Date: Jan 01, 2014 02:14 pm Title: Touring and the Passionate Night
I'll admit that I jumped straight to the sex at the bottom but I went back and read the rest eventually XD Sorry for my weirdness. I enjoy your writing and I'm on a mission to make sure any newer writers have supporters because honestly, this story is very sweet. You could make some improvements but I have no doubt that you will. :) and this is so much better than the pretentious bullshit usually posted on here. Honestly.
Date: Jan 01, 2014 02:09 pm Title: The Surprising Photoshoot
Wish this was longer! XD I love how you included real events from Mike's life and I admittedly like anything that puts Joe in a bad light. Good job, dear. Also her undying love for Michael is wonderful and I think you do a good job at capturing their real life friendship/relationship.
Date: Jan 01, 2014 02:06 pm Title: Together Forever
I like that this is like a play. :) I always enjoy stories told in present tense as well because it makes me feel like I'm there in the moment. Keep up the good work. :)
Thanks! Glad you like it!
Date: Jan 01, 2014 02:04 pm Title: A Year Later
Their relationship, Lisa and Michael, I mean, is very cute! One thing that I can see that you could improve on is your punctuation. It makes your sentences a tad hard to follow but I like what you have here. :)
Thanks for the tip.