felt a closer bond to them maybe because they didn't tease him lol. Ah going to school would have been awesome with him lol. Thanks Mary 

Reviewer: Beatit777 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Apr 29, 2017 06:42 pm Title: Ch.5

Well, put it this way, it was right for Michael...LOL

And at least now they won't be late for school

Author's Response:

Typical Michael Lmao and yes luckily they weren't for now.

Reviewer: Beatit777 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Apr 25, 2017 09:29 pm Title: Ch.4

LOL, love reading about Michael's playful side. Nice to see the two made up.

Hm...wonder if Joseph is the reason Michael doesn't want people visiting his house?...

Look forward to more :)

Author's Response:

That could be the reason with how tight Joseph's leash on the family is. Mj loves playing around lol.

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Date: Apr 23, 2017 06:03 pm Title: Ch.3

Hm...maybe Michael will open up to Amber when he's ready.

I agree with Amber's mother...ijs :)

Author's Response:

I agree too and mothers always know best lol. 

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Date: Apr 19, 2017 05:50 pm Title: Ch. 2

They're in the same class in school...talk about a small world :) lol.

Love imagining them playing together :)

Author's Response:

hehe little rascals, they are just adorable in their own right lol.

Reviewer: Beatit777 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Apr 17, 2017 11:26 am Title: Ch. 1

I always enjoy stories where Michael and the original girl are kids :)...those are my favorites :)

Very enjoyable...sweet interactions :).

Look forward to reading more :)

Author's Response:

heeey! i love them as much as you do lool, and they are indeed! enjoy the rest <3 

Reviewer: RavenAngels Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Feb 05, 2017 07:41 pm Title: Ch.13

Daaaamn, Chris is going in! That rejection from Michael, though.. I'd die.

Author's Response:

hello! yes chris wouldn't allow his good buddy be left in misery for her thats just not in his nature and the rejection was hard to write at the time but they'll make up eventually lol. thanks for readin enjoy the rest <33 

Reviewer: DareToDream Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Nov 14, 2016 07:44 am Title: The End.

What a lovely adventurous way to escape, on horses. They are going to have a great life together. So glad I'm all caught up. And I'm sure California Dreamin is a worth reading experience too. Well done Lorry!



Author's Response:

Finnnnallly your all caught up! took you long enough tut tut lool. there is so much for you to read in the sequel! thanks ebony! <3

Reviewer: darkmc912 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Oct 28, 2016 05:13 pm Title: Ch.16

Oh. My. God. I cannot stop reading this! Haha 

Well, I'll start by saying that I am a huge fan of Chris Tucker! From his movies to his comedy...it's so awesome how he's friends with Michael! You made Chris into such a likeable, funny character which is great since we all know he's a reknowned comedian. I feel relived that he came in to save the day by rekindling his friendship with Michael, especially after what happened between him and Amber. I laughed when he gave Amber the nickname "shrimp"😂. Also love how Chris stood up for Michael and made Amber realise her mistake. In addition, it's nice to see that Chris doesn't hate Amber anymore but I sense there will always be a rift between them over what happened.

THE MAFIA?! I was just as shocked as Amber! I agree, she does have a little bit of a temper. I guess both were at fault. He didn't tell her, and when he did, she didn't allow him to explain. But again, super glad they worked things out thanks to Chris and Marlon's little plan. 

For some reason I feel like Marlon was just Amber's (sounds harsh) replacement for Michael. She clearly missed him, and maybe Marlon was the closest thing she had to Michael? 

Lastly - this Angelina girl needs to chill! Michael and Amber just made up there is no way they can possibly let her ruin everything! Hell to the no! 

Sorry for my lengthy reviews - I love this story & it just forms many opinions from me! 



Author's Response:

I must be doing a good job for you to not stop reading lmao. yes who doesn't love themselves Chris Tucker? i love him esp in rush hour and without chris there wouldn't be any fun without him haha. those two will never get along even for mj's sake loool. yes the mafia the plot twist to end it all! imagine if the music gig didn't work back then who knows what Joseph would have gotten them into? but at least it worked out after awhile. i agree marlon was used as a scapegoat for Amber since she didn't have her bo around her. Yass girl angelina needs to step out of the way she ain't needed just when the two have rekindled! hell to the nah xD

and no problem for lenghty reviews i love em xD 

thanks for reading hun <3 

Reviewer: darkmc912 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: Oct 28, 2016 04:32 pm Title: Ch.4

I'm so happy I got round to starting reading this story, and I have so much to say!

First off, I was smiling throughout these past couple chapters. I really love the way you wrote these two children, every interaction, every gesture, every word they spoke was filled with cuteness! 

Secondly, I think you depicted young Michael amazingly, especially given his situation at the time. I totally understand why he acted the way he did, and I think the way it played out with Amber apologising and them having a water gun fight (classic Michael) was spectacular. Really, very heartwarming. 

Finally, this story reminds me of my own! Part of my story also features young Michael and his best friend, and it's really refreshing to read this - I feel like I gain some sort of insight by reading about how other people portray his childhood and all. 

I'm definitely going to keep reading this, as you already know I really want to get on to the next instalment in this series! Amazing work!! <3

 



Author's Response:

No thank you taking the effort to read it! well I wanted them to have a sweet childhood but every friendship has it's trials lol. aw thank you I tried to make mj as fun and adorable like he was in his younger years I'm glad our stories connected somehow in his growing up I wanted him to have a decent childhood.

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