Date: Dec 23, 2015 10:59 pm Title: How it All Began
Wow... :) Very awesome, as well as very neat, too (although there was a misspelling of "disappointed" that I noticed, but every writer makes mistakes from time to time).
Keep up your super-cool, very brilliant and phenomenally creative writing... :)
Date: Jul 04, 2015 05:00 pm Title: Chapter 4
Very neat, as well as very well-written, too. I like it, especially these parts:
"So you gave her flowers? You're such a pussy."
"It's called making amends Jermaine. Learn it sometime."
"Michael it's ok if you like the girl. I wanna tap that succulent ass too." Randy said walking up next to Jermaine. I sighed out of frustration.
"That's why you assholes can't keep a girl, all you want to do is hit it and leave it." I said rolling my eyes. They still make fun of me to this day that I'm a virgin. Not that I didn't want to have sex, I just have't found the one.
"Oh really. Then why was Jasmine in my bed riding this." He said pointing to his crotch. "And not you. Oh wait that's right, you didn't wanna sleep with her because you're still a fucking virgin!" Jermain said right in my face. I felt anger rising in me.
"THAT'S ENOUGH!" I heard Joseph yell. He came down the hall way and slapped Jermaine right across the face.
"You have no right bringing that up in that boys face. Disgraceful and disrespectful. So what if he's a virgin? That mean he ain't knocked up no one and ain't got no STD's. Get out of my damn face."
Jermaine and Randy walked off. Joseph looked at me, patted me on the back and walked off.
Jasmine was the love of my life. Together since freshman year, we was attached to the hip. One weekend she went to a friends house and by Monday, she changed. She started asking for sex....alot. I told her I wanted to wait but she wasn't having that. One day I came home early from Baseball pratice and saw her riding Jermaine on the couch. I was angry, hurt, depressed, and pissed. Joseph wanted to kill him, Mother, Janet, and Latoya were upset and angry. The rest of my brothers were dissapointed. I don't know if for me, or to the fact that they didn't sleep with her first.
"I'm sorry I don't know what-" I cut him off with a small kiss on the lips.
"I've always had a crush on you. It's gonna take alot more than steamy kisses to win me over though. Let's start over?" I said. He grinned.
"I would love that." He helped me up and I started dusting myself off. I held my hand out to him.
"Meghan. Meghan Tranior." He smirked.
"Michael. Michael Jackson."
I am glad that Janet stood up for Meghan the way she did, and that Meghan appreciated that, too. :) Keep up your super-neat, very phenomenal and creatively beautiful writing... :)