Date: Aug 31, 2015 03:58 pm Title: Prologue
Just read the whole thing for some reason when i first looked at it, it only showed the first line when i first looked at it. I dont see any spelling mistakes just a few edits is all thats needed. You captured him brilliantly especially with his inner dialogue!
Date: Aug 29, 2015 02:56 pm Title: Prologue
I love the premise of your story!! Although the 1st chapter is short its really impactful and it draws you in. I personally LOVE the image size because you can see the intricate beautiful details of the abandoned city hall station better but apparently its against the rules to have it that big :/ http://www.nycsubway.org/wiki/Station:_City_Hall_(IRT_East_Side_Line) heres more info on the station it wasnt used that long and apparently its hard to get to. Love this! Please update soon!